14 lines
Spit whenever, just dont take that long
Peace
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14 lines
Spit whenever, just dont take that long
Peace
checkin in...i'll drop later tonite cuz i got stuff to do ...aight
ya flows sewage, ur a rat like applyin for crime stoppers
this battle win is so simply, u could call me an ease dropper
ur sig reads "Voice of the Streets", thats while screamin and bein raped
duck taped in a back alley with ya cheeks squeezed like wine grapes
i piss on this kids lines...like rugbe sweaters in warm beer
bring his nightmares to reality and have Mix livin in fear
kids plastic, denture teeth, a vegetarian could serve me more beaf
fuck prewritin i'll grab a branch and beat you with a loose leaf
this kid wouldnt get noticed during robbery with out a mask
I just cant picture u survivin...like bumbs without a flask
i'll leave u bruised up like plastic serjury patients uncovered
im battlin emcee enonomous...this kid will never get discovered
okay quick one....
You stupid bitch. you'll never match my lucid wits
Think you gonna win this battle..hahano..you're losin it
I'm smooth with wits, leave your brain bruised and unfit to function
Then no more of your inaccurate assumptions
You're a big fruit, getting smashed like pumpkins
Lyrically, I'm the devil, call me the hel''s vet, i spit with so much fire i make your cells sweat
Can't you tell yet, Trogdor compels sets, while u wouldn't make sense if u used spell check
In this battle you're helpless, i'll expose the real life u chose so just hope u don't get banned quick
You cram dicks up in ur damp clit cuz you're on some mam shit, don't panic, everyone knows you're not a man bitch
Watch your celebration plans switch to elevation damn quick when u lose wit ur bland scripts
I'll make your ram glitch when my hits devastate gateways just like i planned it
But how can you think you're a gangster when u quote like Shakesphere
Damn, i got better things to do than serve fakes here, let me make the stakes clear
You challenged And1mix to try & boost ur rep, so if u win u hope you'll be classified as a vet
But i take pride in this set so i let it be known the most in depth you'll get is when you're laid to rest
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alright, this votes as honest as its gonna get........................
And1Mix- U started it off well. I like ya opener, but then as i kept readin i seen how u kept stretching ya lines more and more and more. Like i say to most, stretched lines are good in some places but most of ya lines in ya verse. They sounded alright as i kept reading. When there was a punch u were setting up, it didnt sound right cause u would stretch ya lines. So pretty much wut im tryin to say is that when u started to stretch all ya lines ya wordplay was pretty much fucked 6 ways in and out. No hate but seriously. Ya vocab, was pretty good, usage i liked. Ya structure was like i said not the best mainly cause of ya stretched lines. Ya metas was pretty good. And personals were good.
Trogdor- u had a goof verse. I like ur verse alot, it was short and easily red, and it was kinda simple, didnt take forever to find out wut u meant like some battles i have red previously. Ya vocab was straight, u used some simple words, try to use some more difficult words to have the wordplay better. Ya structure was good. Ya opener was toos simple, ya closer ont he other hand was good, i liked that, creative. Metas were good, overall ur verse was good.
so my vote goes to- Trogdor(mainly because it was easly red, An1Mix narrow ur lines down a bit, then ull be well off) overall this was a good battle.
Alright now, And1Mix poll my battle, and trogdor how about hittin the same battle up, since i hit ur battle up, thanks, heres da link, http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=122857
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Trogdor - Your structure was good, no problems there. Everything flowed well and looked good. Your vocabulary was decent, and you had lots of excellent punches. The vegetarian one, the bum one, and the closer were probably your best. Your punches were consistent and well done, but you could've used more personals and multies.
And1mix - Multies like woah. That's the first thing I noticed about your verse... full of multies. Unfortunately, the lyrical skill stopped there. I felt you didn't live up to it with your vocab which was simplistic, and your wordplay could've been far better. You went all out dissing rather than punches, which is what kind of lost you the battle. Trogdor was more wittier and hurt you on a deeper level. Your end was nice though. Also, try fixing up your structure - it was all over the place.
vote = Trogdor
Return the favour by voting honestly on my battle VS UNDEAD in front lines... thanks and peace
alright, and1mix you came with some strong diction and nice flow accompanied by some decent punches and personals. I would read over your rhymes b4 u post them because there was 1 thing that didn't make sense. ( even tho i know what you were trying 2 say ) All in all a good verse! Keep it up and1mix
Trogdor you came in with nice flow outstanding punches and good personals. I enjoyed reading your verse cause it was very insulting. Extra points on that shit bretheran. Your vocab was good too and you used words effectively. This was a close battle but I would have to vote 4 trogdor because his verse had a better use of humor than and1mix's did.
vote/ trogdor
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i put vote to trogdor u dun wel man i think
u were lyricaly better wid ur punch lines ect....................
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ok rookie prooved he is a rookie cuz that votes gonna ge dq'ed as soon as a mod sees it
fuckin awesome battle though it was real fuckin close
Trogdor - What the fuck does that mean first off, and hows that pernounced? lmfao. Your shit was hot kid, loved the play on words that were all over the place. Great opened, it could have been for anyone, but in his sig it did say somethin about bein that simple and u used simply, so i'ma give u the benefit of the doubt. Multis were pretty good and u punches weren't anything massive, but they were good. Counting the first two bars, ... um u had two personals, i would have liked to see more personals, his name should set up a couple, but u only used his sig.
And1- Loved the multis kid, good multis, and good punches. Structure was very well done also, but u had no personals, i know he aint gotta sig and Trogdor is a fuckin weird name and i wouldn't know what to do with that shit either, but he's from windsor and thats really the only thing u can use. U had 14 lines to use and one really should have had somethin about windsor, england, or a fuckin windy pun or meta or somethin. U gotta use personals to prove that u didnt pre-write, but besides that great fuckin verse man, u gotta lot of potential and can see u merkin a lot of cats on here.
Structure - And1
Multis- And1
Rhyme- Tie
Punches - Trogdor
PERSONALS - TROGDOR
V- TROGDOR
sorryto free post but can you guys return the favor and hit up my battle in my sig
thanks
this is a tight, tight, battle
u both cam with ill punches metaphores and good structure but and1 had a good flow with lots of multis in it and his opener and closer wer better than tragdor
vote-and 1
return the favor, honest vote
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I know i was guna use his And1 name as a personal but it'd be too wack
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Trog wins for having a format that was about 20 times better...
And though he came played a bit, he still put together a decent attack.
Some whack, but also some interesting concepts.
Kinda down the middle, he went.
Now...go peep some Gauntlet battles or 1-2 Punch lines, Mix...
No one, but no one stretches lines like you do.
Ya calling that 14 lines?
I see more like 25-30.
Cut that shit out.
And stop trying to multi up constantly.
It dampens your punch and forces your wordplay.
A little here and there is cool, but too much sucks.
And learn to punch, you talked at him too much.
Askin questions and shit...just diss, clown him.
Winner: Trog
Peace