Governed by Shadows (continued)

~Governed By Shadows~
Part 1

Can you even see from my level? Distorted views beneath a worlds rubble
Rebels roam vast wastelands of a high-tech societies crumbled remnants
Fumbled politics elude R moral compass, hence anxieties double penance
Pompous figures slander he w/grounded center, elitists' in full splendor?
Rendered visions spark social givens like elusive members of skull N bones
A Clandestine branch sway's in the shadows of three flimsily rooted twigs
Majestic tops peek at full bloom yet quiver as false flocks seek out R doom
Presume danger looms in dark of mental gloom under rein of sadistic goon
A party that bathes under the Damascus moon begs 4 mushroom plumes
Inciting terror ignites preemptive measures impacting every fabric of life
Defense mechanisms engage in this battle torn night, rage erased all lines
Between what's wrong & what's right, deprived of sight is mans only plight
Will he soon see the Devine path set before him and shown in radiant light?

Governed by he who walks N the shadow of night, cloaked in secrecy yet
A presence brilliantly Drenched in folklore, passed off as political hype...

Shadows cast shrouds over informative might, blankets' population despite
The Intel it cites, true agendas at war broadcasting from towering heights
Contrite whoas echoed from polite foes, suppose a new truth's exposed
Would our HOUSE fold under weight of untolds'...? Values erode in a Flash
News splash!!! Administrations dark past sync'd up in digital frames hashed
Together, explained only by partisan gains, campaigns trained to drain all
Remains of HIS Devine reign, pains me to watch such biased exchange
Deranged policies practiced by the estranged leaders of world sovernginty
Translation: Government free from external control- Does this really show?
In societies Governed by Shadows Truth is... Well WE may never know...

~Governed By Shadows~
Part 2


Covert warriors with secret orders slip thru boarders behind closed quarters
Gather Intel in violation of major sanctions w/a close eye on hostile nations
Radical organizations depend on state representation thorough examinations
Proves positive collaborations were whispered aspirations for mushroom skies
Shadow tactics defy all conventional cries untold truths and systematic lies
Interception of signals w/gizmos designed to be mounted on gimbals aligned
On refined tiers that can clearly see thru dense cover w/auto focus imagery
From high in the sky perched w/a birds eye view system set to search mode
Unmanned aerial drones head home target acquired impact backed by hellfire
High tech assasinations now carried out under a cover of stealth penetration
Hints of espionage in open dialogue an industry sabotaged by societal flaws
Heed the writings on the wall radical attack hounds often overstep bounds
Ignorance astounds my light browns, when their arrogant frowns cast down
On the people’s majority, further inspection detects lies in pseudo news story

Governed by he who walks N the shadow of night, cloaked in secrecy yet
A presence brilliantly Drenched in folklore, passed off as political hype...

Strategic assaults launched in multiple mediums, question who's feeding'em
With wars fought in the shadow realms head figures are found at the helms
From Crowned rulers to world leaders... The Sheiks, Sultans and land owners
Prime ministers & those elected sinister administer a skewed form of morality
Brutality based tactics 'shielded' from reality, in actuality 'shadows' DO exist
Resist conventional trains of thought, normality will never expose such a plot
In others words think outside the 'box', transmitted illness often kills da flock
In the age of Misinformation, communications lost, lip movements squashed!
At what cost do we combat this loss? A fine 'tuned' price tag already bought
Sits atop our watch, building an army of set-top soldiers, while war is fought
The battle rages on blink and the image's gone! Can you not see the pawns?
We're societal puppets, our masses strung by the few, mislead and confused
Yet we refuse anything but the News as reported by the channel we choose
Ignorant to both views, in a world Governed by Shadows we all tend to lose...



To be continued...

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wow pretty long read,

the multies were sick, and were used well.
topic was real different to me, and you used it very well.


stand out lines, that i liked.

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Originally Posted by bounce

Rebels roam vast wastelands of a high-tech societies crumbled remnants
Fumbled politics elude R moral compass, hence anxieties double penance

Inciting terror ignites preemptive measures impacting every fabric of life
Defense mechanisms engage in this battle torn night, rage erased all lines

Covert warriors with secret orders slip thru boarders behind closed quarters
Gather Intel in violation of major sanctions w/a close eye on hostile nations
Radical organizations depend on state representation thorough examinations

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lot more great lines, this was a damn consistant piece and you didn't fall off at any times.


everything was so consistant, flow, topic, multies.


legend material.

^Thank you kind sir,
Just something I'm doing in stages, since time is not my friend as of late. I hope to finish it (part 3), shit who am I lying to, I hope to find time to start it... Thanks for taking the time to read, I know it's kind of complex with all the metaphors, but I think it's worth the time. Although it's a political piece, I designed this to be bipartisan as possible, since the focus is of a bipartisan nature...

I am glad you think it's legend material, as I did put some effort into this, not to mention years of research...

yo this shit was deep hella long but worth the read!!!!!!!!!!!!
PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR AND VOTE ON MY BATTLE!!!!
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This really amazed me...Im too tired to go into detailed feedback tonight but I promise I will tomorrow. You had some very creative metaphores in there, and had an ingenious insight towards the topic. Everything about this was great, everything. Dope peice Bounce, like I said Ill give you some detailed feedback on this when Im not so tired. Hope to see part 3 to this soon....

Peace,
Mez

Thanks Mez,
I fully understand being tired an all, so no sweat, I just hope you enjoyd the read. If there is anything that needs to be explained in detail, please do not hesitate to ask.

This was a pretty in depth piece....I remember reading the first one a little while back...the second one did not dissapoint....Nice job...Alot of metaphors and references in this piece...It seems your research paid off...The layout was nice, structure, flow....was all nice too....Creative and original with the subject and a well thought out piece overall....Keep em Comin....I'll be sure to check out pt.3....Peace.....

P.s....If you get a chance....Hit up one of the Open Mics in my sig...Thanx..

yo bounce thanx for hittin up my battle!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks for taking the time to read and reply guy's. I will return the favor as soon as I get a chance.

Bounce

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*like a lion in the mornning, when he's rising*

im appologize for the lack of participation this site gives to the more fortunates. This read was extensive and really seemed barbarick at times. I felt like i was sitting in the middle of Dooms day while reading it. It really made an interesting read..full of great imagery and overall writters voice. I could see this performed at a spoken word of some type. Very articulate and percise on the views as well..Nice work

Damn bounce this was great. You had amazing details which made your piece that much better in my eyes. Imaginary was dope, you have a nice way about putting the thoughts in my head. Overall great piece I can wait to read Part 3.

I don’t even know where to begin.

I really enjoyed this script. At first I was tempted not to read it because it is a really long read, but it was really worth it.

This song had a great usage of multi’s along with good flow. It has a powerful message to it, but still kept a consistent pace.


Well done.

Thanks guy's, I'm glad people are digging this, it has a great amount of meaning to me. So it's really great to have such replies. I really appreicate the feedback guy's. Remember you can ask me to explian a certain part for indepth clarification as to my meaning. I actually like to break down my drops that way.

Thanks
Bounce

Shit.. this was fucking great man.. major props first and foremost.. you kept me reading the whole time, w/ great apprehension about where you going w/ this piece.. not many people can do that.. flow was on-point.. and the multi`s.. jesus man, they were fucking sick.. the story told was great.. imagery was excellent.. you pulled this shit off .. the message is very clear and powerful.. and i honestly can`t wait for the next chapters.

Prime ministers & those elected sinister administer a skewed form of morality
Brutality based tactics 'shielded' from reality, in actuality 'shadows' DO exist
Resist conventional trains of thought, normality will never expose such a plot
In others words think outside the 'box', transmitted illness often kills da flock
^ Really stood out to me.. great work man.

If you get the time, check this out, thanks duke - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1568139

^I'm glad you liked it, and I really apopreciate your feedback. I was way ahead of you on scoping out that peice of yours, I'll be looking for more from you in the future...

Thanks all... Keep um coming...

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Part 1...
I think you did this before but just re-released it to go along with Part 2..but since I didn't see it before Ima break this down too....this was deep man....The vocab was insane with multis galore....however....I think you may have overdone it wit them..if that's possible...they were cool to me to start out with..but I got sick of them by the end...but it's stilla great talent to be able to use them like you do....The images I got from this were wreckin balls smashing dow buildings..no idea why....The emotion was dope too...really felt the effort you put intot his piece man...

Part 2... Aight man...sorry for the delay....once again you came with blistering multis and vocab...and I didn't mean any disrespect when I said I got sick of them up there^...jus meant your complexity overmatched my brain power lol. I liked part 2 better I think, the multis and internal rhyming flowed a lot smoother for me and it was an easier read, imagry and emotion were still dope as hell in this piece. Congrats on the Legends nomination :)





Please peep "Behind the Scenes" or "The Giving type" or "Til Death Do Us Part" in my sig. Or if your feeling ambitious you can peep all 3, I won't hold it against you :)

if this is what i think it is you know i liked it a lot ..

:)

much love on the reply to my post so ima return the favor

Fist off this shyt was real good, no lie, cant even criticize it haha, keep doin ya thang

Hey thanks for the feedback guy's, sorry I killed it for you Lyric, but it is what it is...

Oh and feeble if you are refering to the audios I let you hear that time, yes this was one in work. Actually I'm still working on it, production wise, I've been busy with my daughter, no time for this stuff. I think you liked the other one more, Lifes rains, the one grounded in science... W/e thanks for peeping...

This was a bit hard to read for me...I'm not an expert sorry...but throwing out the flow...to take it for its face value...this was dope...the imagery was set and you kept the picture going...it was like flipping through channels on tv...

"Majestic tops peek at full bloom yet quiver as false flocks seek out R doom
Presume danger looms in dark of mental gloom under rein of sadistic goon
A party that bathes under the Damascus moon begs 4 mushroom plumes"
My favorite line besides the last couple...

"We're societal puppets, our masses strung by the few, mislead and confused
Yet we refuse anything but the News as reported by the channel we choose
Ignorant to both views, in a world Governed by Shadows we all tend to lose..."
Them right there^^^

This was a real nice read and well worth the time...

We get 86400 seconds per day to spend how we choose and this is considered an investment...

pz

One

I liked this....I felt what you was sayin and I like your creative wordin, it wasnt like you were tryin to hard with the vocabulary..Nice drop

Thanks to all, your feedback encourages me to drop in the OM section more often, I have not been very active in OM, but I try to make an effort to post every now and then.

Bounce

^Post more Bounce. i finished my criitique

^Thanks lyric, I will. This shit just made legends, damn it, now what do I do about part three? Anyone have some suggestions. Do I just kill it, or do I relese it under another name? Fuck what do I care, i HAVEN'T EVEN WROTE IT YET....