this it
20 bar
old school
no hate
no recycling
no biting
just keep it stright
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this it
20 bar
old school
no hate
no recycling
no biting
just keep it stright
hit this up before you spit
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117406
And 20 bars is 40 lines
ppl will not wana read that much kid
Lets make it 12 lines max since were spittin tonite
Peace It
12 lines
keep it inform,what ever you are you wont it make far
your gonna get wimped like a leashed retart in a dog park
i dont understand you name even your game is a confusin
][\/][.o.lb the fuck is that,what are you stupid
what ever you doing,your runnin my patince
i can tell your fan of the matrix,so face it
your in the real world and your a real girl
ready to get hurled to the surface
trust me,everybody know that your mind aint perfect
so listen to me just go to church kid
since your life is uncertain and curvin while the earth is turnin
til your whole soul start burnin and learnin that your a weak person.
Ok, hit up my other battle fairly dont forget!
Heres my verse
Y'd u except? u've lost ur mind like Inhalin too much Lead
You suck like Teeth being used and giving some bad Head
I give you absolutely no props like Mimes actin on Stage
I'll ruin u like novel books when turning to the Last Page
This bitch squats to pee, Now Im about to Kill Her
Do u get many Cavities? Cuz all ur lines are Fillers
So Lay off the sweets dude, your facin Tooth Decay
Stealin my inhalers the only way u could take my Breath Away
I aint a slut this wont go easy like ur first battle Did
Doc is in a crew? Terri fox wouldnt run with this Kid
Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
U just lost, thats what happens when do things ur bad In
I DAM this bitch this hell, like Beavers comittin Bad Sins
lol
that shit is tight kid
lol
you lost me in beginning but it was tight
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lol...blah...
Mob came better here...both are aight for new dudes i guess....
but still weak ....MoB punches were
just a bit better....thats waht decided this match..peace..
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lol weak punches?
lol ok
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savir ur an idiot who thinks cuz u got a bunch of posts that new people arent good...this was a good battle
fav line from doc.t
made me laugh, again, coulda been worded better.Quote:
Originally Posted by doc.t thesandgod
overall, u got good potential, but up ur wordplay. You got funny punches and rhyme skills r good but up your structure/wordplay. Keep lines even, keep the flow steddy
fav line from mob:
made me laugh, good meta, worded goodQuote:
[\/][.O.lB]Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
overall, good structure, kept the flow goin. nice wordplay and ok punches. didnt c any personals.
breakdown:
flow: mob
structure: mob
personals: doc.t
punches: doc.t
metas: mob
rhymescheme: doc.t
wordplay: mob
overall, mob took this a bit more with better structure, wordplay, and metas. Advice for you doc.t, no hate but just up your flow man. Keep it flowin together. Keep lines even. The words in between the punches are important too.
v/mob
no hate, honest opnion, good battle guys
return fav. if u can
ayo, doc.t no hate that i voted against you 2 times, i dont got nothin against you, you know? dont wanna start any beef or anything, jus so you know
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lol oh man sum1 vote .................................................. ...............sleep walkerss..................i hate startin up at RB again frum scratch!
^since when are you back here?.......................
Doc-
keep it inform,what ever you are you wont it make far
your gonna get wimped like a leashed retart in a dog park
heh.....decent line...no hard punch but got me to chuckle
i dont understand you name even your game is a confusin
][\/][.o.lb the fuck is that,what are you stupid
this was pretty bad...you need a punch...and better wording
what ever you doing,your runnin my patince
i can tell your fan of the matrix,so face it
eeehhhh.......didn't really like this...stretch it a bit....not too much..just to make it flow right
your in the real world and your a real girl
ready to get hurled to the surface
trust me,everybody know that your mind aint perfect
so listen to me just go to church kid
since your life is uncertain and curvin while the earth is turnin
til your whole soul start burnin and learnin that your a weak person
I quoted this whole piece by itself cuz I couldn't get your flow........punches were weak
][\/][.O.lB-
Y'd u except? u've lost ur mind like Inhalin too much Lead
You suck like Teeth being used and giving some bad Head
decent
I give you absolutely no props like Mimes actin on Stage
I'll ruin u like novel books when turning to the Last Page
played....
This bitch squats to pee, Now Im about to Kill Her
Do u get many Cavities? Cuz all ur lines are Fillers
lol....as played as this might seem I haven't seen this before I don't think...good call on this one....
So Lay off the sweets dude, your facin Tooth Decay
Stealin my inhalers the only way u could take my Breath Away
very played
I aint a slut this wont go easy like ur first battle Did
Doc is in a crew? Terri fox wouldnt run with this Kid
weak...
Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
omg....cmon man this is older than like rap itself
U just lost, thats what happens when do things ur bad In
I DAM this bitch this hell, like Beavers comittin Bad Sins
played
Overall-I gotta decide between the weak verse and the played verse, something I do not really like doing. I felt both could come much better. You guys need to add more multis and make your punches hit harder. Also, do not waste your setups. They are there for a purpose. Anyways, back to voting. I can't really decide cuz both verses were weak...but each verse had one decent line. So I base my vote on who had the better of the two decent lines. So even though I did not enjoy this battle I gotta give my vote to........
Vote:MOB
I know im fuckin weak right now
But rappad u know as well as I do that i'll start back up again, just a matter of days dude............
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^^your stupid...
please dont post that both verses were weak. That just brings beef up and makes you look stupid. Give positive feedback instead of insults or dont vote idiot.
keep it inform,what ever you are you wont it make far
your gonna get wimped like a leashed retart in a dog park
i think you have a few spellin mistakes?? i dont understand it
i dont understand you name even your game is a confusin
][\/][.o.lb the fuck is that,what are you stupid
blah, weak filler
what ever you doing,your runnin my patince
i can tell your fan of the matrix,so face it
da fukk
your in the real world and your a real girl
hmmm
ready to get hurled to the surface
trust me,everybody know that your mind aint perfect
filler
so listen to me just go to church kid
ehh
since your life is uncertain and curvin while the earth is turnin
til your whole soul start burnin and learnin that your a weak person.
EhH :|
Y'd u except? u've lost ur mind like Inhalin too much Lead
You suck like Teeth being used and giving some bad Head
ehhh, not feelin
I give you absolutely no props like Mimes actin on Stage
I'll ruin u like novel books when turning to the Last Page
lol, second line let it down but i liked the first, coulda been harder punch though
This bitch squats to pee, Now Im about to Kill Her
Do u get many Cavities? Cuz all ur lines are Fillers
lol -- decent
So Lay off the sweets dude, your facin Tooth Decay
Stealin my inhalers the only way u could take my Breath Away
aight, pretty played
I aint a slut this wont go easy like ur first battle Did
Doc is in a crew? Terri fox wouldnt run with this Kid
blah!
Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
eh, not feelin, first line was aight
U just lost, thats what happens when do things ur bad In
I DAM this bitch this hell, like Beavers comittin Bad Sins
alright wordplay, not hard hitting though
Fillers- doc t -1
punches- thorn 1
metaphors- thorn 1
wordplay- thorn 1
multis- doc t 1
doc 0 -- thorn 3
Vote:- Thorn -- pretty much ripped this battle, both need to concentrate on harder punches.... wun~
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Punches were soft, didn't exactly leave an effect.Quote:
Originally Posted by Doc.t theSandGod
Structure was gone to hell, seriously needs to be even'd out.
Personals were pretty played, none were exactly personals.
Wordplay was attempted, but was not successful. Work on that.
Multies were not used period. They could help you, work at that also.
Overall.. Verse was pretty weak. 9/20
Punches were also soft. Could really use workQuote:
Originally Posted by Thorn
Personals were played. Also weren't even consider'd as personals.
Wordplay wasn't used. Neither was multies, you could use both.
Structure was better, which helped you alot on this battle.
V/Thorn
Pretty close battle, but Thorn gets this due to structure
All the other categories were pretty close, besides structure.
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Alot of the lines on each of ur verses were played. More so on doct's part. I didn't really read much that I haven't already heard, or something similar to. Doc.t u came pretty weak man. It all flowed alright, and sounded alright.. but u didn't really hit him with anything real. Thorn or MOB.. ur verse was full of metas, some were nice. But mainly atleast u threw some decent hitting punches, in which doc.t didn't do much. Better punches, metas win this battle for mob.
vote- mob
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Punches-Thorn
Personals-Thorn (played though)
Multi's/Meta's-Def. Thorn
Creativity-Thorn
Yea...so basicly this was a lopsided battle.
V/Thorn for obvious reasons
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119048
Peep that for me..thanks.
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Punches-Thorn
Personals-Thorn (played though)
Multi's/Meta's-Def. Thorn
Creativity-Thorn
Yea...so basicly this was a lopsided battle.
V/Thorn for obvious reasons
Best punch had to be
This bitch squats to pee, Now Im about to Kill Her
Do u get many Cavities? Cuz all ur lines are Fillers
Pretty tight.
Other than that there were really no fucking quotables.
So anyway....
V/MOB
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119048
Peep that for me..thanks.
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Thorn pretty much killed Doc.T
great wordplay
I give you absolutely no props like Mimes actin on Stage
I'll ruin u like novel books when turning to the Last Page
it's a shame most people don't get it though.
Your flo was on key as well, and the personals were ok.
I liked your wordplay, and you have a nice style.
Doc.T I wasn't really enjoying yours at all, very weak punches and no flo.
Vote Thorn
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I say that Mob one his punches was much better than docs and i see that his personals was also better he had a better verse overall
Doc work on ur personals and punches and i saw u tryied to use mutis work on it cuz it wasn't all that but think u can do better than this cuz i have seen better always come hard no matter what
V/Mod
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