rules:
10 lines
no feedin
no bitin
no hate votes
no d/r
no crew votes
each verse due 2 hours after their check-in
GL mayne
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rules:
10 lines
no feedin
no bitin
no hate votes
no d/r
no crew votes
each verse due 2 hours after their check-in
GL mayne
check check check check checkin in........................good luck to u too man........................
aight kid u checked in lets get the time started, heres ma checkin aswell...............................verses due in 2 hours or less
it's this kats first official battle, & he starts off with me
could care less if ya good or bad...........................
..................u aint shit to me, & i say that repeatedly
Vanja..............& and hip-hop, dont mix too well
from the earths core.................................
...........just a preview of ya next home........HELL
uv been on my dick ever since i battled Mr. Watson
suckin up, & complimenting like u always wantin some
now its cool im the first u wanted to start with
so i can show u the 'wants' of wanting to forfeit
bitch, should of thought twice before accepting......
.....to whom forth u never thought u were expecting
this is just a quick keystyle
Aight here we go man......
You say u a student....aight then Ima teach u some shit
Lesson 1 dont battle Vanja..matter of fact thats what every lesson is
Want jewels?,well Ima drop a "couple"...like I shot u and yo date
Skill is "foreign" to u..so when readin this get someone to translate
I got "grizzly" lyrics u cant "bear"...so u better play dead
Dumb fuck,I lost 10 IQ points jus being wit u in the same thread
Delivery,flow,lyrics...I got every part coverd like Afghan women
Thought I was ill befo...but like Hypers puberty Im jus beginin'
Like Pac,no matter what they say...u dead and aint comin back
I just left u like every book on my shelf..."red" front to back
~1~
aight lets get some votes, uppin(1).................
i don't care if that was a keystyle, you got merked hyper active, you had way too many pauses, not as good flow, barely rhymed, the only aight line u had was the earths core one, and that seems to simple and played, vanja, u had a better flow, some lines could have been better, took this in wordplay n metas, punches, and closer, opener wasn't too good, both of you need to try n rhyme a bit more, all in all my vote goes to vanja, keep elevating, and i'd really really appreciate if you voted on one or 2 of those battles in my sig
my v/ vanja
^^^uhh....im gonna say those r ur two best lines.......ok personal.......punch on the second line was weak.....overall ur verse was ok.......u gotta get a new structure......u usin the vet structure just didnt work out......ur set ups and punches were off.....just madness.....ur flow was decent.....ok metas.......there wasnt to much wordplay........most of ur punches didnt connect.......ok personals.......Quote:
Originally Posted by HYPER-ACTYVE
^^^im gonna say those were ur two best lines......stop puttin " " around ur words, thats newbish.....but u had pretty good wordplay......punch was a lil played but still ok......overall ur verse was pretty nice......ur structure was good......flow was on target......no metas......wordplay was tight.......some of ur punches connected......personals were ok....Quote:
Originally Posted by Vanja
conclusion - vanja wins this......y?......she had a better structure (though this is not a factor in winnin the battle)......her flow was better, hyperactyves fell off cause he tried usin the vet structure......hyper had more metas.......vanja smoked him in wordplay.....vanjas punches connected more......personals were about even....so basing off of that......vanja gets my vote......
VOTE - VANJA
aight that straight, but wut is the vet structure?, then it seems everyone bitin everyone hey style, but its straight uppin(2)................
yo i vote for V..............dat dude killllllllled you out there.....that was better then yours period...no joke...check it out you self........check out my batttttles.....ight...one
shut the hell up, u aint won the one against me, u gotta ryhme to get some votes, and u aint do that, so stfu u stupid bitch, oh yeah u aint aloud to vote, fuckin newb...uppin
Uppin...............up Up Up Up..........................uppin................. .....................
yo vanja how but hittin ma battle up with Zee the 2nd, aight, thanks, uppin(40)......
my fault i meant uppin(4), now its fuckin (5).....................shit
Sorry to freepost here guys....
I'll check this and place my vote tomorrow when I get up. I can't look it over now, but I said I would check it for yous. If its closed I'll check another battle of yours.
Goodluck to you both. Sorry again.
Hyper Actyve- Good verse, punches were okay. But you got killed sorry to say. I saw that you had too many pauses it looked like. Your flowz were decent, and so were your metas, but there wasn't any wordplay, and your personals were okay not the greatest.
Vanja- Your verse was nice. You had better punches then him. Your structure was nice. Personals were okay. But the reason you get my vote is you had better punches, and you had better wordplay.
vote- Vanja
i will poll once you hit my battle ...peace http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=122916
Alright...
hyper- I guess u know whats coming from me. I like that you keep trying new things and trying to elevate more though. Way too many "......" if you wanna use that style, it can be done without those. Your punches were lacking in this verse, and personals... the new style messed up ur flow and strucutre. But keep at it
vanja- Your verse was decent. You came really nice in a few areas, but not all. You had harder hitting punches then ur opponent and a few personals in your verse. All in all it was pretty good.
vote- vanj
Hmm..
HYPER -- First thing that comes to mind? Plain. Nothing really caught my eye in this drop man..I agree with the structure move, gotta do something about that. Punches were general at best, flow was actually ok for the most part..the structure kinda made it choppy at points but, eh, ok..and whats up with the closer? That was basic man..close to filler kinda.....
Vanja -- Wordplay was pretty dope. IQ line has been used to death tho..other than that not bad in that area..Came with a few personals, they were aight, try and stay away from sex jokes, they're kinda played out...your wasnt so bad, just gets old reading common ones over and over..ya know? Structure was nice, beginning flow was kinda hard, but really smoothed out after first bar or 2..not a bad drop..
Overall, my vote goes to Vanja for simply haveing a more complete verse and bringing it harder..also edged him out in most of the 'voting' categories too
Vote / Vanja
Peace..
UM lol was this a battle.....
Hyper YOu wack KID
Didn't rhyme flow no wordplay no punches besides ONE
Vanja came with a lil more but really wasn't all that HOt.....
he brung more direct punches and flow was on point and wordplay was aiight
so with that said
Vote Vanja
By the way i wanna battle you both aiight