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Verses due by Saturday 12 PM Eastern!!!
Check ins are due Thursday 12 PM Eastern!!!. If you don't check in there will be a replacement.
No show verses will not be permitted, if you drop a no show verse and the other person shows before the deadline you will not be allowed to edit your verse. Please don't wait for the last minute to drop, drop as early as you can.
Agree on a line limit of 10-20 lines, nothing more nor less.
Checkin In...12 Lines sound good to you?
Word....12 lines is straight and thanks@Aisle for telling me.
dum dum dum....
U a thin target like sniper's shooting anoxeric's, so I play safe
Cuz like Ben Wallace behind da arc..we dont want 2 see AJ
Kid got an identity crisis, so I break ya name down and deploy da punish
Checked up on u..Kuldahar anti-violent? Cuz all ya line's avoided punches
Action breezing through, drunk fights da only time my bar's lose
And ur avy..thank GOD 4 text..its da only time u'll get car-tune's
Dont touch a mic..beating Act..please..like supermodels, go figure
A change of heart Im a athiest now..so fuck reading ya scripture's
Must think Im a gimmick..saying 'What!?' fear me how? Look..
Like Sprint..punches go around da world..can u hear me now? Good..
^^^^Punch or a filler? fuck u, this hoe's done....torched
Is this payback? Cuz just like ya record...u can afford to 0we 1 more..
this kid could only be top notch if he wore a belt on top of his head
don't matter if he can spit the shit...cuz like his plans they are dead
i could tell you were only in this for a minute cuz it's only worth...
a minute of my time...
keep talking like you have balls but we all know your just workin nerf
you know action was never born just escaped from his moms pussy
despite our effort you got to the rectum and escaped...shit..to late
your just another face in the crowd so I won't pay any attention
maybe ill act like em and throw you kim so you can get an errection
seems that last line is ture since you can't seem to keep it up
make some plans to buy enzyte cuz kim gonna need some love
i hope that your able to stomahc what I say you stupid flyweight
why don't you take change ya custom title..to...I fly-a-way
blah..tiered...need coffee.
U a thin target like sniper's shooting anoxeric's, so I play safe
Cuz like Ben Wallace behind da arc..we dont want 2 see AJ
lol, nice
Kid got an identity crisis, so I break ya name down and deploy da punish
Checked up on u..Kuldahar anti-violent? Cuz all ya line's avoided punches
eehhh, should have been woeded better
Action breezing through, drunk fights da only time my bar's lose
And ur avy..thank GOD 4 text..its da only time u'll get car-tune's
nope
Dont touch a mic..beating Act..please..like supermodels, go figure
A change of heart Im a athiest now..so fuck reading ya scripture's
nope
Must think Im a gimmick..saying 'What!?' fear me how? Look..
Like Sprint..punches go around da world..can u hear me now? Good..
nope, plus this is very played
^^^^Punch or a filler? fuck u, this hoe's done....torched
Is this payback? Cuz just like ya record...u can afford to 0we 1 more..
eeh, could have been better
Started pretty decent and fell off. The attempted wordplays in your set ups seemwd forced, so weret very good.
this kid could only be top notch if he wore a belt on top of his head
don't matter if he can spit the shit...cuz like his plans they are dead
wizzak
i could tell you were only in this for a minute cuz it's only worth...
a minute of my time...
keep talking like you have balls but we all know your just workin nerf
same as above
you know action was never born just escaped from his moms pussy
despite our effort you got to the rectum and escaped...shit..to late
rhymescheme was blah, the punch was your best so far but not great
your just another face in the crowd so I won't pay any attention
maybe ill act like em and throw you kim so you can get an errection
nope
seems that last line is ture since you can't seem to keep it up
make some plans to buy enzyte cuz kim gonna need some love
this isn't even an attempted punch. filler
i hope that your able to stomahc what I say you stupid flyweight
why don't you take change ya custom title..to...I fly-a-way
bad
Wasnt feeling AJs verse at all. The other guy had the good opener and a couple decent concepts that just didnt come out right, but he gets my vote for better attempted punches and decent concepts.
Vote:Action
-W1
i liked actions aproach nice punches wordplay and personals and also he was more original........took this battke to me!
Kuldahar came wak and had played concepz and lacked a great structure so he lost period
vote=Action
Im a FEMALE...bastids..up..for some more votes...and this still aint 50 characters..ight..............better.
Action in LLL we don't up things...they are voted on eventually...so please do not up this anymore...thanks.
Hmm...
This was an okay battle for a few begginers...
Action had the harder punches and wittier lines,
but I think if Kuld has more potential, and if he
stays in this league he'll elevate a lot.
Overall, kuld you didn't come with enough
hardhitting punches or witty lines.
Action, you came aight girl, but you
also need to work on making your punches hit
harder.
V/Action
U a thin target like sniper's shooting anoxeric's, so I play safe
Cuz like Ben Wallace behind da arc..we dont want 2 see AJ
hah...
Kid got an identity crisis, so I break ya name down and deploy da punish
Checked up on u..Kuldahar anti-violent? Cuz all ya line's avoided punches
Aight name punch.
Action breezing through, drunk fights da only time my bar's lose
And ur avy..thank GOD 4 text..its da only time u'll get car-tune's
nnnaaaa
Dont touch a mic..beating Act..please..like supermodels, go figure
A change of heart Im a athiest now..so fuck reading ya scripture's
Not really a punch, but creative.
Must think Im a gimmick..saying 'What!?' fear me how? Look..
Like Sprint..punches go around da world..can u hear me now? Good..
well worded, but no hit
^^^^Punch or a filler? fuck u, this hoe's done....torched
Is this payback? Cuz just like ya record...u can afford to 0we 1 more..
Poor close
this kid could only be top notch if he wore a belt on top of his head
don't matter if he can spit the shit...cuz like his plans they are dead
no no no
i could tell you were only in this for a minute cuz it's only worth...
a minute of my time...
keep talking like you have balls but we all know your just workin nerf
? nope
you know action was never born just escaped from his moms pussy
despite our effort you got to the rectum and escaped...shit..to late
hmm...
your just another face in the crowd so I won't pay any attention
maybe ill act like em and throw you kim so you can get an errection
wut?
seems that last line is ture since you can't seem to keep it up
make some plans to buy enzyte cuz kim gonna need some love
fill
i hope that your able to stomahc what I say you stupid flyweight
why don't you take change ya custom title..to...I fly-a-way
weak.
Overall guys, you both need to elevate. Keep battlin tho, thats what you need to do. Read upper level battles, n see what you have to do. Make sure every bar hits. You guys have potential, so keep up.
v/ Action
Hit up my Judge battle, its gettin like no votes, pz.
Action: Decent flow, I liked most of the lines except for the car-tunes line... and the finisher was kinda forced... You need to make your verse more smooth...
Kuldahar: Below average verse... you need to be more creative and hit a lot harder with punches, finisher was weak also
Vote - Action
Action-
U a thin target like sniper's shooting anoxeric's, so I play safe
Cuz like Ben Wallace behind da arc..we dont want 2 see AJ
haha nice start
Kid got an identity crisis, so I break ya name down and deploy da punish
Checked up on u..Kuldahar anti-violent? Cuz all ya line's avoided punches
decent
Action breezing through, drunk fights da only time my bar's lose
And ur avy..thank GOD 4 text..its da only time u'll get car-tune's
ehh...
Dont touch a mic..beating Act..please..like supermodels, go figure
A change of heart Im a athiest now..so fuck reading ya scripture's
wack
Must think Im a gimmick..saying 'What!?' fear me how? Look..
Like Sprint..punches go around da world..can u hear me now? Good..
lol...decent...kinda weak punch though
^^^^Punch or a filler? fuck u, this hoe's done....torched
Is this payback? Cuz just like ya record...u can afford to 0we 1 more..
weak
AJ-
this kid could only be top notch if he wore a belt on top of his head
don't matter if he can spit the shit...cuz like his plans they are dead
weak
i could tell you were only in this for a minute cuz it's only worth...
a minute of my time...
keep talking like you have balls but we all know your just workin nerf
ehh....
you know action was never born just escaped from his moms pussy
despite our effort you got to the rectum and escaped...shit..to late
choppy flow, weak punch
your just another face in the crowd so I won't pay any attention
maybe ill act like em and throw you kim so you can get an errection
weak
seems that last line is ture since you can't seem to keep it up
make some plans to buy enzyte cuz kim gonna need some love
wack
i hope that your able to stomahc what I say you stupid flyweight
why don't you take change ya custom title..to...I fly-a-way
haha not bad
Both came kinda weak, but action gets it for all-around better punches.
V/action
yea action was just better overall his structure flow and rhyme scheme were all better ...not to mention his punches were more creative...honestly i don't think AJ tried to much in this one here seen him come alot better....b4....anyway also the phone company that says can you hear me now...thats verizon not sprint but its all to the good vote action for an overall better verse in every category ...aj work on you rhyme scheme man most of your verse......was off in flow because of how you tryed to work your rhyme...pz
AJ- Thought you came weak really....some of your verse was played....yo structure wasn't good either...but you need to work on harder punches....
Action- Decent verse , and you had an okay flow ...but your punches were fairly decent but they should come a little harder next time on your punches...
vote- Action
Weakish battle on both parts...
Action: You had some ok punches and concepts, but most of them either didn't come our like they should have or didn't hit directly enough. Most of your lines were creative so i'll give you props for that. You had some ok personals but nothing special.
Your best line:
Nothing too great but decent nonetheless.Quote:
U a thin target like sniper's shooting anoxeric's, so I play safe
Cuz like Ben Wallace behind da arc..we dont want 2 see AJ
AJ: Your verse was nothing special. Most of your punches either didn't hit really hard or were a bit played. You had some decent wordplay in your verse but nothing spectacular. Not really any personals to speak of either.
Your best line:
Pretty whack though.Quote:
i hope that your able to stomahc what I say you stupid flyweight
why don't you take change ya custom title..to...I fly-a-way
/v Action for an overall stronger verse.
Action wins, closed.
Action (1-0)
Kuldahar (0-2)