And` Fight. Ft. Fgee&Pot1ent

Replyed to Dev & Baron
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And` Fight.

Round One : Pot1ent

The rain poured and yet this young fighter toned his muscle
And game score progressed the same as he honed to tustle
Blues brain tore with the crimson red's band now rubbing on
Seconds into and even now blue shrivelled like suds to long
Bekon to cue so crowds stand tumbling like drying machines
Trek on a feud with punches as ring men are trying to clean
These blood stains lay there from the blues blood pattering
Both rub's brains then blues forced and now tugs tatterings
Gross grudge claims as red’s lightening hands make contact
With big strikes like postal workers, he don’t take one back

Referee's point of view:Fgee

Watching closely every dancing move on the canvas
as their colours merge in a blur
and the gloves paint a fight of angers
each trying to hamper the other, in a flurry of fisticuffs
block jab hook and cover as knuckles slit the cuts
and miss the guts in an everlasting storm of muscle
i yell break up as they lock in a tussle
earning my stripes as
grown men fight for an over sized belt buckle
i stand back, letting them command the square ring
and as they land smacks
im spattered by masses of sweat as the pair swing
but tiredness sets in lightning feet are reduced to shuffles
and air starved limbs know their in trouble
each running on empty
arms thrust on the last reserves of pride
the blue corner shy
as their mans face resembles their side

Round Two : Edicius

Drained out of energy leaving me completely exhausted
yet my eyes filled w/ a roughened coating ` purely frosted
and my physical & mentally state turned ` fatigued
but the shouting of the crowd, and the winner inside me..
kept me focused & intrigued
Knowing this win was on my side..
my vitals start degreeing..
as he fell into my arms i told him in confide
' U are a very good & strong opponent'
yet you are going down & lose this fight!
Than he hit me & i started to spin..
my concetration was off for one second..
but i came back putting him in a state of `chagrin
I was tired.. & victory was allready in .. but
Knowing this round will come to an end ..
inside my mind growed this hemorrhagic fever
for a while ' yes' i was a reciever..
and gastrointestinal symptoms of capillary hemorrhage
accured turned me into a non-believer
but i cant give in to them & need to continue
I am not a little griever
so i was determined to leave him were here stands!
cause..` what good is a failing achiever?

Bravo~~~Bravo~~~Pot1tent...I have not read many pieces from you..but..I was certainly impressed by this...you did a great job wholding your own with this two great writers...Fgee..with your uniquie format of story telling...you always keep me interested...and Finally Eddy...My other M!sf!tted brother....What can I say...you are amazing man....yet..you are misunderstood most of the time..Maybe that's why we are M!sf!ts!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This a Dope Collab!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OM of the Month mos-def!!!!!

LMFAO...
This was great
Fuckin hilarious.
Gotta give props to Pot1ent, Fgee, & Eddy
Funny ass piece to read,
All 3 verses were hilarious.
But Pot1ents had better structure & flow.

:rolleyes: I think Ill misunderstood a little o.O ne way .. Upper.

Lol.. i told i'm a little high right now
I'll read it a few more times, maybe i'll get it.
:thumbup:

LMFAO! i understand it now
Eddy had to slap me a few times!

Quote:

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Originally Posted by edicius

Round One : Pot1ent

The rain poured and yet this young fighter toned his muscle
And game score progressed the same as he honed to tustle
Blues brain tore with the crimson red's band now rubbing on
Seconds into and even now blue shrivelled like suds to long
Bekon to cue so crowds stand tumbling like drying machines
Trek on a feud with punches as ring men are trying to clean
These blood stains lay there from the blues blood pattering
Both rub's brains then blues forced and now tugs tatterings
Gross grudge claims as red’s lightening hands make contact
With big strikes like postal workers, he don’t take one back

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Nice vocab, good flow. Very interesting to read.
Some pretty decent imagery. Better than expected from you.
Like how you had this piece though, went nice with the concept

Quote:

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Originally Posted by Edicius

Referee's point of view:Fgee

Watching closely every dancing move on the canvas
as their colours merge in a blur
and the gloves paint a fight of angers
each trying to hamper the other, in a flurry of fisticuffs
block jab hook and cover as knuckles slit the cuts
and miss the guts in an everlasting storm of muscle
i yell break up as they lock in a tussle
earning my stripes as
grown men fight for an over sized belt buckle
i stand back, letting them command the square ring
and as they land smacks
im spattered by masses of sweat as the pair swing
but tiredness sets in lightning feet are reduced to shuffles
and air starved limbs know their in trouble
each running on empty
arms thrust on the last reserves of pride
the blue corner shy
as their mans face resembles their side

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Lol.. pretty nice, good imagery also.
Vocab was great, wordplay was pretty nice
Fgee & his unique style of writing,
It went in well with this.

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Originally Posted by Edicius

Round Two : Edicius

Drained out of energy leaving me completely exhausted
yet my eyes filled w/ a roughened coating ` purely frosted
and my physical & mentally state turned ` fatigued
but the shouting of the crowd, and the winner inside me..
kept me focused & intrigued
Knowing this win was on my side..
my vitals start degreeing..
as he fell into my arms i told him in confide
' U are a very good & strong opponent'
yet you are going down & lose this fight!
Than he hit me & i started to spin..
my concetration was off for one second..
but i came back putting him in a state of `chagrin
I was tired.. & victory was allready in .. but
Knowing this round will come to an end ..
inside my mind growed this hemorrhagic fever
for a while ' yes' i was a reciever..
and gastrointestinal symptoms of capillary hemorrhage
accured turned me into a non-believer
but i cant give in to them & need to continue
I am not a little griever
so i was determined to leave him were here stands!
cause..` what good is a failing achiever?

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Nice, pretty good fighter Eddy
Nice flow, Somewhat good wordplay
very Unique piece. Nice imagery
Feels like i was Fighting..


Very good piece by all 3 of you
You all made this topic seem like reality!
(yes, i box a little so i can relate a little more)
But interesting piece, when is the rematch goin down?

Nice fucking piece. Po, always coming nice, great vocabulary, great structure and some very impressive one liners. Fgee, you also used good one liners, nice imagery and your verse was very good. Ed, always dropping dope ass verses, good imagery and good vocabulary. Nice fucking collab fellas.

good collab.....everyone had decent flow for the msot part but edicius was kinda choppy at some parts.....didnt matter cuz he had nice vocab..... wordply was there...jus everything nice

7.5/10

Simple rhyming fucks :rolleyes:

Up

iight..

Good piece fella'z..

All had a nice flow..
Vocabulary was nice and relevant from all..
Baron had the best structure..

This was a nice topic..
<-- Used to do boxing a while back..
Could relate.. Lol..

Good..

Y'all hit my OM in my sig..

Thanks..

Pz..

It was not baron!.. Geez.. Up

Bump it up~~~

damn... this was pretty slick right yonder... n' shiiiiiiiiiiiiit... pimp...





means I liked...




Good job...

Got 1` love for those verb replys :)..

Hi Eddy :)

On a second thought...This shit is Mega~Ultra~WACK! :p

^Played .. V/ Elevate.

UP.

^Good point.. o.O O.o :whacky:

Any way .. uppin this for some serious replys

--[Flow]---
Flow in this piece was ferocious...you each pulled it off uniquely, although this would be difficult to do in audio, in text it is dope...I felt Pot1ent took this th0...he came with more internals and more sorta rhytmical sounds...but each verse displayed the ability in it's own way...mad dope.

"These blood stains lay there from the blues blood pattering
Both rub's brains then blues forced and now tugs tatterings"

--[Vocab]--
Vocab here was another shining aspect of this piece..Fgee came out fighting with this, think you displyed a real talent here, each word was thought out and there were know "line fillers"....showed that you spent time on this piece...each MC came nhice on this th0...Pot1ent had the complexity feel, Fgee & Eddy had the imagry feel..

" i stand back, letting them command the square ring
and as they land smacks
im spattered by masses of sweat as the pair swing
but tiredness sets in lightning feet are reduced to shuffles"

--[Concept]--
This is what really shined here...you each played a totally original topic well...each of you came with some outstanding imagry, and i really felt in first hand contact with what you were saying, you kept me interested throught the piece, never fell off or strayed from the topic...Eddy & Pot1ent took this for me, although Fgee ,as usual, came off well above average on this...

"Drained out of energy leaving me completely exhausted
yet my eyes filled w/ a roughened coating ` purely frosted"

"The rain poured and yet this young fighter toned his muscle
And game score progressed the same as he honed to tustle"



--[Overall]--
One of the best pieces i've read this month...deserves to be in the OM of the month section at least..was full of imagry and originality...can;t really say who came strongest. because y'all hit harder in diffeent aspects...glad to see Fgee back and writing again....most deserved 4.7/5"

^Thats word, thnx mate for the reply .. Upppin

hmmmmmmmmmm
fgee's verse seemed to outshine in this collab...better use of words overall. He outlined exactly what was happening.
I apologise if the boxing match was sybolising anything, other than the fact that there was something about a gastrointestinal hemorrhage at the end.
Eddy had this weird flow that I had difficulty catching...pot1ent's verse was nice and simple but it made perfect sense.
anyone care to explain the real meaning of the piece?

We were bored, ..lets do a collab .. a boxing fight.. potent round one, fgee referee , me round two...nothing more .. just a fight decribed only with nice words lol..simple rhyming fuck :rolleyes: .. weird, open yooooo self! :P :P .. thanks man, .. did u get all my words tho? cause if not u shud look them up & sign back in here ;) .. LOVE YOU!!!! Upppppppppppper

Oh and fgee needed to be the describer .. he the referee =), he did very well, me and potent did the fighters condition. i thought i described almost perfectly.. :rolleyes: plz give me some more indepth feedback maven..