ok
10 lines
u spit first...since u said u wuld
spit afta both chek in.....
20 min. 2 spit....
go
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ok
10 lines
u spit first...since u said u wuld
spit afta both chek in.....
20 min. 2 spit....
go
this is my chek in........waiting on u......if i sign off b4 u chek in...dont consider it as a no-show.....waitin on u bro....gl :)
Alrite a will drop now
i had to rush the verse tho
peace
Put ye mouth on ice only way you gon spit cold
You could, 'bulken up ye punches' and still not 'hit bold'
After my rhymes are thrown, I will have ya guns on the floor like world peace
Only time this pussy's tight is when he raps about girl priests
I will have ya brains looking like some kinda cheese spread
I will put so many nines in your skull you will sneeze lead
You will end up face down on the kurb, teeth on the edge
Kurb peepin throught the back of ya neck like American history X
You think you tough enuff for me ya’ll dnt know who ya can bargin wid
I make sum harder shit than this and cut u up in four like banana split
if u didnt prewrite...how did u do it one minute after u fucken cheked in????
but w.e....ite ite ite.....watch as i "slay" this herb...
Now watch as I slowly tare apart this so called emcee "Slayer"
And observe how i "serve" this kid as if i were a prof. tennis player
Callin me "Jack The Ripper" the way im rippin this prewriting emcee...
I'm whipping this herb..sort of like a cop given a murderer a 4th degree
Imma slay this bitch like a butcher slicin up a pound of meat
This bitch aint even elevated, but yet acting as if he were an elite...
Yall this bitch is choking...quick ....someone give him CPR...
But not to worry tho.....cuz "Buffy'z" on his dick...she not 2 far..*
This bitch spits ice....but he's acting as if he were spitting fire..
I have just "handed" this kid out....actin as if he were a fuken flyer
* buffy the vampire "slayer"......get it???
lets up this shyt...
a was finishin it off wen i sed i wud spit in a minute i was rushin it acctually it took me 15 mins dont be shittin one now just spit
peace
yo I think that slayer's punches where weak but the flow was alright.
I think that lyricallyabbusiv took those punches and served this kid
Please vote on the link in my signature after I vote on this!
Slayer:
Put ye mouth on ice only way you gon spit cold
You could, 'bulken up ye punches' and still not 'hit bold'
Aight, first line super-played, second line nice.
After my rhymes are thrown, I will have ya guns on the floor like world peace
Only time this pussy's tight is when he raps about girl priests
I was feeling this line, pretty nice.
You will end up face down on the kurb, teeth on the edge
Kurb peepin throught the back of ya neck like American history X
Blah. Decent I suppose, nothing special.
I will have ya brains looking like some kinda cheese spread
I will put so many nines in your skull you will sneeze lead
Weak and played.
You think you tough enuff for me ya’ll dnt know who ya can bargin wid
I make sum harder shit than this and cut u up in four like banana split
Blah closer.
lyricallyabbusiv:
Now watch as I slowly tare apart this so called emcee "Slayer"
And observe how i "serve" this kid as if i were a prof. tennis player
Played. Not too bad tho.
[B]Callin me "Jack The Ripper" the way im rippin this prewriting emcee...
I'm whipping this herb..sort of like a cop given a murderer a 4th degree[B]
First line wack, second line ok but a bit stretched.
Imma slay this bitch like a butcher slicin up a pound of meat
This bitch aint even elevated, but yet acting as if he were an elite...
First line wack, second line played, but not too bad.
Yall this bitch is choking...quick ....someone give him CPR...
But not to worry tho.....cuz "Buffy'z" on his dick...she not 2 far..*
Not bad.
This bitch spits ice....but he's acting as if he were spitting fire..
I have just "handed" this kid out....actin as if he were a fuken flyer
First line weak, second line nice.
This was a really close match, and a pretty good one. Overall i'm gonna give it to Slayer. There is no real proof that he pre-wrote, although if he did, I would give it to lyrically.
Good Match. No Hate.
Vote on the match in my sig vs. Will a Pear
I personally didn't really like this battle much, but...
Slayer: Ur verse was decent. You had punches, but most were played. U had metas, but most were played. Not really any multis, but you had okay wordplay. It's not that u had a bad verse, it's just that I wasn't feelin' ur topics. But I ain't vote cause of that. Keep elevatin'.
lyricallyabbusiv: Ur verse was decent, too. You had punches, but some were played. U had metas, but most were played. One or two more multis, but not enough. Okay wordplay. Same thing about ur verse; I wasn't really feelin' ur topics. But keep elevatin'.
Vote: lyricallyabbusiv (I'll be able to vote very soon)
*It's possible to have to links on the same battle. I do it all the time. Post on one, go back to ur other one and post on the other. It could take 30 seconds, actually. So he wasn't necessarily pre-writing.*
Alrite thanks need more votes people
Peace
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my last up..........................................plze vote..
slayer - ur structure changed throughout the drop.......it started pretty good, then to huge ass lines, then back to good, so work on that.........because of ur structure being so unconsistent ur flow fell off quite a bit.........ur vocab was basic.........hardly any metas were present.....u made an attempt at wordplay with the "bold" line, but it didnt connect at all.......ur punches were pretty basic and played........no good personals either......overall this was a pretty bad verse.........
lyricallyabbusiv - structure was good......flow was on target........vocab was ok.........some of the metas were good......u made attempts at wordplay, some was good, some was wack..........some of ur punches connected well........ok personals........overall this was a pretty good verse........
conclusion - lyricallyabbusiv had better structure, flow, metas, wordplay, punches, and personals.......so judging on that this is a pretty one sided battle and lyricallyabbusiv gets my vote......
VOTE - LYRICALLYABBUSIV
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wordplay-lyric
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vote-lyric
i voted lyric because his shit was harder hittin and i was feelin his flow alot more then the other kat...both need to up your shit though
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Alrite thanks for the honest feedback
more votes plz
Uppin.............................................
lyrically abuysive wins this but barely. an average battle for front lines. the first kids shit seemed prewritten but it doesnt really matter now does it. his shit just wasnt hitting that much. he was talking about shit he was about to do.. you don't want to do that too much in battle. lyrically abusive had a few gay lines but mostly avg ones. the buffy the vampire slayer one was an ok concept but should have been worded much better. but anyway .. winner goes tooooooo...
vote - lyricallabusive.
Uppinnnnnnnnnnn people need votes a wanna get this thread closed !!!!!!!!!!!!
I deleted all the bitching. After that, Slayer hasn't used 5 ups, only 4. Battle stays open.
upppppiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn 3rd.....plze close this shyt so i can battle sum1 elseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!11sum1 vote!...i willll return favor...
ite uppppiiiinnnnn thisss shyttttttt!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
last up......plzeeeeee dont let me waste it.......n plus...leave ya links...only 1 vote needed 2 close this biatch!
aight here is how I saw the battle
Lyrically: Funny verse, gud flow with nice wordplay and gud voc.; your punches were nice, gud variation in your lines; more personals, you had a couple but I'd like to see more; structure was aight
Slayer: your verse was, well, played; decent flow with a bit variation, bad wordplay; your punches were just played; no personals, need to work on this a lot; structure was a little off; keep elevatin man
overall vote: Lyricallyabussive