Love for a Brother

Love for a Brother

As I reflect upon my past my mind dwells amidst our memories
An over-looked relation beheld by enforced parental remedies
A narrative that began since birth to end in the hands of time
Enhanced between the pages to exist without a chance in line

Subsequent to my birth, a child was conceived amongst a family
Both parents eroding their own lives and on the verge of insanity
Uncannily channeled through ones mind, he grew up in isolation
Only to be changed in a couple of years through God’s admiration
So it was expected he’d be rejected among the peers of his generation
Able to hold his own but still felt an absence of actual innate elation
Then penetration was re-enacted between the mother and father of this
The result was the image of my own reflection and just a brother of his

Born two years before my own time, in a way he was my mentor
So I pursued the direction he led, it’s what most parents intend for
But there was a glitch in the system, my brother refused to let live
Disagreed to my desires and blatantly disapproved each incentive
Hence the paths became split; no further bond was being withheld
I embraced the wrath of a loved one who didn’t care about how I felt
Emotionally and physically incarcerated, I knew nothing but pain
Wondering whatever happened to the laughter we both once obtained

Nothings been corrected, we’ve yet to head back to where we started
A change of heart hasn’t be made, we’re left where our paths departed
A foundation of hatred, cemented by unfermented broken emotions
Reparation seems impossible; there’re no more words to be spoken
What was once a relationship held by our parents no longer exist
Left as a memory is the few good moments of when we were kids
A lifetime of regrets and thoughts about what should matter most
On top of that is family even though it sometimes seems that it don’t

They say sometimes people are too young to love when in actuality
Children are the only ones who hold a true sense of love’s fallacy

The threads that i replied to:

'Lady Tramp'
'New Kat'

cmon peepz. don't sleep on this plz.
uppin for feedback

Wow.....i cant believe peeps are sleepin on this....this is pretty dope man....

You flow and imagery were great man...like it...everything seemed to run so smoothly....you did a great job at telling the story and implimenting the pictures in my head...jobe well done

I think what kept this piece alive was its simplicity...well written for this piece...and good approach...Lemme know if you ever drop something and need some feed...ill be more than happy to help out! :thumbup:

Hit my latest piece up man...appreciate it!!
The Inner Meaning
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118968

^thanx man. much appreciation. can i get some more feedback plz?

thanx peepz.

peace

uppin this playa verse. hit this up peepz. thanx bunches. lol
peace

hahahaha. thanx for the feedback.
i don't see why people refuse to give me some. it can't be that bad.

peace

shit was mad hot nice structure good vocab nice scheme pure devotion from what i see stay up ~1~

^thanx man. i really appreciate it. especially tha fact that you took the
time to read it. keep it real.
peace

dis was some crack shit dawg i aint gone front...dont know why its getting slept on...
nice imagery i can jsut picture everything in my mind...
only thing bad about dis is dat dis is an overused topic..but u brought something differtn to it..
dats what made dis stand out...
when u get a chance drop feed in "Perspective of the Ant" id appreciate it have pretty much no feed cuz u knowhow it is on here

peace

thanx playah. much appreciation. i'll hit that up for sure.
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yo dog, i know your just lightweight but your alright. nah actually, that was sum dope shit. i like the flow along with the rhymes. deep meaning that kept me thinking. props dog. this deserves a nomination. hey, we shuld maybe start a crew cuz i like your style, or at least collab sumtime. wut you think?

^thanx dog. i see you're still rippin it. i'll think about that idea of yours. till then. keep it real.
peace

that shyt mad hot i liked the multies
that was really dope son
the flow was great ...the structure everything seemed to fit together like a puzzle and i really thought that shyt was mad ill son rate it a 10/10
mad props son good job

^thanx man. much appreciation for taking the time to
read this.......................
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peace

this was pretty dope.. flow was pretty good, nice use of multie's and the emotion was dope aswell.... vocab usage was also nice and the wording was dope.... not much else i can say that hasnt allready been said... good shit man

thanx man. i appreciate it. can i get more on this plz.
thanx.

This was a very nice write. I havent read your pieces befor I dont think. This is going to make me read your future ones. The rhyme scheme was made just right, the vocab was as well. You told a great story with great emotion. I liked this piece alot, maybe add some more excitement and it would have been even better. Nice write hommie, keep it up...

( please return the favor and peep " Lonely Path " ... Its in Open Mic right now... )

^thanx man. i appreciate it. i'll hit that up for sure.

peace

Wow man, wasn't expecting this. This was on another level. Just from the text I could feel the pain and emotions...nice flow, excellent vocab(almost as good as mine, hehe), some good multies later on and the best part of this was the last bar...10/10

very ill flow... you kept it real tight and on point... though it did seem a bit... ermmm... matter of fact? I think that's how i would describe it....

oh well... check out my collab with SMZ on the media...

^thanx peepz. i appreciate it..............
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peace

Ey man, you really got this story telling shit down pat, and ya flows really blew me away.. They were fluid, and really showed your dexterity, and how deep u felt about the things you were trying to illustrate. You killd it man.
great job dawg

^thanx man. i really appreciate it.
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That was a tight as hell open mic man
I really liked everything about it.. and you really did tell a story with it
Created pictures in my mind..
I love the vocabulary used and rhyme scheme in it

Very nice...

If u get a chance check out "On this day" in OM

~"They say sometimes people are too young to love when in actuality
Children are the only ones who hold a true sense of love’s fallacy"~

damn i like that. its so true. ur gifted. much love~

^thanx a lot. i appreciate it. means a lot.

peace

Surprising..

Lose your cartoon sig though..

Nice piece..

Not gona go into detail..

Just say that im pleasantly surprised..

Well done.. :)..

Hit something in my sig..

Thanks..

Pz..