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45 lines max
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topic is-sympathy....and no hate d/r or crew votes....jus straight up votes and all votes have to have explanations....pc
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but 2 hours hell no
it's 4 am here dudes going to bed here in lik 5 mins
45 lines jesus we ain' writing a book
i just want a quick battle dawg
make it like 25 lines max
yeah 25 lines dont matta to me...let me know if you down
and if you gonna do it before you peace out
Aight cool 25 lines, but i'm bout to pass out, so i'll drop tomorrow aight
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fuck it im jus gonna do the orignal 45 and you drop whateva you wanna drop when you wake up...shit due 24 hours though...pc
this is my check in and my shit....
SYMPOTHY:
I was an outsider.. recognition was seldom
a situation that was prior.. to a hope i'd tell them
When those felt mis-guided.. i'd aid them
the service i provided.. didn't phase them
Mind, i didn't.. just glad i was reliable
nothing wrong with it.. but liable
it was the same to me.. alive, but i knew to die
then a man came to me.. w. issues of suicide
gun in his palm.. i soothed his wrong
I remained him calm.. made him feel like he belonged
It wasn't a fake dream.. just confronted life too quick
n' so he thanked me.. n' went home to his wife n' kids
Then I ran into a runaway.. n' the hole he crawled in
i asked him what he done today.. n' his problems
he opened up to me.. told me what he was feeling
Told me what he was s'pose to be.. n' things he found appealing
He didn't want to stay.. in the family he'd fail to be..
though the clouds are gray.. they stay co-ensigned w/ reality
He accepted my advice.. no longer felt broke
"thanks your real nice".. and ventured back home..
crept to a bench, be it vile.. thanked what he had
Looked to the sky, smiled.. n' put the newspaper over his back
No one knew my name.. not that it chastised me
I would remain.. as long as those recognize me..
aiding was worth it.. as long as his spirit were colors
n' it was his sole purpose.. to give his life for others
A late day in the winter.. he'd search leaves n' cans
but got up un-hindered.. to help a troubled man
the man holding a gun.. another suicide case
he started to run.. as he seen the look on his face
His legs ran steady.. at the mis-lead person
i knew he was ready.. n' this time it was urgent
"DONT DO IT!" i yelled.. he jerked his neck
he replied 'I belong in hell.. for things i cant forget..
"Dont waste you life.. whats your name?i've never heard of ya?"
Take my life?.. sir, im a murdera.. (shot at the man)
People wondered.. but lacked the notion
By mid-summer.. they had finally noticed
Men at the funeral who came.. cried drops to there toes
"what was his name".. nobody knows...........
Live For Good Morals, Know The Truth
Instead Of Sympathizing For YourSelf,
Sympathize For Those Who Sympathize For You
what happend to 25 lines? whatever i'll drop today
Sympathy is what we have for each and one another
when ya feelin down people confront you like a brother
it's a feeling where it's right to share your emotions
when it's alright to let those tears start flowin
sharing pain to let people know how you feel
like when you lose a friend, it's the real deal
feeling pity but trying not to emphasize how much you sympathize
towards a good friend that's going through rough times
trying your best to keep everything on the down lo
but still trying to say how much you really care tho
**Past**
He rememberd times when things were looking grim
but help shortly came to his side "cheer up slim"
everyone was there showing him they really cared
he returned the favor showing the feelings he shared
he was complentating suicide with a kinfe by his side
lost all my pride, feeling like shit deep inside
couldn't provide he was denied, though he tried
wanted to die, when the knife and wrist collide
just when kinfe got into hand she walked in
she ran in, grabbed the knife, the crying begin
**Present**
Since that day, somehow he had transformed
a strong relationship with this girl had formed
he said that he was always gonna be there for her
but then, the worst had to happen, it had to occur
she got shot while tying to defend from a no good mugger
he wasn't there, now she's dead, he can't hug her
now's he sits in jail cause he used a bat called slugger
because he finally found that guy who mugged her
**The End**
Sympathy goes along way in the world today
being there for one another makes the day
sympathize for everyone and be there
don't let a moment waste, show you care
show them your love, so them the truth
show them you care, so them with proof
don't waste time.....think about it
uppin for some votes............................................. ..................
uppin for votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
drop a link!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
u both had some mad lines and u got some skill
but im goin with flash
i cant vote but if i could it would goto flash
uppin #3
can we get some votes in here
drop links and i'll reply
peace..........................
uppin #4
can we please get some votes up in here
drop a link and i'll vote on one of your battles
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uppin the last time
come drop some votes in here!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
leave a link and i'll drop an honest vote
cant poll but id have to go with krem
his flowed better (flashed useed the same word alot)
better multis
more vocab
if u vote on my battle vs se7en
ill poll as soon as i can
aight. here it is.
the Ryme scheme Goes to Flash. Liked the flow
all the way. Plus i thought his Verse was Worded
a liitle Better. Krem. your flow was Ok, but I
Personaly didnt like the One Sylable Ryme Endings.
You both had Good verses and I give you Props to that.
Vocab was Tied. It's hard to vote on complexity and
Vocab in this battle seeing that the Verses were Virtually the same.
Seeing that this was the case, I have to go with Flash on
this One. No Hate Krem, but this is my Honest Opinion.
G' Luck to both of you in the Future. Were all Emcee's Here :laugh:
Vote-Flash :thumbup:
anyWayz. Could you Please Drop A vOte on these Battles.
they are Beeing Slept On Mad. I will Return the Honest favor
in anything else you drop. just drop the Link. aight. It would Be Mad
Appreciated. On Game. There are more then One Battle To Vote On
too :thumbup:
Me_____VERSES_____INFINIT SKILLZ
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115148
Me____VERSES______D’CYPLE
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...68#post1206468
Me_____VERSES_____UBEN. SONNED
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Me______VERSES_____SUNSHINE
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115900
yo i'm not one 4 this topical shit but flash came mad nice
vocab ---> flash
interest ---> flash
authenticity---> flash
dnt get me rong krem was aiight but flashs shit had me believin his story
aight.
both had good shit, Liked the flow from krem
both verses nicely worded
Flash, your flow was Ok, but I
but the on syllable rhyme scheme shit dont cut it
You both had Good verses
Vocab was very closely matched...so thats a tie there
both verses show complete vocab complexity
but i just felt the way krem delivered the topic
also his verse was alot easier to read
my Honest Opinion.
Vote- Krem
niggaz be sleepin on this site and shit...wake the fuck up and vote on this shit...
UPPIN 1
uppin 222222222222222
i hate niggas that be lookin at this site and be post votin but they dun even poll vote
fuckin take 4 days jus tah finish a simple topical battle
wake the fuck up this is my 3 uppin for votes...only gots 2 left
well i thought this was pretty close here... flash your verse had a smooth flow going.... your vocab and scheme tho could be upp'd.... seemed quite basic in places.... but i liked your take on the topic.... verb... the oconcept you had, with the different verses could have been worked nicely.. but you lacked in the rhyming you had going on... also it wasnt as interesting as i thought it was gonna be at a glance.... close, but im voting flash this time.... ive seen better topicals,,,, but these were pretty even matched.....
thanks for the votes people...need some more so this can finally be finished
tight battle. both came good. both came with really good messages. both had their individual strong points in there verses. Krem had the structure. you both had the flow in this. i felt flashes message a it more because he expressed it with a better quality i think. it wasn't basic, and it was more original. you both came wit a sort of a story that related to something common, but wit all the dialogue, flashes appealed to me. Krem came good but limited in the creativity. it held back you verses shine. so for those reasons...
vote-flash
props to both. real nice verses, good topic.
peace
Dope topicals.. from both of you
I've seen better reads.. but I did enjoy both of these.
This was pretty close in most all areas, except for one thing. Flash, to me, told the story and had better imagery then Krem did. The entire point he was trying to get across in his verse just popped right out to me. Krem's did too.. but not as well as did Flashes verse. Flow's were both pretty decent. Vocab was ok.... flash with the more interesting read and better point
vote-flash
id say flash on this gave it more effort
likes his story more and shit ya heard me
as for krem kinda came whack in some areas
no hate but krem you need to elavate man
flash yur getting there just work on it more
vote/flash for overall better imagination ok
Both were kinda weak, obviously they are new to topical battles. but its cool. Imagery was kinda close, but imma go with flash on that. emotion wasn't really seen taht much in neither, flow was also pretty even.. to hard to judge. Overall.. both need to elevate extremely. read some legendary open mics and get the hang of the concept. but overall in this battle... imma go with flash on this one... not by much, but his imagery was just a bit better..
V/Flash
Flash is DQ'ed from this battle for biting and banned.