the serpent's syndication

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Im the serpentine Cognition of devine apperition,
Antagonistic conception of pessimistic deception,
Characteristic perception of imagination is comprehension
contemplation of apprehension is the dimension: syndication
The vindication of pessimistic numerology so now contamination..
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The sumbmission of cogniton is inspiration to Damnation..
Personification of contamination is morality penetrated,
Reality instigated from personality insulated with demise Errupts.
Humans convise what corrupts and does exersise what obstructs.
I prophesise what disrupts the pattern of contemplation and spirit,
cannabalization is the lyric of mummification..I fear it...
I hear it,the depression,opression,and pocession of my mind,
compression has me confined and supression has me resigned,
Intertwined with phsycotic,hypnotic,errotic hallucinations I exist,
Emancipation is dismissed and exhilliration missed,now i consist of

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The apperition of premonition ellucidates my perserverence and hope,
In coherence with broke emotional conviction,contradiction invades,
A depiction cascades as eviction of escapades,my palisade crumbles,
My serenade stumbles and falls to the serpent of apprehension,
Begins to repent comprehension of jubilation,emasculation proceeds,
concentration bleeds and its coagulation feeds the imagination of pain.
orchestration of disdain engulfs my feeble stature....
In desperation i cry out,needing rapture...My bleeding begins to capture,
The dispature of dispondency insnairs my reality..my morallity..mentality..


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Serenades become the grenades and parades of perverse interpretation,
I traverse the ornamentation of diverse hallucination,im confused..lost..
Ammused,the hollocost of imagination becomes lubrication for evil,
Its incubation,the people so easily pocessed by corruption and lust..
Depressed,the destruction of trust is obstruction,i combust and wither..
Disgust the deliver of a robust shiver cascading through my mind..
No evading,whence confined..

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too much vocab for my likes but you got the flow down... pretty nice

well im just intelegent.
Intenall rhymescheme my favorite style too.
anyways uppin

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you had good vocab but i think you used it unnecesarily
and i think that threw ya flow off a bit
good multies

overall this was an aight drop i didnt like it too much
just because i felt you used vocab unnesseceraliy

well i felt i needed to use it.

yeah this was a good piece feelin had you approched all the shit to it flowed nice feeling the vocab and imegery keep spittin and doing ya thing homie stay up

thank you.

uppin

I'm not tryna hate, but you shoulda at least found out the definition of some of the words before you used them, because a lot of it doesn't make sense unless they're some sort of complicated metaphors I don't understand. To me it looks as if you just used a large number of words without knowing their actually meaning, in an attempt to sound intelligent. I may be wrong, but that's how it appears to me.

Makkin ^^^ your right.

Just because one uses vocab doesnt make one great. People get confused between using vocab in rap. Vocab in rap is making words intelligent enough to mix in with your subjects. And how many "ions"/"tions" did you use in ya verses ;) lol that made me laugh. Anyways man, keep at it, and if your that intelligent, then you can come up with more creative and original stuff.

Keep practicing ma'man.

ilike ion rhymes for one thing.
and next,i know the exact meaning of every single one of those words.metaphors are all around in there and every single word i used came from my own brain with no help of a dictionary.if you are unable to understand the metaphorical way i express myself it isnt my fault,for i know every word i say.about the ion rhymes,its part of my style using them because i can make good metaphors and personify emotions like indignation and contemplation,stuff like that.but anyways im trying to explain that i talk with very complex metaphors and not to jump to conclusions,beacause i assure you,every single word i say has a relation with one another.

I clearly understand every type of word you have just said. God, I aint no illiterate geek.

I am not trying to critisise you however. There is a thing called over-vocab, believe me, I used to be the exact same when I started talking about intergalactic conquistador cerebrel consumptions. You can be equally as clever if you toned down your vocab abit. Im not saying toning down your vocab to levels of P Diddy, just tone it down enough so everyone can clearly understand ya properly. You can be equally clever without mass loads of vocab. However, your vocab is mad though, and I did enjoy reading ya shit.

and this was a keystyle...you should see my real words..
But i like vocabulary and big syllablle rhymes along with complex metaphors.
and if some can get it,i do so thats all i need.

upppin for the last.