10 I Set Due Asap
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10 I Set Due Asap
dont diss me cuz you want to diss me cuz you have to, you made a mistake I'm not the one to rap to; I'll pull out my glock and blast you whip out my cock and smash you I'm sorry dog I had to;;
you're uglier than a baboon, I outta beat you like your dad do but make sure you feel it; I push a beating like a deck of cards, I deal it, do your head like an orange, I peel it, this games over so I'll do like a qb, I kneel it;;
Either me or you someones gotta drop, tick tock, read the hands on the clock and tell your bitch to grab my cock and look at my stock compare it to yours its plumeted; I've won this battle and you cant stomach it, politicians we be just like enemies, I'm a Democrat your a republican;;
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Dudes Whack, Names Glock 5, Call Me John Madden Cuz I State The Obvious
I've Set Up The Battle And Layed One Bar Out..And This Dude Doesnt Exist
I'm Underestimating You Cuz Ive Seen Ya Battle..Shit Was Literally A Piece Of Shit
I Got Him Him Choking Cuz He Didnt Spit His Shit, He Swallows The Shit He Spits
I Put Your Name Above Mine Cuz I Felt Bad For Him, Now He Feels Elevated
But Whats This Kid Doin On RB Original, Didnt He Know Rb Relaunched Was Created?
6 Lines Already, This Is My Seventh, Done In 5 Minutes, Juss To Match Your Name
Dude Aint Gonna Gain Fame, Whack Name, Whack Verse I Guess He Likes Shame
Already im Sorry, I Shouldnt Have Came This Weak, Sorry If I've Let You Down
Blah, I'll Juss Make The Last Line Rhyme...Turn That :) Until Its A Frown!!!!!!!!
LMFAO, Vote Up
can we gets some votes? what is everybodies problem
yo this round goes to jug uh knot,what happen glock 5
your better than that kid
Better Then Me? ^...Please, That Was Like My Worst Shit Ever, Took 5 Mins...
Uppin.
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lol idk 1st time iive seen both ya battles but glock 5s verse sucked compared to yours his flow and structure were bad and big time he had only like one good punch which was the card dealin shit you had WAYY better personals flow structure and punches you used his name 2 go against him which was pretty smart ya closer was funny sry 2 let us down lol i see you got pride keep it up dawg but return the favor plz ( against Diverged ) pz
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sry 2 free post but dawg it said one key??????????wtf i picked that 4 the poll MODs if thats not Jug then remove the vote thanx pz
man one key hands down had hella punches harder
man both bars were long on both types but.......
i mean personals go to 1key cuz they were porportioned mainly on her.....
other kid had like long ass bars too but needs to elavate termendisly
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....................
ya kno and for multis had to go to none....
lack of structure on both sides but ya kno..........
vote/1 key for overall consistancy and creativity................
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hit this up nigger http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117218
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Uppin, Vote cORREcTlY YOU fAgOtSS..............................
lmao. Dis battle was just...*checks websters to find a word for really whack*
Anyways...
"I've Set Up The Battle And Layed One Bar Out..And This Dude Doesnt Exist
I'm Underestimating You Cuz Ive Seen Ya Battle..Shit Was Literally A Piece Of Shit"
^probably the best line in the battle...and that was shit itself lol.
Jug takes this battle on punches and personals. He had real ones...they didn't hit hard...but atleast they were close to a target...Glock 5...you must of been tryin to throw punches at sum other dude or sumthin. Jug's verse actually showed he was tryin sumthin...Glock 5 was different.
/v - Jug
hm.... y'd u even accept this battle? lol ... no need for much an explanation but i wouldnt want the vote to get robbed by axe or ILL soo ....
Jug ... ehh ... weka from you ... but i expected that after reading his verse...
punches were ehh... concepts sorta played ... but none the less .. good metas and dissing ....struc a little stretched but eh...it flowed ok.... wordplay was average...
overall not a bad verse .... decent job 11/20 ...
glock ...fix ya structure ... even ya lines out ...the object of the battle is to diss ur oponent creatively .... and make voters go 'Ohhhhh!' .....try to make kids laugh in ya punches.... read some battles from LLL ... and you'll get the jist of incorporating personals and metas and wordplay into your verse..... just a few things u should werk on .... cuz obviously ur new and u got ur ass handed to you .... but u just needa get your style cleaned up ... and ur technicals ... cuz ya flow was ok ... and u had some lines that woulda been good with re wording .... but better luck next time
overall - 7/20 ...
vote - Jug
Haha. See, that's why we take votes away so they will be explained. Thank you.Quote:
Originally Posted by Ambitious
-Axe
Anyways...
Glock 5...punches were aimed at sum other dude or sumthin. One key's verse actually showed he was tryin to win...Glock 5 was a joke.........Jug takes this battle on punches and personals.He had capable ones...they didn't hit hard...but atleast they were close to a target...
/v - Jug
PFFTTT.. one sided battle one key takes this battle easily
glock you had an ok verse just need to elevate more in order to become better
good work by both
vote-one-key
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dont diss me cuz you want to diss me cuz you have to, you made a mistake I'm not the one to rap to; I'll pull out my glock and blast you whip out my cock and smash you I'm sorry dog I had to;;
LMMFAO!!!!
you're uglier than a baboon, I outta beat you like your dad do but make sure you feel it; I push a beating like a deck of cards, I deal it, do your head like an orange, I peel it, this games over so I'll do like a qb, I kneel it;;
LMFAO!!!
Either me or you someones gotta drop, tick tock, read the hands on the clock and tell your bitch to grab my cock and look at my stock compare it to yours its plumeted; I've won this battle and you cant stomach it, politicians we be just like enemies, I'm a Democrat your a republican
Lmao!
*whipes tear from eye*
This was the wackest, yet funniest verse that i have ever read.
*stands up and claps*
"Dudes Whack, Names Glock 5, Call Me John Madden Cuz I State The Obvious"
Lmao, this line was ill
Ok...I'm tird of breaking this down. Jughead got this. His shit was better puchwise. Even though he had a couple played lines. So for at leats haveing a couple decent lines, jug gets my vote.
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Originally Posted by Jug Uh Knot
One key.. your structure was poor throughout.. hardly a good flow.. punches were un-original and un-creative.. they were hardly punchlines to be honest.. your vocab sucks.. a shitty verse my man.. read some good battles and try to incorporate some aspects into your future verses..
Jug.. better structure.. slightly stretched but flowed well enough. Actual punchlines in your verse.. as well as personals..
Multies in there also.. it had most of what is needed.
Obviously it wasn't a killer verse.. but for a quick key it caned this kid for sure.. much better in comparison.. took most catergorys..
V/Jug Uh Knot
Fuck!!!!!
I polled the wrong name...
Post a link in the Reports thread man..
My bad..
Glock 5 - Verse looked like a blob of words.. I had a feeling it would be boring, there were no fillers. Not a thing was interesting.. no punches, personals, multies
Jug - Punches were soft, but hit. Few personals... non that hit hard. Overall you got this.. punches actually connected... unlike Glocks..
V/ Jug
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...72#post1265972
Arite... I think the battle coulda been a lot better.. it just seemed like there wasnt much effort put into it.. But heres how I see it....
Jug Uh Knot=J
Glock 5=G
Structure~J ..Yo G.. u had no structure watsoever.. it was just sorta thrown out there.. difficult to tell where ur punches ended an erything... J.. nice structure.. a lot more clear than G.. this just came down to whos was easier to read.. G.. needs clarity
Intro~J ..Yeah you did state the obvious.. but I think both were really simple intros.. an if I had to pick one I'd pick J because his was a little more complex.. at least you threw a punch out in ur intro.. sorta weak on both parts...
Punches~J ...Hmm.. u had a few good punches.. but some were just blah ya know.. G, dont really remember seeing any punches.. so I gave this catagory to J
Multis~j.. U had a few but They werent until the end.. but thats more than G had.. which was none as I remember.. I really feel like u 2 coulda came harder...
Vocab~J ..This was a very one sided category.. G I dont kno what grade you're in but my 7 yer old sister's vocab is better compared to what you showed here.. All your word were very simple.. bring a dictionary next time.. J.. you had some alrite words.. at least you brought more than 1 word that was over 5 letters./. lol
Close~G ..The only thing I liked about your whole verse was the close an I didnt really like that either, but it was better than wat J threw out.. Im sure J coulda came harder.. or maybe not but it seemd to me like he just threw that out at the end like who cares ya kno.. So G ill give you this one..
Based on all of that^^^^^^^ my vote goes to Jug Uh Knot
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