Earth As We Know It .. (With Chrit & C Section)

Chrit:
Nonsencial, reprehensible thoughts turn respectable
Suspensful quandries seem at times uneventful
To the sinful, audibless tones are an earful
Monotonous solemness makes draw near to
You, and with unobstructed missions
to enact these reflectionless visions
And conditions met of a hierarchy set
In place with hypocritical dribble until....
...a utopian compromise is met

Nahlidge:
Grandfather clock puts the hour hand up for adoption
Liberty's optics grew blind ..
.. Selling her reading glasses at an auction
She's really from Boston, never liked New York's horizon
Chastizin' colors when vibrant, but they moved off the island
The rose petal's eye lids, close as the trunk opened
Frozen sun rays heat the ocean, leaving mother nature lotioned
The Halo dipped canvas gets broken, on a jealous envy trip
Kennedy's lip slips out greed as he stuffs himself with emptiness

C Section:
Mother natures a virgin, so father moons a visionary
Their sun burned pills flesh as each becomes secondary
With out the sun they cant see the mirrors reflection
But to blind men images are your lifes deception
In a pond of bad looks and the dead fish dreams
The captin screams with a puff of smoke screens
If angels dont have wings serpants cant play mind tricks
The borders of insanty are think so I dip the pen in the ink origin


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=129298
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=128389

OMFG....this is fucking great...
i heard you guys were doing this one like a week ago and i see the preperation

wow...just wow...

might be a flow problem here or there but thats it

Up.

Incredibly Good.
Chrit..ur first opening bars were bleh...O.d'd a little with the multies and sorta fucked ur flow up. You picked up and finished good. Nahlidge, that was a dope verse, and I have no problems...same with C-section, very good verse and not much of a problem. Too short though, but sweet.

Up ..

I rather enjoyed this piece, as I have become used to seeing chrit in poetic form as of late, although he will deny any poetic prowess. Nice combination of styles and great use of topic.

C-sections' portion was nice light and airy in tone, made me think of Poe's, the raven, don't know must be the playfully encrypted style of writing. Wanted to keep reading, too short for me, so that just tells you I liked it...

Nahlidge, I've read a few of your drops before, I think you are showing elevation in this drop, way to go, keep it up. Structure is the only area where there could have been obvious improvements, (same for all) doesn't take away from the piece at all, but would only add a level of asthetic balance, which adds to the over effect of the piece.., In my opinion of course...


Overall great piece, it's nice to read these types of collabs...
~Bounce~

so lets see if I got this right:
C-sec
so, the moon is the 'perception' mirror...
without the sun reflecting light off the moon we wouldn't see it
religion is not what it seems 'angels don't have wings'
because serpants govern and use it against those who see...
the blind man is the only one who isn't influenced by his sight
our reality is flawed by our sight...used by serpents against us
that's what I gathered from that...interpretation's a bitch...

Nahlidge
I didn't really get much from yours until the last line then I kinda formed my interpretaion from there. So lets go from end to start...Kennedy, obvious poke at the former pres. They were a greedy fam... made their fortune off bootlegging mostly...cool wit me...
the rose petal, which represents purity, closed its eyes to what it was seeing...it was seeing freedom leave the island in the form of time and the statue...freedom and time...married. The idea that in due time ('hour hand up for adoption') freedom will be gone...
It originated in Boston, proly refering to some point in history that was significant to freedom's origin...I don't know...?

Chrit:
at times it seemed like some of your ideas or words contradicted one another...and I guess poetry is about that, cause life is a contradiction, right?
strong vocab...lil hard to follow at first, until I pieced the words together...
politics...hierarchy set are the politicians wit their dribble...
claiming the 'utopia' project is underway...but wat does utopia mean to them?
"You, and with unobstructed missions
to enact these reflectionless visions"
secret missions and wars yield no true reward...like a reflectionless mirror...aka vision.

whatchall think? Was I close? If not lemme know...it'd be cool to get break-down of your shit, b/c I could come up with at least 3 different scenerios off the top o' my head...but I figured I'd stick with the first that came to mind...

good shit from all 3 writers...I'll be lookin forward to reading more, especially collabs...3 different perspectives and styles...the shit...
peace

Um... this was tight... most poetic and refreshing piece I have ever seen... DOOPE..!

















ps. Av knows...

Upping

Dont sleep hoes

Upping over all the closed shit .. Can we get some more feedback?

you spin me right round baby right round like a record baby right right round round

there isn't really much wrong with this collab...except chrit went haywire with the knowledge lol...nice visuals and good messege in this...all down respectablly well...keep droppin

yay

Up bitches

upping! lmao

i cant understand those hard words man

legends.

Up.!

Damn, Chrit you upped this from about 4 years ago? haha.
LEGENDS STILL!

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Originally Posted by Nahlidge

Chrit:
Nonsencial, reprehensible thoughts turn respectable
Suspensful quandries seem at times uneventful
To the sinful, audibless tones are an earful
Monotonous solemness makes draw near to
You, and with unobstructed missions
to enact these reflectionless visions
And conditions met of a hierarchy set
In place with hypocritical dribble until....
...a utopian compromise is met
^
ha sick man. you've really tightened and completely changed your flow/ stle since i last peeped. dope.

Nahlidge:
Grandfather clock puts the hour hand up for adoption
Liberty's optics grew blind ..
.. Selling her reading glasses at an auction < Nah, always delivering the imagery, tight.
She's really from Boston, never liked New York's horizon
Chastizin' colors when vibrant, but they moved off the island
The rose petal's eye lids, close as the trunk opened
Frozen sun rays heat the ocean, leaving mother nature lotioned
The Halo dipped canvas gets broken, on a jealous envy trip
Kennedy's lip slips out greed as he stuffs himself with emptiness
^
loving this shit. your lyrics have got even doper, always loved your style too. rhymes were nice, internals and the visuals. niceness.

C Section:
Mother natures a virgin, so father moons a visionary
Their sun burned pills flesh as each becomes secondary
With out the sun they cant see the mirrors reflection
But to blind men images are your lifes deception < sick line
In a pond of bad looks and the dead fish dreams
The captin screams with a puff of smoke screens
If angels dont have wings serpants cant play mind tricks
The borders of insanty are think so I dip the pen in the ink origin
^
you added your on stamp of style on this. the rhymes were dsjointed flow wise and the way you wrote was pretty abstract. Some grammatical stuff was letting this down, but apart from that cool to get a flavour of what you write like, not really read much of your stuff.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=129298
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=128389

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get back at me with some feed. peace!!!