Allevyate VS EMULATED

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June 14th, 2004, 06:27 PM
Emulated

Allevyate VS EMULATED

10-15 Lines
No Hate
No D/r
No Crew Votes
U Drop First
June 14th, 2004, 06:44 PM
Allevyate

ok checkin in, when do i have to spit by...........?
June 14th, 2004, 07:00 PM
Emulated

Now Bitch...fuck U Think.......................
June 14th, 2004, 07:05 PM
Allevyate

Beat starts, lights drop,
I explode, you flop,
You drop lyrical turd,
No Flow, simple computer nerd,
You better call in sick, say you got a disease,
Better for you, just call maternity leave,
My flows hot, not just textual,
Loved by all, its bisexual,
You be Mr. Inch, and I'm Mr. Miles,
I just burned you like Salem witch trials,
Not just rap, its poetry and prose,
I just beat you with my big stick like teddy rose (evelt)
June 14th, 2004, 07:35 PM
Emulated

Didnt Have To Write A Verse, Ur Own Rhyme Is Hurtin U/
U Got Punches, And Multis, But No Damn Personals/

I Move Crowds When I Rhyme, U Can Call It Poetry In Motion/
This Fire Cant Be Next To That Garage...apoc, Thanks For Freepostin/

This Guys Dumb Thinkin He Can Step In My Domain/
Rhymes Elevated Like Cocaine/
He Got Punches With No Aim/
Claim He Fire, But No Flames/
Leave Apoc To Pic Up His Remains/
And Leave Him Exposed Like A Lamp Wit No Shades/

Kid Wanna Battle, Must Be Sick In The Head/
Hes Like A Freepost, Has No Purpose In This Thread/

I Been In The Dirt The Champ Has Rosen/
No Avi, No Sig, Nobody Knos Em/

U Lost Ur First Battle As Soon As It Begun/
This Aint A Golf Game, But Ur Record Will Read Hole-in-one(0-1)/

This Was Weak As Hell....
June 14th, 2004, 07:38 PM
Emulated

Quote:

Originally Posted by Emulated

Didnt Have To Write A Verse, Ur Own Rhyme Is Hurtin U/
U Got Punches, And Multis, But No Damn Personals/

I Move Crowds When I Rhyme, U Can Call It Poetry In Motion/
This Fire Cant Be Next To That Garage...apoc, Thanks For Freepostin/

This Guys Dumb Thinkin He Can Step In My Domain/
Rhymes Elevated Like Cocaine/
He Got Punches With No Aim/
Claim He Fire, But No Flames/
Leave Apoc To Pic Up His Remains/
And Leave Him Exposed Like A Lamp Wit No Shades/

Kid Wanna Battle, Must Be Sick In The Head/
Hes Like A Freepost, Has No Purpose In This Thread/

I Been In The Dirt The Champ Has Rosen/
No Avi, No Sig, Nobody Knos Em/

U Lost Ur First Battle As Soon As It Begun/
This Aint A Golf Game, But Ur Record Will Read Hole-in-one(0-1)/

This Was Weak As Hell....

CORRECTIONS....................................... .....................................
June 14th, 2004, 09:20 PM
Emulated

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June 14th, 2004, 10:46 PM
Emulated

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June 14th, 2004, 11:22 PM
Allevyate

uppin 1................................................. ........lets get some votes
June 15th, 2004, 01:13 PM
Allevyate

Yo vote please its not that hard..............................................
June 15th, 2004, 05:12 PM
Emulated

up.
June 15th, 2004, 05:25 PM
FlyHighShawty

Aiight Checckity Checck Checck!!!

Break Down For Allevyate:

Beat starts, lights drop,
I explode, you flop,
^Rediculously Whack..!! Bad Opener.. 1/10 For Rhyme Scheme

You drop lyrical turd,
No Flow, simple computer nerd,
^Basic.. Computer Nerd.. Jokes Are Played Out... Aint Working For You 0/10

You better call in sick, say you got a disease,
Better for you, just call maternity leave,
^Try Again... 2/10

My flows hot, not just textual,
Loved by all, its bisexual,
^Should've Never Added That In There' .. Fucked Up Your Flow!! 0/10 Has Nothing To Do With 'Em

You be Mr. Inch, and I'm Mr. Miles,
I just burned you like Salem witch trials,
^Okkk???

Not just rap, its poetry and prose,
I just beat you with my big stick like teddy rose (evelt)
^Tragic Closer...!! 0/10 .. Getting Nothing!!..

Evelate Kiid' ... Your Redicously Whack!!! ..... Good Effort Though' ..!!!

Break Down For Emulated:

Didnt Have To Write A Verse, Ur Own Rhyme Is Hurtin U/
U Got Punches, And Multis, But No Damn Personals/
^Nyce Opener' ..!! 7/10 ... ..That's All You Would Have Needed To Kill The Catt'!!

I Move Crowds When I Rhyme, U Can Call It Poetry In Motion/
This Fire Cant Be Next To That Garage...apoc, Thanks For Freepostin/
^Decent Line... 7/10

This Guys Dumb Thinkin He Can Step In My Domain/
Rhymes Elevated Like Cocaine/
He Got Punches With No Aim/
Claim He Fire, But No Flames/
Leave Apoc To Pic Up His Remains/
And Leave Him Exposed Like A Lamp Wit No Shades/
^LmfaOo Aiight Punches' .. I Like How You Merked 'Em!!! Wit His Own Technique Of Style

Kid Wanna Battle, Must Be Sick In The Head/
Hes Like A Freepost, Has No Purpose In This Thread/
^Heated PunchLine' ... 6/10 Nothing Great

I Been In The Dirt The Champ Has Rosen/
No Avi, No Sig, Nobody Knos Em/
^2/10 Wasnt Feelin It.. But Better Then Any Of The Other Cats Lines'

U Lost Ur First Battle As Soon As It Begun/
This Aint A Golf Game, But Ur Record Will Read Hole-in-one(0-1)/
^ Safe Closer..

Throwing Decent.. Bars With Nice Wordplay & Punches' ...

Vote: Emulated
June 15th, 2004, 05:26 PM
FlyHighShawty

LmfaoO!! Oh' .. Damn (100 Post) ....' ... (Foget My Vote) ... I Guess
June 15th, 2004, 05:50 PM
Emulated

yea....thats y this place sux...too many posts needed to vote
June 15th, 2004, 06:05 PM
Allevyate

yo i probably lost this one, had five minutes to do it, uppin for votes tho
June 15th, 2004, 06:18 PM
FlyHighShawty

Im A Post-Hoe.. Lmfao Acunna Matata.. I Will Have My Post Up In No Time..!! But

FaSho.. Good Battle...!!' ...

Pretty One-Sided Though'!!!
June 15th, 2004, 08:13 PM
Emulated

up.
June 15th, 2004, 10:31 PM
Emulated

qqqq
June 15th, 2004, 11:25 PM
Allevyate

uppin..............................vote........... .................
June 16th, 2004, 06:37 PM
Allevyate

up....votes please............................................ ..
June 16th, 2004, 07:06 PM
V.A. $lim

allev your verse was to basic you need alot of elevatin and put some thought into it dont just throw down anything

em that was a nice verse I like the whole thing open to close the hole in one was a nice play and some nice punches in it

my vote goes to em

can yall hit this up allev I know you cant vote yet but I still want the feedback

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133321
June 16th, 2004, 11:25 PM
Emulated

...
June 17th, 2004, 10:59 PM
Emulated

up.
June 17th, 2004, 11:11 PM
...Apocalypse...

Allevyate_- you need to elevat on the real wasnt feelin ya shit wordplayy and vocab wasnt good and flow wasnt that good either structure was ok punches 2/10 and personals were lame basically ur overall was like 3/10
Emulated: was ok structure flow was good saw sum punches and personals that was good, vocab was also good, yours was more enjoyable overall: 6/10

Vote: Emulated
June 17th, 2004, 11:43 PM
Emulated

finally a vote, and my 100th post. chea!!!!
June 18th, 2004, 09:06 PM
Emulated

^^^^^^^^^^^
June 18th, 2004, 09:11 PM
...Apocalypse...

yo retrun the favor in http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133449 please
June 20th, 2004, 12:35 PM
Emulated

up.....allevyate u fuckin herb, can u help get votes kid...
June 20th, 2004, 01:52 PM
Karl Merks

Quote:

Originally Posted by Allevyate

Beat starts, lights drop,
I explode, you flop,
Maybe it sounded good in your head, but it didn't amount to anything here.
You drop lyrical turd,
No Flow, simple computer nerd,
Very simple structure and rhyming.
You better call in sick, say you got a disease,
Better for you, just call maternity leave,
lol.... that was kinda random.
My flows hot, not just textual,
Loved by all, its bisexual,
Now you're forcing rhymes. That hardly made any sense.
You be Mr. Inch, and I'm Mr. Miles,
I just burned you like Salem witch trials,
A little bit elevated from the previous bars, but still poor.
Not just rap, its poetry and prose,
I just beat you with my big stick like teddy rose (evelt)
Sorry kid, this just didn't do anything either.

It seems like you've got some unique idea's, but you've just got to channel that creativity into stronger punches. Keep writing.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Emulated

Didnt Have To Write A Verse, Ur Own Rhyme Is Hurtin U/
U Got Punches, And Multis, But No Damn Personals/
This didn't really rhyme, it simply stated the truth.
I Move Crowds When I Rhyme, U Can Call It Poetry In Motion/
This Fire Cant Be Next To That Garage...apoc, Thanks For Freepostin/
Apoc? I guess you're refering to Allevyate. This wasn't put together very well, but I liked the part about freeposting.
This Guys Dumb Thinkin He Can Step In My Domain/
Rhymes Elevated Like Cocaine/
Just filler here.
He Got Punches With No Aim/
Claim He Fire, But No Flames/
More filler.
Leave Apoc To Pic Up His Remains/
And Leave Him Exposed Like A Lamp Wit No Shades/
Lol, original idea, I suppose. Very forced bar though.
Kid Wanna Battle, Must Be Sick In The Head/
Hes Like A Freepost, Has No Purpose In This Thread/
There's a punch.
I Been In The Dirt The Champ Has Rosen/
No Avi, No Sig, Nobody Knos Em/
Lol, the champ has Rosen? Risen maybe? More forced rhyming, although it ended better..
U Lost Ur First Battle As Soon As It Begun/
This Aint A Golf Game, But Ur Record Will Read Hole-in-one(0-1)
Nice try, interesting thought... but not much of a punch.

Personally, it seems like you're coming up with one line, and then you're stumped to find a rhyme for it. I wouldn't normally suggest it, but try using a rhyming dictionary. It's kind of a bitch thing to do, but i think it would help you alot. /

Vote: Emulated.
June 20th, 2004, 03:26 PM
And Death

Allevyate - Your structure was very poor because your lines were uneven. Your flow was weak because you didn't keep a similar syllable count throughout. You didn't have any personals which is a must in a battle. Your punches weren't good or even effective at all.

Emulated - Your structure was weak because of the constant change from short to long lines. Your flow was okay but try to keep it consistent throughout your whole verse. Your personals weren't good, they were just too predictable. Your punches were poor but they did do a little damage.

Weak battle.

Vote - Emulated
June 20th, 2004, 03:56 PM
Axe

Emulated is DQ'ed for excessive upping.