Me & My Pen

Ink in the center, with a miniscule of leather
gold plated, with my name imprinted in the header
Old, but not out dated, its vintange is the texture
the tip rolled, but not sezther..of the best - it's better..
The neck' black as shadow's, other's cant mesure
..to this..
Red hand grip's, and silver around it's hip's &
..I make sure the figure never chip's, ink blot dip's..
swiming in the pool of oil, in the case it sit's..
We gaze', and it has tendency's to turn me bliss
bring's envy-instantly, when other's use it.
If they grasp it to tightly, they might bruise-it,
polish it down, and smooth is slightly...
Unasemble it, and mask it nicely &
..reinsert it tightly, to make it cool and icy..
Add another coat of polish, and remove it lightly
try to perfect it.. I want it to be crisp, like me..
Never will lose it, as I grasp and tug, and push it
..into my pocket..
Make sure were never not sepret, always together..
even when ink run's out, me and my pen..
Forever.

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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119591

upp ^

man, cmon gimmie a reply.. up

upp... drop soem links Ill peep ru shit if u reply..

upp

People like to sleep arounf here :-) . Anyway, this was a good read. I was really feeling the tone of the intire piece. The imagery was a plus, and your flow was above average. Concept was cool. Might have seen one om on the topic, but this was still pretty original. Overall it was an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work, homie.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=118747&page=1

Thank god for some fucking replies..
:)

yeah this had a good flow too it. It was creative and really neat. Didn't notice too many multies, but multies don't matter in a piece like this. Stay up.

that was pretty tight man. but spell your word correctly.

that was ill. you have a lot of talent. keep writing.

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yeah this had a good flow too it. It was creative and really neat. Didn't notice too many multies, but multies don't matter in a piece like this. Stay up.

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K then u obviously, didnt read it. Cause at a diff board, someone told me they got alil out of hand sometimes lol..
up

yo kid wazzup it aight?

^the fuck outta here..

^^fuck... half of your post count is from upping this thread....lmao.... anyways, i liked your scheme, it flowed good and carried your verse well.... topic was ok.... bit played, but i still liked it... main thing id say is upp your voacb, dont need to go overboard, but it adds to the read... well i think, if its used right.... hit any of mine.... no sleeping...lol

^wrong, I had like 476 post's and they got deleted.

clearly you have elevated from b4. a bit more creative i see.Yeah use more multies (I'mma Multies groupie) and some better vocab.And take the names out of your biggie and Tupac Avatar we all know who they are. "I dont' know why ft. Free and Deacon" feel free to venture there.