10 lines each
no bull shit you know the drill
check in you have 30 min to spit.
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10 lines each
no bull shit you know the drill
check in you have 30 min to spit.
ch-ch-checking in yo. What's with this 50 character min. shit?
Alright, check this out:
Time to raise the stakes Semper Fi
Why do you think your so fresh, so fly?
Your not fly since you chill with that kid, S. Dizzle
This is too easy; my career's gonna sizzle
I'm shattering your dreams in this crazy rap game
I think my rhymes are putting you to shame
You loosing to a sixteen year old there son
Might as well loose your life - take my gun
But don't worry I'll keep spitting when your gone
I'll even be smoking cigars with millionaire Sean Jean
what? :thefinger
Enterin helter skelter... and thinkin to put my name in a spin
Washed up I'll leave you dead like the language its written in
Slow down as he tries to accelerate on a path to elevate
Speed of light or slow as a slug, I'll beat him at any rate!
Let him meditate and give his punches the essence...........
Probably alias's on this site 15 years old still, aint progressin?
Neither of his pics stick they out of place like punches he loaded
So I'll rip him and them off the boards like they were on post-its
Always faithful will usually work in any case but its understandable
Bite from the dictionary then maybe your verse will be comendable
uppin #1 ***********************************************
By the way your 16? I'm 14 hahahahaha....
Uppin #2
what kind of 14 year old knows what 'comendable' means?
Do you even know what this is son: :hump:
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Uppin #3................................................ ..
not such a good battle
Semper- overall man your verse was kind of descent because your was good, and your structure was fine, but the whole time you didnt diss him at all, cause you didnt even throw anything up about his profile or posts or anything, so that isnt too good, but i think the rest was alright
24-overall man you can really tell that your new to this because your structure was completely basic, i dont think text rappin is good unless you have longer lines, to me this wasnt good cause your lines were too short. you didnt really have any punches, or personals, no mutlis, or anything, but you did ATTEMPT a punch
V/Semper still ? why
lmao 24 do you even know what tha is. lol jk, this was a nice battle but i honestly like seeing and using multis so if i was to say any thing i would definately go with semper fa'sho
24...
Time to raise the stakes Semper Fi
Why do you think your so fresh, so fly?
^^no punch here, just filler
Your not fly since you chill with that kid, S. Dizzle
This is too easy; my career's gonna sizzle
^^again not a punch
I'm shattering your dreams in this crazy rap game
I think my rhymes are putting you to shame
^^self glor, its a no no.. punch at him
You loosing to a sixteen year old there son
Might as well loose your life - take my gun
^^again wheres the punch
But don't worry I'll keep spitting when your gone
I'll even be smoking cigars with millionaire Sean Jean
^^more self glor'
semper
Enterin helter skelter... and thinkin to put my name in a spin
Washed up I'll leave you dead like the language its written in
^^not really too good,, self glor', bit of play tho, so..
Slow down as he tries to accelerate on a path to elevate
Speed of light or slow as a slug, I'll beat him at any rate!
^^more self glor'... why?
Let him meditate and give his punches the essence...........
Probably alias's on this site 15 years old still, aint progressin?
^^sort of a weak punch
Neither of his pics stick they out of place like punches he loaded
So I'll rip him and them off the boards like they were on post-its
^^attempted personal... no real punch tho
Always faithful will usually work in any case but its understandable
Bite from the dictionary then maybe your verse will be comendable
^^badly worded, but i saw what you were getting at
overall, thought this was a weak battle.. alot of the liner by both had no punches, mainly self glorification... which is not what a battle is about... semper although weak, did have one of two punches, whereas 24 had none that i saw... so vote/semper
could you both hit this.... thnx
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=134526
let me explain sumthing b4 i vote, battles are sumthing where you diss the person you battle hence the word battle look it up!!!!!!!!!!(this is for 24-ba)
Structure:Semper had this thru out his verse, while 24 had none whatsoever which is why Semper gets this Catergory
Personals:Semper had more disses than the other guy, plus he dissed him all thru-out his verse while it took 24 a while to get going
Punches:Semper wins this as well even tho sum of his punches were kinda played, he had a decent one which shut ya verse down(Semper Fi Wordplay)
v/Semper
Alright thanks for the input guys, I'm learning. And sorry Dev I don't have 100 posts yet, or else I would vote.
wow....
24-I didnt see a single punch from you...your whole verse was basically filler...some lame disses, and no punches....
Semper-You had a few punches, and a few very weak punches...but the deciding factor here is that you had punches...
Vote-Semper
And since i dont even do text, this meens i wanna see you guys voting over in the audio battles more often...
as much as this was my worst freestyle ever, I'm uppin
Uppin..
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stemper fi: you had the only damn punches in this entire battle, and they were halfway good, for a newb. you had a little wordplay.... and a litte compared to nothing is much better.
24: you had ZERO punches. nuthin. and THAT'S why you lost in this battle. as ya said, you're learning, and i know all about it. i was new once, hence my 8 losses. but keep elevatin.
vote=stemperfi
ps: could y'all check out the battles in my sig?
shit I really thought you guys were gonna cut me up like no other. But instead you guys cut up my verse and told me what to do... I really respect that. Thanks guys.
aight here we go agian.....
24-ba
Your verse was way to simple. the onlyreal punch you had was you last two lines. your flow was good up until the line "i think my rhymes are putting you to shame". ok thas a pretty good line...if your a kindergartener reading a dr. seus book. i mean c'mon. you need to elevate alot man. you have sum potential. js use it. 1/10
Semper Fi
this was alot better on tha eyes then 24's. your vocab was alot stronger and more advanced. you flow was all there in sum and not all there in others. your rhymes definately didnt come out of a dr. seus book. and your punches, were decent, not tha best but enought to beat him. 5/10
v/ Semper Fi
ayo return tha fav. links in sig.