Fubar Vs :)

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no hate votes,
no dickridding votes,
verses due in next 30 minutes if their not posted in the next 30 minutes then we both have before midnight in which to vote
I'll spit first...

aiight then post first.. uppin....................

I don't even need to diss you at all smiley, Your fucking rhymes do it for me//
Die through laugher cuss you blew your opportunity, to try and diss me//
I saw your age smilley, You must of had a hard time through puberty//
Cuss your palms were to sweaty to hide, You can try to get made at me//
But your only make a fool of yourself, 'cuss i place your sorry ass back onto the shelf//
I'm the master of disaster, I fuck you up quicker than Eemcee Hammer's new styles//
You'll be filed into my cabinet for a loser with out hope//
Fools see you as a bi standard, you'll get rejected by the pope//
Your battle record doesn't scare me, It's your lack of stupidity//
I'll bring you to the floor quicker than a fat ass whore breakin your knees//
Buy some lubrication just so you can do some more masterbation//
Die loser, the anticipation of seein you get slaughtered by my aggression//

man what the fuck is this.. fubar.. ahh fuck you man.. check it
kid your about to become another TEXT FATALITY, your whole verse is filled with GAY references.. bitch check your own SEXUALITY
any one of your battle wins gotta be based on dickridding VOTES
cuz mothafucka you've never been DOPE,
bout the only traces of "manhood" that can be found in your body is down your THROAT (sperm)
and i dont need to do any research to find your pictures SON
cuz your whole families portrait is two clicks away at uglypeople.COM
your a dumbass.. and thats a fact, your logic just doesnt LINE STRAIGHT
you could obtain a higher IQ than your by testing a PRIME APE ..lol
smarts? you have non, you cant even spell WELL IN YOUR THREADS
theres a higher probablity of winning the lottery than finding brain CELLS IN
YOUR HEAD
just bow down kid my RECORD IS STRONGER
i cant even rate your skills on a scale of 1 to 10 cuz id need to use NEGATIVE
NUMBERS

ahh fuck it

lol no dickridding votes.. peace people...........

i think i mite have to give this one too smiley
some of the stuff u wrote fubar didn't really make sense
and im not all about structure n stuff like that, but i mean to rap you gotta make sense know what im sayin? but both of yalls punchlines was strate, but smiley got you on this one, good battle the both of yous
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yeah aiiht uppin for people that can actually poll vote on this shit.. leave links to your battles if you want..

damn.. still no poll votes yet.. uppin..................

and i dont need to do any research to find your pictures SON
cuz your whole families portrait is two clicks away at uglypeople.COM

ahaha! woah that was fire smiley...won the damn battle for me...although the rest of the verse wasnt that good. fubar elevate man, you flow is elementary and your punches arent hitting right.

pay back the favor and check my battles:

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=125938

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...25#post1356725

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But i did every thing right.....
I used some multies and made some personals,
and I even used some references.

I just don't understand.....Do I have to just tell him off just plain agressively?
and not change my flow not one time???I just don't understand.....

Both of you need to elevate. And Fubar, you're starting to elevate a lot from the battles you've posted before and against me to the one now, but there are still no direct punches and your attempted one's aren't effective. You need to work on your creativity. Open your eye's to the world. Notice more thing's in life. Notice thing's on T.V...thats how I make my punches. Just be knowledgable..


Smiley- You need to elevate too dawg, but atleast most of your punches made sense and they were a little more effective then Fubar's..you also need to work on creativity..be more wittier..find something that YOU KNOW no one has ever seen before...

Overall, I feel that Smiley won because of comprehension, not necessarily effective punches. And fubar, keep elevating, because you're getting better by the day..but....


Vote-Smiley

Check out my battles..

Action vs Odd
Action vs UnParalled

Polled.
-Axe

aight basic breakdown

Fubars verse
I don't even need to diss you at all smiley, Your fucking rhymes do it for me//
Die through laugher cuss you blew your opportunity, to try and diss me//
I saw your age smilley, You must of had a hard time through puberty//
Cuss your palms were to sweaty to hide, You can try to get made at me//
But your only make a fool of yourself, 'cuss i place your sorry ass back onto the shelf//
I'm the master of disaster, I fuck you up quicker than Eemcee Hammer's new styles//
You'll be filed into my cabinet for a loser with out hope//
Fools see you as a bi standard, you'll get rejected by the pope//
Your battle record doesn't scare me, It's your lack of stupidity//
I'll bring you to the floor quicker than a fat ass whore breakin your knees//
Buy some lubrication just so you can do some more masterbation//
Die loser, the anticipation of seein you get slaughtered by my aggression//

ok that wuz the wackest ish I/ve ever heard

Smiley's verse
man what the fuck is this.. fubar.. ahh fuck you man.. check it
kid your about to become another TEXT FATALITY, your whole verse is filled with GAY references.. bitch check your own SEXUALITY
any one of your battle wins gotta be based on dickridding VOTES
cuz mothafucka you've never been DOPE,
bout the only traces of "manhood" that can be found in your body is down your THROAT (sperm)
and i dont need to do any research to find your pictures SON
cuz your whole families portrait is two clicks away at uglypeople.COM
your a dumbass.. and thats a fact, your logic just doesnt LINE STRAIGHT
you could obtain a higher IQ than your by testing a PRIME APE ..lol
smarts? you have non, you cant even spell WELL IN YOUR THREADS
theres a higher probablity of winning the lottery than finding brain CELLS IN
YOUR HEAD
just bow down kid my RECORD IS STRONGER
i cant even rate your skills on a scale of 1 to 10 cuz id need to use NEGATIVE
NUMBERS

ok that ish was hot and made tha battle onesided

Flow/smiley
Creativity/smiley
Diss/smiley
Entertainment/smiley
Diss/both
Multies/fubar
personals'fubar

aight my vote goes to smiley no hate hit my ish up with sabotage,
the link is in tha sig

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Punches: :)
Flow: None
Personals: None
Metas: :)
Multies: Fubar
Creativity: :)
Enjoyment: :)

Explination: Neither had any flow, :) I've seen you do wayyyyyyyy better before, way way way way better, Fubar, some of your lines made no sense and had no interest to me, they were whack and nothing interesting, work on it, and try to fin any personals that you can...

Quotables:

:) : and i dont need to do any research to find your pictures SON
cuz your whole families portrait is two clicks away at uglypeople.COM

only one, still nothing too special

Fubar's improved a little since last time, almost didn't seem he was writing that aat all... he had some wack punches, wack multi's and, just didnt get thru to me at all.
some of the shit you said i didnt even understamd

:D i thought had some nice punches, nice opening, nice finish, over all a well rounded battle.
it was original and enjoyable..

my vote: :D

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oh yeah... karma fellas

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=125652

yeah ill hit your battle up.. thanks for dropping votes people.. now its 4 to 0.. we need a few more votes in this battle..

this is my 5th up.. drop votes.. if you vote just leave a link you one of your battles and ill check it out.. peace

lolerz lolerz...
wackish battle..but hey.....
i think smiley took this battle just bechuz his verse was overrall better...any category imaginable i believe he took it in every aspect..think of a category nd he probably took it...his verse wasnt good though..just good enough to beat this....so.....

v/smiley

leave da lovin: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126021

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damn what the hell why were all my votes in this battle taken away?

fuckin assholes.. i dont know how much more a vote can be explained .. yo if anyone else votes on this battle make sure to add like a page explanation.. fuckin crap

uppin this..i get 5 more ups since polls were reset.. drop a vote and leave links to your batles if you want.. peace

:) took this one with ease! Fubar you had some really played out rhymes! Try to be more unique and creative. No1 wants to hear.. or read rather what everybody else writes or says during a played out freestyle. You did have good vocabulary though. I just dunno why you bolded so many of the words. Anyways just work on your creativity and flow a bit and you'll notice a difference. Star line was. . .

You'll be filed into my cabinet for a loser with out hope//
Fools see you as a bi standard, you'll get rejected by the pope//

good stuff but kinda sketchy ...

:) you had some grimey lines man! Fuckin multis were ruining your opponent. You have good vocab and creativity. Structure and deilvery were good too! Your a good lyricist i wouldnt mind battling you one day. Heres your star line . . .


just bow down kid my RECORD IS STRONGER
i cant even rate your skills on a scale of 1 to 10 cuz id need to use NEGATIVE
NUMBERS

^^ GRIMEY!

Vote :)

This is an okay battle.....i think smiley took it cuz his verse was nicer...he came with the stronger puches...nicer structure..and bettter flow.......fubar u have the right idea's just elevate more....

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this battle was not very good, but smiley took it easily. here's my break down of this.

flow- neither were very good because they were both very inconsistant. fubar constantly changing where the words rhymed in his bars didn't help. the end of your lines in a bar should always rhyme, unless you really know how to do it right, which you didn't. smiley, your bars were a very un-even length, which is awful for flow. you should try to make sure that all your lines are even length. try just adjusting some wording to make that happen.

multis- smiley, just for having them. they were nothing special from smiley but they were enough. fubar really didn't have any, even though it looked like he tried. they just didn't really rhyme though.

punches- even though they really weren't great, i still have to go with smiley. overall they were ok from you, you can still be much more creative. fubar, most of yours didn't make any sense. they just seemed to be saying random things. you even said he lacks stupidity. the thing is that it's a good thing to lack stupidity, because it means you'r not stupid.

wordplay- i didn't see any. you should both start using wordplay because it can really strenghnthen punches, when done right. it also shows some creativity.

personals- it looked like smiley again because he at least used them. still could have been better but at least he used em. fubar, your personals, like your punches, didn't make sense.

structure- again smiley. basicly he didn't use any extra shit, he just let the verse be, which is the right thing to do. fubar, stop using all that bolding and extra stuff, it really doesn't bring anything and is anoying to read.

overall- smiley took it with far superior punches, multis, personals and structure. no hate to either one, just means you got work to do. just keep eevatin, no one is ill when they first start. much respect to both.

v- smiley

vote on my battle please, thanks.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126139

krakajack i got you man.. ill vote on that shit later.. uppin

uppin

good looks on the up thing........................

aight fuck it................................smiley had fucked up struc
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i felt that his punches on the other hand was hitting consistent
...........other cat seemed to be herbish all over and fucked his
........................so in contrast to that personals go to smiley
and well capslocks was on and it was gay on smileys verse
..........................dont ever do that again it made me very mad
both can elavate and espeacialy fubar cuz the bold letters killed it
.......................dont ever do that again man its whack as fuck
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id say flow and shit like that was poor on both sides needed work
.................cuz like i said i didnt like neither structure in this one
creativity goes to both but slightly in favor of smiley do to effort
.............mataphors in this one were kinda stupid just lacking shit
id like to see more multis but..............there was some ok wons here
....but smiley takes them................................fubar lacked them
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so basicly vote/smiley for hitting with better punches and personals
i kno thats shits been said 1000 times or more but that wins battles
and also i like to mention that smiley was wittier which also helped him
....................................vote on my damn battles and dont forget man
well i mean please return the honest favor ok man thank you very much

fubar u did good but smiley i felt hiz emotion and it made more sence

man uppin this shit for the last vote in this biatch....

Smiley-Nice Structure..Came with a little but hard punches..They was really
funny like these
'and i dont need to do any research to find your pictures SON
cuz your whole families portrait is two clicks away at uglypeople.COM

that didnt really make sense but was funny as hell.....LOL..Easy to read except for the
verse I posted...Not complicated...Good vocab..Few strong punches should have done the job....WOrk on ya rhyming and stuff a lil bit more aight...Keep it up ya good aight

Fubar-Nice flows...A few hard punches but smilies was stronger....Aing not need for me to explain anything baout whats wrong and right becuz You and smiley had the same of everything else...But he came a lil harder...Keep tryin aight

v/Smiley