10-15 lines
15 mins tp spit afta check in
no d/r, crew, hate, or biting
good luck, may the best BOI win :)
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10-15 lines
15 mins tp spit afta check in
no d/r, crew, hate, or biting
good luck, may the best BOI win :)
checkin in................ my 15 minutes starts now
Well, shortay, you kow we tight....."What?" asks the crowd...haha ya right, time ta fight
check it
Man, im dialin numbers like bill gates counts his in green, im callin my crew
im callin my killas cuz im lazy, they commin to dispose of you bitch...run bitch, shoo!
After thats settled im spookin ya family, im the boogiman im commin silent and scary
my name is Benidict, Terry and im playin wit notin to loose, im single aint gettin maried
Bitch, bow down...this aint preschool shit, literally, quit discracin urself
quit shitin in ur diapers, wtf is that? cookies? jesus man quit fukin wit da kiebler elf
and put the cookie jar right back on the shelf that you stole it from you little thief
you been steelin since you wer young and you still aint learned nothin, why u think that
i made rules of the verses so brief?
Just one last word to this tarheel BITCH, go pick out wut ull be beatin with: a belt, myQuote:
Originally Posted by shortay140
hand, or maybe a switch...off the tree, and its no! u pleed
but im not ganna stop till u quit cryin and grow up and get a life other than "pimpin"..
....................until your wonder years...keep bleedin!
bitch...
good enough i guess...
okay okay but didnt u say 10-15 lines ??
dont u think thats alittle to much stop breakin ur own rules
that like 20 lines
but w/e ima drop in a couple of min just give me some time ima start to key iight peace
thats 12, the words that went off dont count as a whole new line. Good luck bra
can't compete with best verses where quotes-and riddles-linger//
you cudnt get the "upper hand" if you asked for votes-with-middle-fingers!* //
calling my self the best is the only way to stress-my-level//
you can bite my bars all day and still wont test-my-mettle//![metal]
dropping the skill-in-scrolls livin for no reason? i'll kill-these-souls//
boi's dreams are empty he'll never be able to fullfill-his-goals!//*
my techniques-are-malice wicked puchlines seek-and-damage //
i reak-with-talent sick flows designed to reap-the-challenge//
if Adam is Gods image of perfection then nature made you to keep-the-ballance//
fuck it i'll start to strangle these vets go for it bitches wanna tangle on text?//
i'll kill you so many times that i'll get hated on by the angel-of-death!//
what purpose you serve in this battle bitch? how are you employed in?//
fucked with your girl so many times she declared my dick a boyfriend!//
iight uppin for vote on this ...............................1
lol, jus noticed i put pleed instead of pleedin...o well, im stupid
lol ^^^^
Hmmm.... two MC's I know well....
Yaa-Boi: Your verse was not somethin' to impress. I mean, I've seen so much better shit from you, dawg. I hated your flow the most, and half the time the rhymes were late, so it didn't really seem like it rhymed until you scan it. Your metas were kinda corny, like that Terry Benedict one (Ocean's Eleven ain't a popular MC reference LOL).
Your personals were kinda decent, but I know for a fact that you can come so much stronger!!! Keep elevatin'.
sHoRtAy140: I liked your verse. It was one of the best I've seen from you. I mean, it still could use work, but it was quite good. U had decent flow (although sometimes choppy) and I liked your concepts. Work on making harder hitting punches and personals. Nice drop there, though. Keep elevatin'.
A tough decision between friends...*sniffles*....LOLOLOL
Vote: sHoRtAy140
*Vote on my battles and I'll return the favor next time I'm online.*
iight thankz for the vote really apreciate it
1-0 uppin me ....uppin for me pleasse
lol, im jus ganna say, i underestimated shortay big time. This a good battle, but i didnt think hed come this strong. Keep votes commin people. Thx for feedback god.
lol^^^yaa boi u underestamated me lol ......
bump.....
close battle.
yaa-boi- came nice. only problem was your structure and your bars were stretched. you had sum nice punches, but then some of them need sum work. really good flow but there were sum fillers in your verse that i didn't like. 7.5/10
shortay- tight verse. i really enjoyed the flow with the multies in there and the little bit of wordplay you used. the first two bars were ill punches. you came really hard in this one. you took the punches with ease. your structure was off but thats the only real negative. 8/10
vote- shortay...punches and flow
props to both. keep it real.
peace
iight thankz uppin for more votes on this shyt 2-0 me
shortay won this one by far with better
punches
flow
and structure.
yea boi the only thing i can say u had was personels,u need to work on ya structure,flow,andpunches and you would have alot better verse as a result.
shortay keep it up ur verses are lookin nice so far.
vote:shortay
iight can u post the poll vote please !!........
Quote:
Originally Posted by sHoRtAy140
Umm, lookin at the * and with no explanation at the end, gives me the impression that you got these verses from somewhere else...?Quote:
Originally Posted by sHoRtAy140
I could be wrong, just was my first impression..Sorry, I dont vote on peoples battles if I suspect they bit..unless you can explain?
naw that i put that cuz i didnt know i wanted to use that line so i put * so it could stand out and if i dont like it i can take it out before i put it in
and i forgot to take the thing out sorry
i aint a bitter okay sry for the miss convenis ill take it out the next time i make another verse
bump ............................. uppin
sHoRtAy140 nice one perrty ill expesliy liked the last line i thioght the same thing as .iLL. when i seen * but after your explation i under stand now so if i could vote would be for shorty140 will come back later
lets get some votes on this please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...26#post1255426
i already voted on ur battle okay so thats for the votes uppin for more please
Iight Uppin For More Vote On This Please ......
Damn I cant vote but if I could I'd say tha shortay cat cause although he wasnt as direct as yaa boi......his was structured enough to tha point where you would be like damn thats hot.....as far a personals go yaa boi got him but it was like he was launchin spitballs instead of bombs.........next come harder leave tha diapers at the door.........but I cant vote yet so maybe I'm wrong............
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119133
AHGT..
SHORTY HAD A MUCH BETTER FLOW
ya-boi. you need to shorten your lines..
the punhces would hit much more smoothley
I LIKE SHORTTIES FIRST LINE..THE PERSONAL
WAS OK..YOU COULD HAVE WORDED IT BETTER THOUGH..
THE RYEME SCHEME IN SORT'S VERSE WAS BETTER..
VOCAB AND PUNHCS TOO. IT MADE ME LAUHG MORE
CUZ YOUR PERSONAL'S WERE BETTER TOO...
POLL vote__________shorty..
iight thank for the votes uppin for more vote on this please.................x1
bump................................also vote please ...x2
Punches: Shortay, decent punches all around, none great from Yaa
Wordplay: Shortay, nearly a wordplay in every single line, so that was niceness
Multis: Shortay, probably 2 of every 3 syllable in every line, a lot of Yaa didn't rhyme
Personals: Neither, nobody had any
Opener: Shortay, opened with decent wordplay
Closer: Shortay, closed again nicely
Vote - Shortay
Killed this battle, probably one of the biggest killings I have seen on this site. Yaa-Boi, you need to throw punches, and actually rhyme your entire verse together. Shortay, all I can say, is come up with more complex wordplay's, because those were all small wordplay's.
you cudnt get the "upper hand" if you asked for votes-with-middle-fingers!* //
Favorite line by Shortay
iight thank for the vote one more vote on this please need to get this battle closed out ......uppin ......
ok ma vote:
UUUmmmm this light weight got u, u fuckin weak ass middle weight
it must have taken u along time ya booi to get to that rank, Right?
well shortay's verse sounded better, basically cause it had better flow, wordplay, vocab, and do i need to name them all.
U on the other hand had like every line stretched too damn far, i wont lie i stretch my lines sometime cause it seems like it sounds right, but u just stretch too much. u had aight vocab, and u sound like u been on this site for a while, and havent learned anything, but yeah shortays got this one in the bag, dawg.
vote- Shortay140