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10-14 Lines.
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due within 30 mins?.agree to that and ill drop but intill you do i am not checking in man..
^ I'll drop as soon as I can. It should be within the hour.. go ahead and drop. I won't feed.
I'm dropping as soon as you tell me you're ready.
Fuck it.. along with you and your signing offline newbie ass. :(
You're here for an Instant.. then you're gone.. with grief
Cuz Token'll rest ya case.. like putting ya folders to sleep
Kid thinks he's better.. I got him laid out n he's bitchin
Sure you elevated Kid.. now you're in sitting position
Fuckin herb.. doesn't understand what I'm tryin to say
You're not elite and never will be.. n that includes today
Judge couldn't punch.. so he kicked but his knees gave out
Then he went in for the kill.. but the moron never came out
Fuck new kids.. starting shit with vets.. ya hands aren't good
I'll turn your ass so pink.. you'll have to move to Camrons hood
soz toke man had football traingind lol.good verse and good luck,
little paranoid bitch..sressing with his pen to hold it steady
ill merk in an instant..so why you say,
your the only head i no..with a pritty record whos overatedQuote:
I'm dropping as soon as you tell me you're ready.
got his name in black.. but still searching for shit hes moderated
hes the creation but his elavation just keeps going back
theres a thin line between dope and wack..and toke just feel in the gap
we all no toke supports inter millan..cause hes always balck & blue
comes shit in the first battle and still fears a deja vu(sig)
i'd never feed of toke..wouldnt want my mouth getting dirty
31 votes against token..he wont loose cause he deleted thirty
toke is always dqing votes for no reasons.............1
haha! liking this battle alot!
Token
You're here for an Instant.. then you're gone.. with grief
Cuz Token'll rest ya case.. like putting ya folders to sleep
ILL opener man
Kid thinks he's better.. I got him laid out n he's bitchin
Sure you elevated Kid.. now you're in sitting position
Lmao! Nice diss
Fuckin herb.. doesn't understand what I'm tryin to say
You're not elite and never will be.. n that includes today
n that includes today... EH?
Judge couldn't punch.. so he kicked but his knees gave out
Then he went in for the kill.. but the moron never came out
Haha, shit had me laughing, nice punch
Fuck new kids.. starting shit with vets.. ya hands aren't good
I'll turn your ass so pink.. you'll have to move to Camrons hood
Not a great Closer, overall verse 8/10
Judge
little paranoid bitch..sressing with his pen to hold it steady
ill merk in an instant..so why you say,
I'm dropping as soon as you tell me you're ready.
Shit, 1 hell of a opener!! LMAO!!
your the only head i no..with a pritty record whos overated
got his name in black.. but still searching for shit hes moderated
Mad Played
hes the creation but his elavation just keeps going back
theres a thin line between dope and wack..and toke just feel in the gap
LMAO...Nice diss
we all no toke supports inter millan..cause hes always balck & blue
comes shit in the first battle and still fears a deja vu(sig)
Whack
i'd never feed of toke..wouldnt want my mouth getting dirty
31 votes against token..he wont loose cause he deleted thirty
Shit, that is 1 ILL closer, overall verse 7/10
Vote Token, because of punches
^^ ummmm no!
i think that the judge clkearly got this because of three reasons......
1. token rushed it i think and it effected his verse
2. Judge's punches were good and they made sense
3. The judge had more personals..and it made the verse better
the judge also had a good flow ans stucture....
token had an ok verse...i thought that it was rushed a bit.....
the flow was good and so was the structure...punches didnt hit that hard and the personals were ok also....more personals would have been nice....great battle but my vote goes to...
v.judge
I won't sway cuz people who knows what makes a verse should know better.
But.. I DQ votes when they are bad, Judge. I let a lot more go than any other mod.
uppin 1.
^^^those were the best lines in ya verse.........good wordplay and a tight punch......had me laughin......overall ur verse was pretty tight......had good structure and flow.......some nice metas.......tight wordplay.......most of ya punches connected.......personals were decent.......Quote:
Originally Posted by Token
^^^im gonna say those r ur two best lines.......the first one could have been worded better, but the second one was pretty tight......had a personal and a pretty good punch.......overall ur verse was pretty tight as well.......it had a good structure and flow.......some metas.......pretty good wordplay........the punches were pretty good.......personals were pretty tight......Quote:
Originally Posted by The Judge
conclusion - ima say token takes this.......he was more consistent with his verse.......the judge had a nice opener........ok second bar........tight third bar.......wack fourth bar.....and nice closer.......i thought token was good throughout his verse.......on top of that i thought token had better metas, wordplay, and punches so he gets my vote......
VOTE - TOKEN
^ Thank you..
uppin 2.
Judge couldn't punch.. so he kicked but his knees gave out
Then he went in for the kill.. but the moron never came out
LOL Ryan. Tight...
...And overall I'm going with Token.
Token was just coming more consistent in my eyes. His lines were witty every time, while Judge had a few nice punches, but nothing really to witty or worth quoting. Just a better overall performance by Token. No beef or anything :K:.
Better punches, harder hitting and more witty. Could tell it wasn't full effort though.
V/Token
Ite Coop.......thanks For The Votes Close Shit............1st
Thanks..
uppin 3
and 2nd............................................
..............3rd................................. .............thx........
You're here for an Instant.. then you're gone.. with grief
Cuz Token'll rest ya case.. like putting ya folders to sleep
1st line was an ok flip on a played line...second line was decent
Kid thinks he's better.. I got him laid out n he's bitchin
Sure you elevated Kid.. now you're in sitting position
Just ok
Fuckin herb.. doesn't understand what I'm tryin to say
You're not elite and never will be.. n that includes today
1st line was meh..second was weak
Judge couldn't punch.. so he kicked but his knees gave out
Then he went in for the kill.. but the moron never came out
lol nice punch
Fuck new kids.. starting shit with vets.. ya hands aren't good
I'll turn your ass so pink.. you'll have to move to Camrons hood
ok personal..play on names
little paranoid bitch..sressing with his pen to hold it steady
ill merk in an instant..so why you say,
Quote:
I'm dropping as soon as you tell me you're ready.
ok...nothing great
your the only head i no..with a pritty record whos overated
got his name in black.. but still searching for shit hes moderated
kinda weak...lotsa people have nice records who suck..but ok
hes the creation but his elavation just keeps going back
theres a thin line between dope and wack..and toke just feel in the gap
good/decent
we all no toke supports inter millan..cause hes always balck & blue
comes shit in the first battle and still fears a deja vu(sig)
meh...kinda played...but an ok flip
i'd never feed of toke..wouldnt want my mouth getting dirty
31 votes against token..he wont loose cause he deleted thirty
good personal...nice closer
Shit was close as fuck...both had 1 standout punch...Token came subpar....1 nice punche, but the rest were meh....average...Judge had 1 nice punch too..not as good as Tokens...but the rest of his verse was made up of decent punches...So Ima have to go with Judge for a verse with mor consistency.
Please peep an OM in my sig..thanks
LMFAO. I hate herbs.. really bad. No one is getting my lines!
uppin 4.
Wtf, the judge ` man u ever heard of punches? ` i mean u lacked them .. token came not that hard .. but he had actual punches.. punches wins battles .. period..V/Token.
Invalid, Unexplained vote. Disqualified. -ILLunatic
Was explained, vote added
4th.................................thanks for alll the POSOTIVE feedback..................................
Gud Battle
Flow/I felt that Judge had a better flow b/c he had sum nice rhymes in their with a lot of variation and a gud wordplay, I didn't felt such a gud flow with Token
punchlines: They both had sum great punches but I thought that the punches from Judge just came harder, Token also had sum gud punches but he hadn't such as Judge
personals: Token had gud personals while Judge just tried to have personals, Token you just need to work on your punches, Judge, you must work on your personals
structure/ They both had a gud structure goin on so..
Originality/ Judge was more original than token cuz he had sum nice lines in there and Token had too many lines which were played
Overall vote: The Judge (but close) (return the favour, look at my battles in my sign)
I guess this is what happens when you battle outside leagues and tournies.
last up.
there all votes man....................................5th
Token-
You're here for an Instant.. then you're gone.. with grief
Cuz Token'll rest ya case.. like putting ya folders to sleep
lol...good
Kid thinks he's better.. I got him laid out n he's bitchin
Sure you elevated Kid.. now you're in sitting position
haha nice
Fuckin herb.. doesn't understand what I'm tryin to say
You're not elite and never will be.. n that includes today
eh...decent
Judge couldn't punch.. so he kicked but his knees gave out
Then he went in for the kill.. but the moron never came out
haha...dope
Fuck new kids.. starting shit with vets.. ya hands aren't good
I'll turn your ass so pink.. you'll have to move to Camrons hood
a bit weak for a finisher..but ok
Judge-
little paranoid bitch..sressing with his pen to hold it steady
ill merk in an instant..so why you say,
I'm dropping as soon as you tell me you're ready.
ummmm...no...first line ok, second kinda wack
your the only head i no..with a pritty record whos overated
got his name in black.. but still searching for shit hes moderated
blah....decent
hes the creation but his elavation just keeps going back
theres a thin line between dope and wack..and toke just feel in the gap
this means that you're calling him better than wack...not good, takes away from the purpose of a battle verse
we all no toke supports inter millan..cause hes always balck & blue
comes shit in the first battle and still fears a deja vu(sig)
decent
i'd never feed of toke..wouldnt want my mouth getting dirty
31 votes against token..he wont loose cause he deleted thirty
setup good..punch sucked
Token won this battle with ease. Neither came that good...but toke's first few lines were enough. Judge, you gotta be more creative...take more time with it, all I can say.
V/token
At the start of this battle I thought token had some dope punches, "puyt your folders to sleep" line was nice..
but overall my vote goes to judge for a more consistent verse, with nice punches n disses,
fill in the gap line was very nice..
and his closer was dope als0..verse flowed well and structure was decent..
so my vote goes to The Judge..
no hard feelings peoples..
V/The Judge
You're here for an Instant.. then you're gone.. with grief
Cuz Token'll rest ya case.. like putting ya folders to sleep
pretty good id say could be better as an opener wise
Kid thinks he's better.. I got him laid out n he's bitchin
Sure you elevated Kid.. now you're in sitting position
Fuckin herb.. doesn't understand what I'm tryin to say
You're not elite and never will be.. n that includes today
Judge couldn't punch.. so he kicked but his knees gave out
Then he went in for the kill.. but the moron never came out
damn all this was solid as fuck espeacially the last bar
Fuck new kids.. starting shit with vets.. ya hands aren't good
I'll turn your ass so pink.. you'll have to move to Camrons hood
pretty good for a closer but also kinda blah if you think bout it for a while
little paranoid bitch..stressing with his pen to hold it steady
ill merk in an instant..so why you say,
lolz that was witty made me laugh pretty good openerQuote:
Originally Posted by Token
your the only head i no..with a pritty record whos overated
got his name in black.. but still searching for shit hes moderated
hes the creation but his elavation just keeps going back
theres a thin line between dope and wack..and toke just feel in the gap
we all no toke supports inter millan..cause hes always balck & blue
comes shit in the first battle and still fears a deja vu(sig)
lolz kinda good but token had a better middle part but still good
i'd never feed of toke..wouldnt want my mouth getting dirty
31 votes against token..he wont loose cause he deleted thirty
lol nice shit good closer id say this sealed it right here
i have too vote for TJ only because had a good opener and closer
as for token had a good opener but the closer was kinda blah
thats jus my opinion aight it was very close and hard to decide
vote/TJ for being a lil more consistant
only thing token took was the middle part
Token - far from ya best.. but still cool in parts.. felt u were kinda general an not as personal as expected.. but it flowed well an was pretty consistant.. until the end.. felt ya closer was wack.. really dragged ya verse down..
Judge - impressed.. u rose to the occasion.. came with enuff to win this.. personals were mostly witty an flipped nicely.. even the older concepts.. some decent metas made for a couple of quotables.. opened an closed well.. stayed consistant thru out.. flow wasnt perfect but not bad enuff to detract from the verse..
VoTe = The Judge