rules:
10 lines max
no cheating or feeding
30 min blind spit
good luck, may the best verse win.
peace
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rules:
10 lines max
no cheating or feeding
30 min blind spit
good luck, may the best verse win.
peace
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oh my bad. lol. i didn't think i had to seeing as how im the
one who set this up. thats how it usually is. but wutever.
good luck again.
peace
Why should I bother to put you in your place
when you can’t picture doing more than scratching my face.
This star must have flew by, left you behind
Must be the same way that your ninja caught the red eye
Ill picked you to show you how hard it gets
One of a kind? I have you in my mind when I think of spandex
This is mine whether I joke or play it straight
Do you bite? If so then ill stop before you remake these crazy eights.
Check it...
I'll slaughter this kid to the "core" just to show you how is "temper-is"
You wouldn't even "out" smart me if you wrote after I "centered" this
Indecions within divisions is what separates you’re lack of skill
Kinda like attemtin to touch me but fallin back like Jack and Jill
Ignite the light from inside of you and you’ll surely run out of ‘wax’
If you can’t even see potential, how will you excape from bein’ wack?
Like the millions of others who die trying you won’t even be unique
I don’t blame your words for being foul when after all ‘you’ ‘reak’
Not much is known about this kid, but then again not much is needed
All it takes is a single spit of his to prove he's always been defeated
peACE
kinda a weak battle, ace i've seen much better from you, but lets break it down.
temp your scheme, metas, and rhymes were elementary although the content was junior high school. Your punches were real weak and there were no personals. But you'll get better, my first two battles were real weak too and you get better as everyone goes along. my fav line was the spandex line. 2/10
Ace, ace, ace it was aight but after reading a couple of your battles already i kinda expected a bit more, no presure lol. the structure and rhymes were decent and your punches were avg but a couple hit kinda hard. Had 1 personal that was ok. I'm sure your next battle will be better. Fav line was the you reak line that was good, 4/10
V-Ace
re-pay the favor and vote on my shit! i vote on battles all the time and never get any love back. I'm at the max of 3 battles and wanna start a new one but i cant cuz no body votes on my shit. Be honest and vote i just wanna get these battles over with. i will never vote on either of ya'lls battle again if ya dont show some love back - peace
aite. thanx for the vote. i'll be sure to hit that up.
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uppin this battle. don't sleep on this. plz vote.
leave a link. and i'll vote fairly on it. thanx
peace
yo homie's...........a nice battle...lets see...temporis, u really need to put sum punchlines in there or else its jus a strait flow...nice flow tho...the vocab was aiight but u definetly needed sum punch...aces, very nice flow...good punches n good vocab..overall i think ace won this in my opinion cuz he came with better punches
vote-Aces
n if u got time hit up Beano v Southsideloco...try n vote be much appreciated
Peace
aite man. thanx for your vote. but could you explain it more. becuz
i can guarantee a mod will DQ that^. thanx man. i'll hit those battles up soon.
peace. more votes please.
aite. uppin this. vote on this and i'll return it with a fair vote on yours.
thanx.
pz
Simple case of someone whos been around awhile, and someone new...
temp.. I don't really wanna sound mean. Don't take it personal.. constructive criticism... but there's alot wrong with ur verse. In a battle of 10Line Max, u should probably use up all 10 lines and not 8 of them. It wouldnt have mattered though. You just need to come up with some better ideas, connect them all together to create nice punches, personals.. etc. Be creative about it and original, that's what I look for. Ur verse didn't do any of that here.
Ace.. not ur best.. but not bad at the very least. The flow was very nice.. structure great.. it was enjoyable and original. Your punches hit pretty well... 2 of ur bars probably would have been good enough to win this battle. Just my opinion...
vote- ace
^thanx for the vote. uppin this for more.
hit this and i'll return a vote to a battle of yours.
thanx.
peace
thanx for voting guys. lol. nah seriously, vote plz. leave a link and i'll vote on a battle of yours.
thanx.
peace
dammit kids. start voting. lol. am i the only one who votes on this damn site.
most of the time i vote on someones battle, and tell them to come here they don't.
so vote on this and I WILL vote on a battle of yours. thanx
peace
Yup Ace wons this for a verse with harder punches
Temporis...you only came with 8 lines and there is a 10 line minimum....Also don't space your bars...and try and be more creative and original with your verse...stay away from simplistic lines...come with more personals and harder punches...not a terrible verse...keep elevating
Ace....Ok verse...kindfa weak but enough to win this battle...get rid of the spaces...you came with some pretty good personals....but you could dtill be a bit more creative wit ya metas...overall a decent verse
PLease drop an opinion here guys... thanks http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118886
MY VERDICT
Temp: boring verse man no personels or multies or punches basically all u had was ya flow. u need to make some punches and personels next time.2/10 very weak but still try to improve dont take my critism to harshly as ur new to rb so u need to improve.
Ace: ok drop u had a few good personals and attacks here and there and overall a good drop nice flow and it wasnt boring. quite enjoyable to read and all u neede was a bit more complexities and this would of been a complete merkin but u did good 8/10.
Punches: ace
structure:temp
flow:temp
attacks: ace
personals:ace
vocab:ace
overall:ace
MY VOTE : Ace of Aces