El Capitan

We'd passed the years, sat with a glass of beer
'round this same bar ..
.. looking like the cast from Cheers.
Tryna catch our tears; inside a bottle of Jack
Knowing full well ..
.. we'll never date a model, infact -
finding Mrs. Perfect, just doesnt seem worth it ..
.. Gimme a girl who cooks, cleans, lets me sleep at her shit -
and i wouldnt ask for more,
Id be a happy man.
Plus if it doesnt work ..




.. there's always El Capitan.



Pz.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=128710

Sublime D's piece.

Lol.. nice!
Made me laugh

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Originally Posted by Baron Mynd.

We'd passed the years, sat with a glass of beer
'round this same bar ..
.. looking like the cast from Cheers.
Tryna catch our tears; inside a bottle of Jack
Knowing full well ..
.. we'll never date a model, infact -

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That's where i laughed the most

Thanks. :^)

I fancied this the whole way - Acutually did. The flow was dope and it was just a nice reader. Nothing to drastic or hard to follow good shit sir.

thnx

funny as a mother man i liked it baron man

blah, what happened to this forum? its like - 8 lines and you cant be bothered to reply after i respond to yours?

Ay Baron where the ol heads at? Like Artificial Intelligence and them?

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Originally Posted by Baron Mynd.

[FONT=tahoma]We'd passed the years, sat with a glass of beer
'round this same bar ..
.. looking like the cast from Cheers.
Pz.

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lol its pretty damn gud. theres some good intricate wordplay in there and its pretty damn funny. its gud 2 see u can keep it simple and still bring sumthin high quality keep it up. wat part of uk r u from by the way?

Wolves, near birmingham.

Keys - a lot are gone or simply havent been around. :^/

Ai is now soft focus

I really liked this it was simple, but flowed awsome and dope, Made me smile :)

We'd passed the years, sat with a glass of beer
'round this same bar ..
.. looking like the cast from Cheers.
nice opener
Tryna catch our tears; inside a bottle of Jack
Knowing full well ..
.. we'll never date a model, infact -
pretty decent...
finding Mrs. Perfect, just doesnt seem worth it ..
.. Gimme a girl who cooks, cleans, lets me sleep at her shit -
don't we all wish
and i wouldnt ask for more,
Id be a happy man.
Plus if it doesnt work ..
.. there's always El Capitan.
haha...nice

decent piece man...for a quick drop
nice humor...
structore was nice...

hit this up man: http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...801post1412801

I really liked the flow, It sounds weird but it almost seemed poetic, good sense of humour, it had multis but in a way in which they helped to carry on the piece perfectly nice job.

haha, nice piece......
funny too. it seems thats what you were aiming for, so i have nothing to criticize as you accomplished that...

:)

i liked it , good imageray , real belivable no bull sh^T , im was feelin it :)

thnx

LOL.. I feel you on the El Capitan. I rock that from time to time.

MOST THESE AINT OLD ENOUGH TO DRINK YO


give them time.

I ain't ol' enough to drink in the U.S but I sure take advantage of
my own countries godly rules. If anyone drinks Hoegaarden lemme know.
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Bk to point
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I liked this piece. Small, which gives more incentive to read, nice flow,
had a good lil motive to it and that bit of humour is always nice.
Like I always say, your flow is what makes me read your pieces.
That is your strongest asset. Coulda made it way better but you know that.
Pz.

Make sure ya hit this up plz.-
Chronicles of the Courageous (Pt 1): Oskar Schindler

that would be 'no' :^)