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u spit first
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10 lines
u spit first
yup... haha new here.. fucked up the one with you.. here i go
I'll hit you harder than a 'Mac' at full speed //
Ill leave you bloody in attention of medical need //
Im sayin, that when ive finished with you //
Theres be a hole through you're head, and snap your jawbone in two //
Ill leviate you and float you above the rest //
Then 'Slam' you 'Harder', like what Onyx does best //
You're hopeless, Leave you shaking like Ozzy Ozborne when he's dopeless //
You're smokeless, When i bust my cap, i fuckin' tote this //
5 wins? It aint gon' be 6 //
Ill leave you crying, because my 'stones' will leave you 'sticked' //
You'll be crying like a jelous wife because she got hit.
Holla back.
cmon man, times running out i need ya verse soon or ull time out..
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Originally Posted by Lil Es
Is this a Pokemon line? **Please say no**
nope.. Onyx is a raper, slam harder is the name of his song... word play
This guy challenged me, This newb is wack as fuck
U-S-U-C-K…Just thought I’d spell out how U suck
I mean U made a major mistake, how can U compete?
Its like a 100 meter sprinter running a race wit no feet
Therefore only one outcome, A 6th win on my record
& my victory will be etched on your face like a scoreboard
Slamming Like Onyx?...Please, why display these played lines?
I’ve never faced as weak as U, But I merk U every time
Droppin hopeless verses? Ha Ha, check how this guy fell & bombed
He’s confused, calls me Daddy..cos he’s completely been sonned
G'luck boy'o
uppin 4 votes......................................
cmon man where these votes up... uppin.............
uPPIN.......Want to get this dun..
drop a link & me & Es will try & vote
on yours..
huh?? i dont follow ya man??........................
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=123192
^ hit this......preferably Kwiz, its a topical..
Siphon took this...
Es, very weak on yer part....
your verse completely lacked punches n personals...
most of it was filler...utilizing similes,
instead of actually dissing on Siphon...
for example...
^Quote:
You're hopeless, Leave you shaking like Ozzy Ozborne when he's dopeless //
You're smokeless, When i bust my cap, i fuckin' tote this //
lines like these are pointless...there was no actual punch
work on solid punches and personals, instead of trying
for multies...dont sacrifce content for flow...
also try n be more creative...
your last two lines both started the same way...
fixing your structure couldn't hurt either..
Siphon...not the great, but u get this
you didnt really have any personals, and
i didnt like that fact that you fed on the Onyx line, but...
you had some decent punches...and your verse
was alot more direct...plus you actually had punches
and dissed your opponent...
still i would have liked to see a little more creativity..
but regardless....
v/ Siphon....
2nd uppin......
3rd uppin.
Yo dis wasn't a very good battle both
Mc's lines were a lil shaky. But if I had 2 chose it would be lil e's bcause I could follow
His flow better
4th uppin
upiin lat time..vote & leave a link......................
5th uppin & final.......
plz vote & leave a link.