Topical Battle
Topic= The Power Of Words
10-20 lines
good luck man
blind spit
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Topical Battle
Topic= The Power Of Words
10-20 lines
good luck man
blind spit
checkity-check, alrite how much time i got?
i might have to post up my verse lat'r.
but tell my how much time i got and ill try to post before the limit is over
altie im going to have to post lat'r
dont worry i wont be a no-show
when it comes to my words, consider them the hercules of lyrics
because mine over-power the opinion of a million
my rhymes are powerful, you can actually feel the force of my rage
i engage with verbal spray to judge subjects and to show-off on the stage
ghnadi said words never hurt but i express my mind with force
and i endorse my self-expression until im classified as a corpse
i curse to show my serious matter and also to make time-elapse
i make other opinion collapse until they agree with my mine
i use words to unveil what is hidden in my membrane
and i never strain to use my voice offensively and so postively
words got the ability to destroy a persons self-esteem
and they got the strength to support someone reach they're dream
hopw you didnt forget
correction
and they got the strength to support someone reach they're dream
it should be
"someone reach their dream"
I came with a different approach...
The Power of Words
She sits drowning in tears now face to face with depression
Faded makeup for the sake of taste mix with her expression
Kneeled at the head of the bed holding the pillow against her
She cries with all her might but shes still her only contender
No defender there to mend her heart for when they offend her
Left alone in her own zone to moan spread dead in the center
Gave up on God and all those who claimed to have an answer
There’s no way to escape the framed pain that romanced her
So she felt that pain itself would rid her of the pain shes taken
But how can absence fill the presence of all that feels forsaken?
Its so sad to see this girl crying but even more sad is the reason
Especially to say everydays the same and its not just the season
We evoke jokes about the people and are blind to see its creation
And its not the last fact that it happens all around today’s nation
It seems a thousand miles away even if its right before our eyes
Theres a simple solution to the induced confusion of demised lies
Its so easy to turn a princess to a witch with just a switch of words
Just one insult could enforce a poor soul who was once rich at first
All it takes to break the hearts of cards is a few laughs and a chain
Those chains are made by what we say in days that beauty is slain
this is an okay battle i think...........
............uppin
Mmmk..
PERPETUAL -- Aight, overall it wasnt a bad verse. Nice use of vocabulary and flow was alright. Rhyme scheme was a lil off towards the end..you let 'positively' kinda hang in the air with nothin to rhyme with it..and 'membrane' & 'mine' were kinda borderline. Structure wasnt too bad, could improve a lil..you had some powerful adjectives which really helped the imagery..not a bad one..
Ace - I really liked your approach..the opener got me interested right off the bat and that's important. Structure and flow were right on point, vocab wasnt too bad..rhyme scheme was fine. You stuck more to a story approach and I'm naturally a fan of that a lil more..overall I really enjoyed this spit man, imagery was awesome..in my opinion, this is one of yur best, at least that I've read. Keep it real.
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^ very nice.Quote:
Originally Posted by Ace of Aces
No hate to perpetual at all, just thought Ace brought this nicely..
Vote / Ace of Aces
This is an easy battle to vote on...
Perpetual-Ok verse. Didn't rhyme a lot of times. Structure was pretty bad. Kinda good vocab.
Ace-This verse was tight. Structure was good, flow was good, originality. You came waaaay more...well, just came batter. Deep stuff. Got me hooked from the start.
Ace took this because everything in his verse just simply was better.
thanks for the votes
i guess i dont do too bad for a 14 year old, huh, lol
yea i am 14, nice verse ace
upping 1,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,,,,
yea man. good job.........
......uppin..................
uppin thanx............
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It seems a thousand miles away even if its right before our eyes
Theres a simple solution to the induced confusion of demised lies
Its so easy to turn a princess to a witch with just a switch of words
Just one insult could enforce a poor soul who was once rich at first
All it takes to break the hearts of cards is a few laughs and a chain
Those chains are made by what we say in days that beauty is slain
That was just sick flow and meaning, dude...
Really, really good.
Perp came pretty good, nice use of multi's himself.
But there was no imagery, no story.
Strictly self prop.
Sorry, I like a good story complete with imagery, emotion, all that.
Ace's had that, his didn't.
Ace wins.
Peace
Hit my rematch with Lyrical King...first page...Front Lines...sorry for not having the link, it vanished when I cut and pasted Ace's lines.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=122067
Please vote vsHardHitter (just need 1 vote)
Ace- good ass verse. Your punches were much better then his. Your flow was nice and so was your structure. Your punches were creative and it seems you wanted to win more then him so good on everything really.
Perpetual- Yous was okay not the greatest. Some of your punches really didnt hit. Flow sucked...but you gotta work on ur personals dawg. You need to elevate more. But this was just a one handed battle. Plus learn how to do tropicals...
vote- Ace of Aces
I will poll when you check my battle out promise.....i hate sleepers...~1~
wtf?^^^^^^^^^
this was a topical battle, not akeystyle battle
but thanks for the props every1, im only 14 so im just starting so thanks for the votes
upping #2
^yea, you came good. im 16. maybe by my age you'll be even better. =)
Quote:
Originally Posted by PERPETUAL
my name is YOUNG-G
ya dont know me
i dont knowyou
but right now its time to insault you
i'ma burn yo ass agen, i wont forget
next time ya gonna choke and forfet
i'm like m from 8mile
n yo PAPA DOC dat got his ass burned after i freestyled
i'm a bad guy look
ya piss me off i'ma pull yo throat out wit a hook
i gotta go cuz i gotta eat
wen i see you i'ma cut yo feet
PEACE!!!!!
garbage^someone delete that, i could post up a better verse than that
upping 3
Vote- Ace
His verse was a story, probably about an ex or sumthing. It flowed in every part and had meaning to it. He threw nice multies in there which made it flow alot nicer.
The other dude was just goin on about himself, and that is not what a topical is really about. Dont revolve around yourself in a topical, or brag about your words of power cuz thats not the point
Easy win for Ace
Ace since u can pooll, u mind hittin up one of my battles for once lol, thanks make it fair
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post1306754