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bitch thaught i was a newb..your having a laugh
cause hes like girls facing..
..jacent masks..kid took the wrong path
rippar? wtf is that..all you rip is ass
hell yeah the bitch spat on me..
..when he was wearing my mask
just upping my record..dnt need to come dope
but compared to you its like..evolve's shit i just wrote
evolve?..i hear you ask..yeah u wdnt no
cause hes bin here so short..
..he thinks rascal is dope
seriously kid your crewless and..
..k will leave you toothless
even with axioms mod powers..
..kid still couldnt move this
quick merking.newb
What gives you the right to judge me, just cos I couldn't set this shit up in rb,
If it wasn't for me you'd still breathe through your gills,
always believe your stench was Calvin Kleins kipper,
that fragrance don't work on the rippar, I ain't no fag,
"The Judge" written over that name tag, like you're proud of it or something,
when really you're worse than wack, you're nothing, to you i'm befooling
How the fuck can you dare to judge the grim rippar,
there's no explanation except you're a tripper,
the only action you get is aggravating a stripper,
so i kick ya newly scarred face in bro, you'll regret fucking wit my hoe,
maybe you haven't heard that I can shoot faster than Kobe,
Can you not hear me, I agree with my homie,
I scatter the debris of this wack mc, far as the eye can see,
Cos I just cook fake G's like G.Foreman, opposing for anyone to adore them.
oomg........
Vote: Judge, i wish thats all i could write
Judge's opener beat all of your verse dude......way more punches, better flow and style as well. He didnt have many metaphors, but i dont think he needed them or tried very hard
Other dude, you need not to use so many fillers.......be more creative and complex......like.......ur too simple, fix ur structure, cut ur lines down so its not streched.....just keep elivatin and battle newbs for now......
Vote: Judge
PLEASE HIT UP MY BATTLE WITH RIPPAR JUDGE FAIRLY
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. 'Other dude'? :rolleyes: - Axiom
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1st...................1-0 kinda lol............................
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id sat TJ got this but his verse wasnt all that great
he did have better personals but thats about, weak punches
rippar was mostly coming with filler which fucked him up
his punches were also blah and lacked personals, flow
structure goes to TJ even though at times it seemed short
rippar you need to elavate wit making ya struc better man
it was all over the place, wit some lacked wordplay in a sense
come more witty, and vote TJ for being more direct, etc.
vote on one of my battles and dont leave me hanging i took the time
you should also take the time and vote honestly on my battle (battles)
Vote on this here in return!
Well, Rippar's a newb and it shows...
More talk than rap.
Really couldn't find a rhyme scheme, let alone rhymes in that.
Crazy structure, long ass lines, mixed with short ones.
A few metas, but they didn't make alotta sense and seemed very out of place or weren't followed with anything relevant or pertaining to them.
Scattered, confused, and weak was that rhyme, sorry.
Judge, well...
That was whack, really bad, dude.
Why'd you drop that shit? And then drop it first...
He'd have killed you if he'd known what he was doing.
Way too short, structure was almost as fucked as Rippar's...
Only reason you win is cuz you had, maybe 2 decent lines going for you where he had none.
The "evolve", "rascal", and "axiom" lines were ok, but ya hadda drop names to make em so...
Very blah verse, not at all ya best.
But you pulled it out.
Peace
3rd will do 2moz...........thanks...........................
4th please dont sleep...................EVER......thx
5th omg please can we get some votes on thisa................................thanks.
The Judge's Verse:
bitch thaught i was a newb..your having a laugh
cause hes like girls facing..
..jacent masks..kid took the wrong path
Rofl good opener
rippar? wtf is that..all you rip is ass
hell yeah the bitch spat on me..
..when he was wearing my mask
good line 7/10
just upping my record..dnt need to come dope
but compared to you its like..evolve's shit i just wrote
evolve?..i hear you ask..yeah u wdnt no
good punch 10/10
cause hes bin here so short..
..he thinks rascal is dope
seriously kid your crewless and..
..k will leave you toothless
good personal/punch 9/10
even with axioms mod powers..
..kid still couldnt move this
ok closer 5/10
Overall : 17/20
Rippars Verse
What gives you the right to judge me, just cos I couldn't set this shit up in rb,
If it wasn't for me you'd still breathe through your gills,
very bad opener with a stretched line
always believe your stench was Calvin Kleins kipper,
that fragrance don't work on the rippar, I ain't no fag,
Another bad line....2/10
"The Judge" written over that name tag, like you're proud of it or something,
when really you're worse than wack, you're nothing, to you i'm befooling
ok punch not great at all 4/10
How the fuck can you dare to judge the grim rippar,
there's no explanation except you're a tripper,
the only action you get is aggravating a stripper,
got flow back on but still wasnt great 4/10
so i kick ya newly scarred face in bro, you'll regret fucking wit my hoe,
maybe you haven't heard that I can shoot faster than Kobe,
Can you not hear me, I agree with my homie,
played line....no good punch 3/10
I scatter the debris of this wack mc, far as the eye can see,
Cos I just cook fake G's like G.Foreman, opposing for anyone to adore them.
bad closer
Overall: 9/20
Overall vote- The Judge
The judge had Good punchs. Rippar really didnt have anything. He had no flow. Stretched lines and no hard punchs. Rippar needs to elevate.
peace.
I thought that the judge had a shitty verse being more direct with whacness shouldn't get him these votes..
Rippar took this to me his lines were just better even thought his is new..
vote rippar
Rippar
your verse did not flow at all, you had weak punches, bars that ended with weak words that didnt contain any metaphors or similies.....i felt like you didnt put thought into your verse. Your lines are kinda stretched, like refrain frfom ryhming 3 bars with each other cuz it sounds weird. structure was ok, try to even shit out more.......and dont extend your bars just to add more multies, narrow shit down, get right to the poing with ur verse.......
Judge had similes and shorter straight to the point disses. nothing extrodinary , but his verse was enough to take the battles. He had similes in his verse, such as his openeer. it flowed alrite, didnt really feel the structure, thats not my style, but it was still kinda easy to follow......alot more than Rippars
Vote: Judge
Judge hit up 1 another one of m ybattles fairly dude for this feedback
Just search my name
cya
Umm..
Rippar.. not a bad attempt for a first battle. You've got the ideas there.. used multies and similies etc.. but they didn't make much impact.
You need to concentrate on simple personal punchlines more than anything else to be honest.
There was alot of filler in the verse, shit talk kinda stuff.. whereas Judge aimed every line at you.
it wasn't too bad.. but have a few battles and look back, and I'm sure you'll see where you went wrong yourself.
Judge.. Structure was iffy.. I don't like those short lines to be honest.. but you had good personals.. and some nice punches overall.
e.g.. Wise Mynd fucked up your bars in his vote.. he didn't know what bars were connected etc..
You need to go for a more traditional structure.
Tho your verse was good enough to take this no matter what.. it hit harder in most aspects.
V/The Judge