Thorn VS Thing (my verse is down)

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spit sumtime today
here's my shit
I made this thread cuz u kept freepostin in the other one, read it before you get outa controll in this one



i'll send off transparent rays so u spit rite through me
that name gives me the picture of a 50s horror movie
set out 2 be a flourist, i'll split ur face n' give u tu lips
ryhmes that'L intoxicate u more than canadian road trips
about to rip this dip like a broken ranch package of sauce
ill knock u cold...u'll wear more bandage than ppl in mosks
watch me take ur breath away like no No Smoking Signs
ya spits are sloppier than if Osama n' Bush were to Dine
closest u'll be 2 dilliquente is grounded n' on house arrest
it's takin this kid longer to post than smart moves in chess
u lack the endurance to keep up, ya went to gym n' failed
only way these ppl r feelin ur words is if u post in Braille

lolz ^ herb. . . . . .

lolz i had to edit my long ass bars LMFAO. . . . . .

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Originally Posted by Thorn

i'll send off transparent rays so u spit rite through me
that name gives me the picture of a 50s horror movie

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^as we can see from ya opener,that u is a herb & cant find personals
wha does transparent rays have 2 do wita diss its jus not submitable!
ya iresistable like a comon nut scratch,i mean thorn really suits u
i jus mute you,cuz we all no prickaly things really cant pierce threw!
i told ya 2 check in but ya rather have set in like a random fondaling
i mean this kids from windsor,my punches make you exstonashing!
only time this cat catches air is when my punchlines totaly K.O. . . .
like u a clone,but thorn wasnt born 2 swarm storms jus gets exposed
ya verse erodes,i mold tha thorn & ya morbidly morn,tha story unfolds
even ya closer is cold & no value even if scolding wordplay was stole

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Originally Posted by Thorn

u lack the endurance to keep up, ya went to gym n' failed
only way these ppl r feelin ur words is if u post in Braille

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Thorns closer^

Ok.

Thorn.

i'll send off transparent rays so u spit rite through me
that name gives me the picture of a 50s horror movie
No.
set out 2 be a flourist, i'll split ur face n' give u tu lips
ryhmes that'L intoxicate u more than canadian road trips
What?
about to rip this dip like a broken ranch package of sauce
ill knock u cold...u'll wear more bandage than ppl in mosks
Racist.
watch me take ur breath away like no No Smoking Signs
ya spits are sloppier than if Osama n' Bush were to Dine
No.
closest u'll be 2 dilliquente is grounded n' on house arrest
it's takin this kid longer to post than smart moves in chess
Please stop.
u lack the endurance to keep up, ya went to gym n' failed
only way these ppl r feelin ur words is if u post in Braille
Wack and played.

Very weak verse.
Need to work on punches.
Use personals also.

Thing.

^as we can see from ya opener,that u is a herb & cant find personals
wha does transparent rays have 2 do wita diss its jus not submitable!
Feeding.
ya iresistable like a comon nut scratch,i mean thorn really suits u
i jus mute you,cuz we all no prickaly things really cant pierce threw!
Multi. Attempted personal.
i told ya 2 check in but ya rather have set in like a random fondaling
i mean this kids from windsor,my punches make you exstonashing!
What?
only time this cat catches air is when my punchlines totaly K.O. . . .
like u a clone,but thorn wasnt born 2 swarm storms jus gets exposed
Inner (you didnt mean to do that though). Weak.
ya verse erodes,i mold tha thorn & ya morbidly morn,tha story unfolds
even ya closer is cold & no value even if scolding wordplay was stole
Feeding again.

Even though you were feeding of his verse.
You attempted punches and one personal.

Therefore.

v/ Thing.

Repay the favour, please.

Hit this up.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=120103

Thank you.

Pz.

i was feeding cuz he never put that n the rules. . . . .
but thanks for that vote lolz. . . .
uppin this ishness lmao. . . .

lol wow ur an idiot

uppin............................................. ..

lol wow ur an idiot?
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>up
stfu lmfao!

close one i think.

thorn- had an ok personal. you had a couple of good punches. but sum of them seemed a little played. your flow was nice. not too short, not too long. you had an overall good verse. the tu lip line showed you had sum ok wordplay. the osama line was kinda weak tho. closer was the best one, kinda played tho.

thing- you came original but you fed. i guess its ok if its not on the rules but feeding sux. lol. wutever. you had a few okay personals. ur structure was ok. this battle was really close. you both came decent. but honestly becuz everything was pretty squared in this. ima have to give this to...

vote- thing...came with multies, so he took this with slightly better flow.

props to both.

peace

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3rd uppin...................

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Thorn.. you had a few good punches, and a few good personals. But i wasn't feeling your verse that much.. it had its high points.. and its low points. But you had more low than high. You came close, you coulda had this though.. elevate man

Thing.. you didn't exactly come doop neither, you had a little harder hitting punches, you didn't really use personals.. but you had multies which made up for it, and gave you a little bit more.. Any who.. i felt you brought more to the table..

V/Thing

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5th....

I think thing took this

Thirn...you came with too much played shit m,an...try and be more creative with ya punches personals and metas....add some originality to ya verse to emphasize ya punches....Be witty and original.....cut back on the filler and try to make every line a punch/personal/meta

Thing...you came pretty good...besides feeding which is a site rule....but you had some good punches and showed signs of wittiness...personals were ok...and a few of ya metas were nice...good verse

Please hit this up honestly..thanks http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=120685

Thorn -You gotta work on your originatlity look like it was all palyed. work on you punches, your multies. Try to get some more interseting vocab. Structure only needs a lil work.

Thing - Nice verse, other than the feeding. You had good flow, some nice multies. Most of the punches landed solidly, some ok personals. All around nice verse.

Thing took this with ease. He plainly came harder with better punches and multies. Other than the feeding he got this one easily

vote - Thing

return the favour check one of the battles in ym sig and drop a vote.

Thing fed..

Thing is a herb.. .. .. .. .. .. ..

Thorn had a good verse but most was played. Flow was ok but was lost in some places a wud say the first 2 lines was ok but thats it. Structure was good. Multis were ok, metas good.

Thing was feeding. His verse was good...Good structure...Good metas...The personals were alrite but not great...Punches were good.

vote thing had better punches

Hit up me battles in me sig please !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

LOL FUCK FREESTYLIN

lol im not a fackin gangster

If this was last year U wouldnt even be in my league thing lmao

peace it

Thorn - You had a few punchlines and some personals but i wasn't really feelin your verse like that but i do give u props for having an decent ok verse wit a fucked up stucture

Thing - Same thing for u too what's up wit ur fucking stucture work on it!!! i hate bad stucture but any way u came thru the win dough

Vote = Thing

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Originally Posted by Thorn

i'll send off transparent rays so u spit rite through me
that name gives me the picture of a 50s horror movie

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^^^uhh i guess those were ur two best lines.......a wack ass punch and personal......overall ur verse wasnt that good at all.....had a good structure....flow was on target.....no metas.....attempted wordplay.....but wack......punches didnt connect at all.......wack attempts at personals......

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Originally Posted by ÷Thìñg÷

ya iresistable like a comon nut scratch,i mean thorn really suits u
i jus mute you,cuz we all no prickaly things really cant pierce threw!

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^^^those were ur two best lines......had a meta......attempted personal......ok punch.......overall ur verse was decent, not the best ive seen from u, but its aight......had a good structure......flow was on target......u had a few metas.....no wordplay.....some of ya punches were ok.......attempts at personals......

conclusion - thing came with a better overall verse.....both had a good structure and flow.....thing had metas......neither had good wordplay......neither had that good of punches.....thing had a personal.....so he gets my vote......

VOTE - THING

yo since i took the time to leave my opinion id appreciate if u two would hit up the link in my sig with an honest vote.......