10 lines
I spit first
Hit this up honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124845
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10 lines
I spit first
Hit this up honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124845
Peace It
check check check innnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
hurry up man im nearly done
i am gona spit in 2 mins be quick
Ma Lines belong on front..white boy ere im a make u black u gonna get burnt!
Trigdor belong in the farm so plz hold ur grunt... u cant jump and complete dis stunt!
I imagine u as the nxt vanilla ice on tv!
U another bitch so change ur name to bonnie!
Imagine u in a magazine o wait they would rename it a FAGazine!
The article 4 u would be renamed more "unseen of the new mr bean"
Trogdor u have a name which name which belongs on planet mars
Your soft like rubber and i aint talkin bout the ones in your moms drawers!
U spit 1st..ever since birth on earth..ma spits r runnin like pipes that r burst
lil bitch..u always hide..u mite as well put a bra on your pc screen since u love hiding!
soz it got a bit scretched..wen the hell r u gonna spit
I wont make fun of your zero and ten record.......its bad enough Im facin u
you could say Im almost transparent....cuz your lines will pass right through
his sig says he's a Legend Killer......I guess the kinda one with out a defeat
stupid kid, u'd turn up the air condition if you were asked to hide the heat
elivate, get in shape....go to boot camp like Jenny Jones guests on her show
hardly raisin attention, always comin cheaper than Detroit Piston commercials
u have a lot to learn, but u can still leave, pretend this is a college lecture
this submarine hasnt even sunk yet.............so Im far frum under pressure
when u spit u simply blow, Yo's rhymes stick to his own face like gum bubbles
now one of us is bound to come ugly.......like spottin pairs of lesbian couples
And i have a feeling it will be you
Bye
up........nice spit
IM still waitin for an honest vote dude on this battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124845
YO YO YO, that was a poor start. Your punchlines didn't were quite weak, and you used quite a lot of filler.
Some of your lines were quite lame such as:
FAGazine!, unseen of the new mr bean, etc.
You should try not to use filler an make your rhymes a bit more complex.
Trogdor, you had some hard hitting punchlines
Good start, dissin his record (gd personals), although could have been better
gd comeback about the "tv" lines
strong ending.
Vote: Trogdor
whoa whoa whoa...merkingz..
yoyoyo got riped...
yoyoyo- ya shit waas weak....all fillers....no decent landing pucnehs..ur flow waz iight...ya sturcutre was off...n ya punches laked cretivity
trogdor- ur shit was tite...punches were good..u had da better structure...ya flow waz ok...n ya punches were nice...they were creative and thought ou...next tiem battle sum1 wit a slitely better record..lol...cuz u merked em!..
vote- trogdor...easily....
yoyoyo- elevate dawg...
upinnnnnnn
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yo yo yo- u got murked homie. ur opener was wack and didnt even rhyme. ur punchlines were weak and corny as hell. u had a wack ass personel and just to let u know....ur mama jokes well punches never work. ur lines were streched and messed up ur flow and structure.
trogdor- ur verse was aight. liked ur opener about that dude record, good personel. ur punches hit hard and were pretty creative. ur structure and flow moved along good and u get mah vote formurkin this weak mc.
vote- trogdor
ayo vote for da battle in mah sig
^Vote polled
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rite first of i wanna say you both have to
work on your structure cause shit was
streched in places wich really affected
your flow in both verses yall.............but
anyway the winner is trog thanks to
he actually threw a battle verse with
alot harder punches.....unlike Yo
who didnt hit atall...also trog stayed
consistent
pls re-hit this up trog and explain more so i can get ax to re-poll your vote...thz alot man
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=124997
man please re explain my battle so i can get it polled.....thanks alot^link
yoyoyo-
Ma Lines belong on front..white boy ere im a make u black u gonna get burnt!
Trigdor belong in the farm so plz hold ur grunt... u cant jump and complete dis stunt!
first-burnt/stunt dont rhyme at all...weak line no punch no rhyme 0-for effort
I imagine u as the nxt vanilla ice on tv!
U another bitch so change ur name to bonnie!
tv-bonnie shit rhyme but ok, not much here no personal/weak punch 4/10
Imagine u in a magazine o wait they would rename it a FAGazine!
The article 4 u would be renamed more "unseen of the new mr bean"
gay jokes are played...no wordplay weak punch 4/10
Trogdor u have a name which name which belongs on planet mars
Your soft like rubber and i aint talkin bout the ones in your moms drawers!
sex/gay jokes again played as shit weak punch again 4/10
U spit 1st..ever since birth on earth..ma spits r runnin like pipes that r burst
lil bitch..u always hide..u mite as well put a bra on your pc screen since u love hiding!
these two lines sucked...first one sucked no punch talkin bout yaself n u suck anyways...2nd line no punch didnt rhyme at all lmao bad... 1/10
13/50...work on ya strucuture...also on your punche sn personals thye weak...
Trogdor-
I wont make fun of your zero and ten record.......its bad enough Im facin u
you could say Im almost transparent....cuz your lines will pass right through
koncpet wus good didnt hit hard 5/10
his sig says he's a Legend Killer......I guess the kinda one with out a defeat
stupid kid, u'd turn up the air condition if you were asked to hide the heat
lmao I was rollin never heard htis concept before...7/10
elivate, get in shape....go to boot camp like Jenny Jones guests on her show
hardly raisin attention, always comin cheaper than Detroit Piston commercials
I dont like non rhymin lines...dint rhyme much...punch wus weak also 3/10
u have a lot to learn, but u can still leave, pretend this is a college lecture
this submarine hasnt even sunk yet.............so Im far frum under pressure
concept sorta played but good setup on 1st line 5/10
when u spit u simply blow, Yo's rhymes stick to his own face like gum bubbles
now one of us is bound to come ugly.......like spottin pairs of lesbian couples
gay/sex jokes again..played!...weak pun...4/10
24/50...1 below average non rhymin lines i hate em...structure wus bit stretched...but keep it up your pretty good some nice punches...
My V/Trogdor...better overall
Lol..
YO-
Ma Lines belong on front..white boy ere im a make u black u gonna get burnt!
Trigdor belong in the farm so plz hold ur grunt... u cant jump and complete dis stunt!
What the hell? This was filler to me..
I imagine u as the nxt vanilla ice on tv!
U another bitch so change ur name to bonnie!
I dunno what to call this..personal? no.. punch? hardly..
Imagine u in a magazine o wait they would rename it a FAGazine!
The article 4 u would be renamed more "unseen of the new mr bean"
Dude..first line was mad played, second was blah
Trogdor u have a name which name which belongs on planet mars
Your soft like rubber and i aint talkin bout the ones in your moms drawers!
2 things..1, first line made no sense..2, mom jokes are wack/old/gay
U spit 1st..ever since birth on earth..ma spits r runnin like pipes that r burst
lil bitch..u always hide..u mite as well put a bra on your pc screen since u love hiding!
Umm..self glorification? Wack..second line..no
Wack verse. Period.
*******
Trogdor-
I wont make fun of your zero and ten record.......its bad enough Im facin u
you could say Im almost transparent....cuz your lines will pass right through
Decent bar, woulda used this later in the verse and came with a different opener, but it was aight
his sig says he's a Legend Killer......I guess the kinda one with out a defeat
stupid kid, u'd turn up the air condition if you were asked to hide the heat
Lol..liked this...you played him out to be dumb, while putting in a personal.. which was nice
elivate, get in shape....go to boot camp like Jenny Jones guests on her show
hardly raisin attention, always comin cheaper than Detroit Piston commercials
This was creative and all, but it was kinda filler...didnt feel this one too much..
u have a lot to learn, but u can still leave, pretend this is a college lecture
this submarine hasnt even sunk yet.............so Im far frum under pressure
Had something with the first line, but second seemed a lil played and forced..
when u spit u simply blow, Yo's rhymes stick to his own face like gum bubbles
now one of us is bound to come ugly.......like spottin pairs of lesbian couples
Ehh..kinda weak....didnt really help that it was a sex joke..
Overall, you basically had everything that YO didnt have lol...structure, creativity, personals which were key here..flow was ok, your bars were kinda stretched, might wanna try cuttin back a bit though..Not too bad bro..
Vote / Trogdor
Out....