Born to Kill vs. Adz

He called out through PM's and after not setting it up right, I've stepped in ta do it...

Here's his verse...

Quote:

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This is 4 u Born 2 Kill!!!!!!!!!

Born to kill you aint spittin ill/think you never get beaten your gonna get eaten im chew you up spit you out/Born to kill im spittin to ill you a fake ass nigga/ you aint got what it takes to spit against me you aint no real mc/You wanna get real you never gonna get a deal a sleazy ass nigga who never made it/You was born to kill not born to spit so stop wasting your time rappin no FuCKERZ clappin/In this game you'll get shot up bye me ill leave you to rot when ive blasted you wit my lyrics theres only 1 real mc/you wanna be liek a frog and leap then spit again infact ill post you a pen/Write some rhymes get back to me when your a better mc face it dawg you never gonna Fu(kin beat me/Im end this shit now im finished i spit my shit its over im out!!!!!!

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I'll follow with something after I eat lunch...

When I fixed the thread, I shoulda also fixed his rhyme...
Cuz he forgot ta ad our names, and any talent in his lines.
One big fuckin paragraph shows ya suckin's off tha hook...
Kid, if I'd wanted format like that, I'd read a better book!
Now he's already lost, only 4 of my lines equaled death...
Cuz all you did was jerk off, when I said ta spit ya best.
Mostly blank profile, but I did see ya like wine up in here...
Cept you didn't age well, just proved 87' was a bad year.
What's next? I guess I'll give that whack name a bone...
Cuz this dawg's proud of Adz, his Attention Deficit Zone.

yo this was a no brainer b2k got this

xplinations

b2k-yo man, nice perdsonals and punches, funny wordplay too, nice opener and closer too, nice verse, good structure, almost every bar equaled up and it flowed very well.
keep it up

adz-just, not really ay punches, there were a few but none to really hurt, they wre kinda played and your structure was hard to follow, considerin it was a paragraph. not a lot of wordplay eeither, flow was off at some points. ThingsTo Work on: better punches, better structure, and more meats.

peace

roflmao vote b2k and dont ask why or dq this vote
blah, b2k merked this cat, adz u need some elavation

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lmmfao i accidently voted for adz omfg
yo b2k u can fix that cant u, my bad lol

thanks for the help dawg was only my first battle ill work on my shit

np, i try to help in feedback, just think if we can fix noobs in they early stages, the furture wont be wack

peace

Lol i agree B2K had this one all the way, Adz is an obvious rookie who just seemed to ramble on, no creative wordplay not a single good punch to his name while B2K effortlessly as he sed excelled Adz' verse with a mere 2 bars, my vote-B2K, 1luv.

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aiight is there a need for an explanation here or what? BTK merked this one, took every catagory, no need for any further explaining just look at his verse. Adz man work on ur shit, thats all i can say, more battles ur in the better ull get.

Vote BTK hands down.... holla

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sorry fellas that i dont have enough posts to poll
but here's what i thought anyways...

Btk took this easily...Adz quickly go to the help center
your verse was crap...first off it was literally painful to
read...ditch the paragraph structure and try using a
simple rhyme scheme, it was too hard to identify
your scheme...if there was one..second yer drop completely
lacked any personals or punches, and basically everything
else that a battle verse should have...wit, creativity, etc...
work on everything and try to elevate..if possible
Born...decent verse...but you really didnt need much
...that fact that you actually used punches
and personals could have won this for you...
still though you were way better in every aspect...
punches, personals, creativity, wit, and structure

v/ Born

umm this was a hard one.......................... not really

b2k u merked him with your first 3 bars alone

Aides- u cant write a paragraph it makes it hard to read and follow, i lost ya a couple times and had to re-read, i hate doin that. your punches didnt hit that hard and were pretty played. Rhymes were elementary.

B2K - good opener and closer, punches all hit except one. Nice word play and multies, every one knows that u know what ur doin on here. It was hot, only part i didnt like was the filler before the last line, but good closer, just would have liked to see somethin better b4 it.

clean sweep
structure- b2k
rhymes - b2k
punches - b2k
personals - b2k
multies - b2k

v- b2k

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Uppin # 1...

Let's close this up, I've got others waiting.

Peace

uppin

ok

first adz

Born to kill you aint spittin ill/think you never get beaten your gonna get eaten im chew you up spit you out/Born to kill im spittin to ill you a fake ass nigga/ you aint got what it takes to spit against me you aint no real mc/You wanna get real you never gonna get a deal a sleazy ass nigga who never made it/You was born to kill not born to spit so stop wasting your time rappin no FuCKERZ clappin/In this game you'll get shot up bye me ill leave you to rot when ive blasted you wit my lyrics theres only 1 real mc/you wanna be liek a frog and leap then spit again infact ill post you a pen/Write some rhymes get back to me when your a better mc face it dawg you never gonna Fu(kin beat me/Im end this shit now im finished i spit my shit its over im out!!!!!!

Ok couldnt didnt know where to start to break his verse down, reall it wasnt very good, nothin really hit hard, no decent punches or personals, wordplay was very poor and so was his structure. it didnt have aflow with it at all man. no decent vocab or shit so overall im gonna say ver poor and you need to elevate.
2/10
b2k


When I fixed the thread, I shoulda also fixed his rhyme...
Cuz he forgot ta ad our names, and any talent in his lines.
Ok not bad opener.
One big fuckin paragraph shows ya suckin's off tha hook...
Kid, if I'd wanted format like that, I'd read a better book!
not very good personal,
Now he's already lost, only 4 of my lines equaled death...
Cuz all you did was jerk off, when I said ta spit ya best.
lol ok punch,
Mostly blank profile, but I did see ya like wine up in here...
Cept you didn't age well, just proved 87' was a bad year.
ok personal there
What's next? I guess I'll give that whack name a bone...
Cuz this dawg's proud of Adz, his Attention Deficit Zone.
again ok personal
6.5/10
b2k had an pretty good verse, didnt need to come very hard to beat adz but still dropped ok, he had a few personals that hit well and had some nice punches, structure was ight and ya flow was good 2.

B2K took this battles as he came harder and had bette hits.

great battle.....too bad the great didnt pertain to adz!

born to kill had a good verse....kinda simple...but it did the trick....punches hit and so did the personals....flow was good and so was the structure.......opener and closer was good and the verse itself was very strong..good read from you

adz on the other hand had no wordplay no punches no personals that hit..bascially his verse was crap....gotta work on personals......the flow was too simplistic....get better with that also....structure sucked...elevate lots....verse was bad with rhymes that didnt make sense...work on it

v/born to kill

Lol@this battle

Adz - Elevate. Before you battle again, get a feel for whats kinda expected here. Read other battles, shit like that. You had a lot of blah in your verse..fix up the structure like this

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..instead of hi my names kyle/got a wack style/wheres my nail file/ ... that stuff..you'll get the hang of it man, dont worry.

B2K - Lol. I liked the closer alot, I'm a fan of playing on peoples names, they make good personals, and you did a nice one. I agree with Cat, it was one of your more simpler verses that I've read from ya, but you didnt need to bring much. Nonetheless, you came creative and effective. Also, funny diss on his birth year...lol .. you know you won this, nice job..as usual.

Vote / B2K

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