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drop in by couple hrs
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10+ lines
drop in by couple hrs
u spit first
checking in I'll spit when im done with this work
aiight im back give me 30minutes to spit aiight
Kinda rusty but whatever let me see if i can still merk niggas.
Yo check, This kid is The Reason Why ‘Child’ern Should Be ‘Seen And Not Heard’...
Ya Girl Been ‘Trained’ More Than Remixs Of ‘Loco-motion’...
Show Devotion.... I ‘Fill U With More Shells’ Than The ‘Pacific Ocean’...
Whenever he Look Down...he Can’t help but-Frown ...
Like ‘ctrl, alt, Delete’ I Got Ya Style ‘Shut-Down’...
This Is Ya first Battle But Now Its still Time for YouTo Retire...
No ‘strings’ attached to this ‘flame’ but u still in the ‘Line Of Fire’...
Ya Game Is ‘Broke’ No ‘Funds’ To Support U All the Feelings Are ‘MUTUAL’...
I use ya ‘cuticals’ to ‘nail’ ya coffin shut at the funeral...
Ya Live In A ‘Landfill’ Thas Why Ya Life Is A ‘WASTE’...
Put ‘Electric Currents’ To Ya ‘Heart’ So U Can Keep Up The ‘Pace’ ...
Playin ‘TAG’ ‘Backwordz’ Is The Only Time U Twirled Tha ‘GAT’...
Ya Spine??? I Snap...Got Ya Hoe Like My ‘Cough Syrup’ She’s A ‘DIME-A-Tap’...u ‘carry a nine’ ...
U ‘Sunk’ Like A ‘Worm’ And Were Left Dead ‘On-Line’...
Your gonna be shut down:
Hay yo, i'm makin dat 'dough' by tha day, gonna cut ur throat so there's no more 'airway' passin thru. I'll smack the mic in ur 'mouth',cuz theres bout to be a 'drought' in tha 'south'. I'm always practicing tha tools of tha 'trades', while you
in jail playin uh game of 'spades'. I gotta lotta fans that be callin my name, bustin you up in da 'game' cuz you 'lame', wait uh minutes....where's all the 'fame'? I'm bout to 'blame' ya for your actions, then light ya up in 'flames'. You say you a 'player', i'ma straight up shoot ya 'dealer'. I'm wearin these wife 'beaters', gettin it all bloody cuz i just stabbed you wit this meat 'cleaver'. I'm pickin out tha seeds n 'stems', i'm bout to tell D12 that you messin wit 'eminem'. They'll brake ya 'face', believe me they wont leave no 'trace', cuz they aint no 'disgrace.'
aiight uppin fro votes and dont forget to hit the poll 2
well i gotta say both you catz need to elevate.. come more personal...
...but who won?.. well.. im gonna have to go with Jae, he brought more wordplay, and slightly harder punches... the other verse wasnt as clear, as in, the bars,, you need to set up punches better... and work on connecting, but that goes for both.... not a good battle, but you gotta start somewhere so.... vote=jae
... oh and jae, check my sig.. then read the rules on voting......lol
oh and both of you, dont highlight things.. we know whats there.. jus a tip...
Fears
hmm extended barz, not much multis, you just started battlin im guessing?
not hatin just statin that u need to elevate... wtf? did u just say your gonna tell d12 that hes messin with Eminem LMAO!!!
JaY_MuAh
your 1st battle? Anyways you had good multis and stuff..
just take all the '' out ya lyrics to fix the structure.. but from what I read my vote goes to you...
vote-MuAh
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Upping for votes people
come on people vote on this battle
Uppin
that battle was one sided.........................
V=muah
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - ILLunatic
uppin come on people
Uppin' this battle
Ok this wasnt a hard decision both need to add better punchs and personals to there battles. But Jae's punchs were better then fears.Fear hardly had any good punchs that caugh my eye anyway. But both did have a good flow. Jae had better wordplay then fear.
Vote-Jae
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom
Yo whats really good, cuz this the second votes ya disqualified but n-e-ways uppin............................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. .................................................. ....
Gud battle, they both had a gud flow goin on with sum nice rhymes in there but I felt that JAE had better wordplay......I also like his punches more cuz I felt that they just came harder and fears wasn't so gud.....personals, They both tried to post sum personals but I thought they didn't came thru, I found JAE structure a little bit betta to read so.... He also had a nice ending when fears was just lame....
Vote JAE, return the favur man, check my battle in my signature,thx.......
Uppin' this batte yo
ok lets break it down
fears - you verse was very weak, you didnt hit any decent personals or punches, flow wasnt the best, and your structure needs some working on man, you played alot of your lines aswell.lines were streched also. keep tryin tho man, elevate.
muah - also a weak verse, had more personals and hit a bit harder with the punches. your verse could do with some work aswell man. but your structure was a lil better than fears but your flow was in need of help.
v/ muah
drop an honest vote on my battle man
ight
i'll take you spot cuz i swore this would be a job steal
you cornier than my shit after a corn cob meal//1
bad opener man, weak attempt
so dont make me expose you son, i know all your secerets
my styles like your girls ass, everybody feels it//2
played, bad punch
so if you analyze Rewind you'de see the skills is great
your songs got more appearances by fags than will and grace//3
played again, very weak punch
and whats even more worse...you stupid like "DAMN!"
he thought Kool G Rap(wrap) was an alternative for sarran//4
again nothin good here,
now here son, take this, yes i do mean it
but dont excited, i mean the mic not my penis//5
lo, a lil funny but not really a strong punch
over all man you need more punches and personals, flow was a lil off aswell, elevate man.
I'll fast forward this bitch, pause, play, stop, record, Your Beat by this bar
Cuz i refuse to come hard against somebody who has a name.....
................................after a button on my VCR!
lol not bad opener.
Damn man...I'm not tryin to be mean and i kno that your new
But Your gonna wish that you forgot about this battle.......
................................and did the shit you have to do!
pretty weak personal, could of been worded better
3 posts and already a mod making fun......so i'll leave in a curse
Cuz those two playful lines that feeble just said......
................................still beat your whole verse!
not bad personal, could of been better
Your gettin beat easily......your in another zone
Cuz your empty profile verifies to me...........
................................that your truthfully unknown!
hmmm pretty weak.
You've pissed me off because you made me waste ten
So maybe ill rewind the tape..............
................................and then watch it over again!
could of changes the words and made it better.
aight not a bad verse man, could of been better, had some ok personals and punches. flow wasnt bad but lines were a bit streched...
v/ CAT
hit up my battle plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=121952
Uppin
yo sorry bout the verses with my vote, i copy and paste um to wordpad so i could read thro um to vote on another battle, but i thought i had just copied my battle link, not the whole of the last battle verse. sorry guys
damn yo its been like 2 to 3 weeks this shit still ain't done yet..............................come on now damn...uppin' this fucking battle
JaE_Muah is disqualified for upping battle 8 times
Your only allowed to up it 5 times a battle..
Fears wins.. Closed.