10-20 lines
about 1 hour time limit.. no specific, just get it up
blind spit
no d/r, any bullshit
check in as soon as possible <
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10-20 lines
about 1 hour time limit.. no specific, just get it up
blind spit
no d/r, any bullshit
check in as soon as possible <
this is my checkinnnnn
checkin in set it up u spit first then ill post but can it be due tomorrow
go back into the bitchslapped thread to discuss this....
This battle, so easy, for me, like the old days & playdoh
Kid must be from Kansas, thinkin up a name like Tornado
Is a comparison though, chance he might be a no-show
He needs time, to prepare his lines, make sure they rhyme
Then posts bad structure, I guess ur winds blew em outta line
Think you can kill me, but u cant, my body keeps clonin
Tryin to hit #1, while number 2 has got your girl moanin
U won't need her anyway, I fuck up ur levels of Serotonin*
Keep ownin, this flow has me like a pimped out master
Clasher, as I make Tornado's body an incredible disaster
Faster, before you know it, he's buried and gone
Quicker, then my man from 'Family Guy' can say "Lets get it on!"
Tornado, from the day he was born, he hasn't had any balls
Doc cut em off, wasting his time & finding you were the cause
Maybe u shoulda been a girl anyway, God knows u can't rap
U flap and flap ur gums, and all I'm smelling is crap
Good thing u have no audio, 4yr old boys sayin "Tornado is wack"
Boy, you suck, lets face it, I just gave you that fact
*Serotonin = levels of it inside the body, creates arousal
Yo, where are you? I said it would be fine putting it up today, cause I'm nice like that. But I said do it asap...... 7:06pm and still ticking...
u need to cross out the cam cause i'd be rocking your world
the only thing i'd be fuckin is your girl/
to bad u got beat by a newb who be sayin dirt to your face
losing to a first timer boy your a disgrace/
camrok be tryin to be like eminem but u can never succeed
cause i beat u so bad that u'd have to go to the negro need/
he'd be tryin to battle but he doesn't no how to rhyme
to bad he tryed and he failed cause he can never shine/
i be knockin your lights out with my left
cause your not worthy enough for my right cause u aint the best/
i dont no how he does it acceptin and losin
i spin and hit your life so much death is the next place u'd be crusin/
callin a battle while i could accept r u mentaly ill
no i just bust open his head he'd be needin a bottle of pills/
make sure u lose by all means necessary
but if u come my home i'd scream damn your scary/
i'd really take him on if he was worth the challenge
to bad none of your rhymes r wanted/
i beat u so hard theres no need for voting
there is no hope for u so no need of hoping/
Upppinnnn #1........... lets hit this people......
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CAMROCK took this easy...Tornado came weak as hell..played weak lines...like sex/gay jokes....Try and be more creartive and original in your verse...Stay away from all sex and gay and wannabe gangsta lines....CAMROCK..you had some nice punches and personals in your verse...also some good metas...SOme filler too..but not enough to damage your verse
Please drop an honest vote here Thanks http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115298
thanx for the tips cause im new to the place, lets get some votes in
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vote on this fucking battle already.....
very played out tornado... think you can do much better... ima personally have to say that nothin you said hasn't been said a million times in a diss cypher... so for pure lyrical dismantlin and for keepin a better structure... cam deserves a nod...
but cam seretonin? it is a chemical in the brain closely linked to nervousness, anxiety and obsessive compulsive disorder... there has been little documentation on it's affect on arousal...
damn 2-0 lets get some votes in damn people sleepin
Punches: Cam, actually had punches in his verse, or ones that made sense
Wordplay: Neither, nobody had any wordplay
Multis: Cam, had about 2 flips a line
Personals: Cam, had the Kansas line
Opener: Cam, opened with a personal
Closer: Cam, Tornado's was pure trash
Vote - Camrok
You need punches to win a battle, go to the EMC if you want to keep battling Tornado. Camrok, you had the right idea, but if you re-worded your punches, they can be a lot better.
This battle, so easy, for me, like the old days & playdoh
Kid must be from Kansas, thinkin up a name like Tornado
Dope line, but this is an example, could've made better, but idea is good.
After the battle, I'll cover you with play-doh, to ease pain like that,
Weak dude, must be from Kansas, Tornado, with a name like that,
^^^ See, my first line was garbage, but you get what I'm saying???
yo, camrok takes this one easy
tornado..your flow wasnt too bad but your structure lacked. Your verse was played out and your punches and personals didnt hard hard at all. You need to evaluate but keep it up...
camrok...you had some nice punches and personals and you had some nice metaphors as well. You had a nice flow and a nice structure...keep it up..
v/ camrok
This battle, so easy, for me, like the old days & playdoh
Kid must be from Kansas, thinkin up a name like Tornado
alright namecalling.. but the punch it self could have come alot better
Is a comparison though, chance he might be a no-show
He needs time, to prepare his lines, make sure they rhyme
transistion on the rhymes coudl have been soomther, this was an alright multi attempt but basic
Then posts bad structure, I guess ur winds blew em outta line
Think you can kill me, but u cant, my body keeps clonin
punchs are there... concept on the follow through was dope but the punch needed more strength
Tryin to hit #1, while number 2 has got your girl moanin
U won't need her anyway, I fuck up ur levels of Serotonin*
eh, this line could have been alot better. not that hard and needed more direction
Keep ownin, this flow has me like a pimped out master
Clasher, as I make Tornado's body an incredible disaster
eh filler ish.. ok play off his name i suppose, could have worded it better
Faster, before you know it, he's buried and gone
Quicker, then my man from 'Family Guy' can say "Lets get it on!"
needed better connection and wording in general
Tornado, from the day he was born, he hasn't had any balls
Doc cut em off, wasting his time & finding you were the cause
good story telling however lacks punch
Maybe u shoulda been a girl anyway, God knows u can't rap
U flap and flap ur gums, and all I'm smelling is crap
not that hard, but theres punchs there which is good, needs strength and better metaphor
Good thing u have no audio, 4yr old boys sayin "Tornado is wack"
Boy, you suck, lets face it, I just gave you that fact
better line liked the setline.. however the follwo through fell short
over allyou had puncsh that were decent for this battle. but needed better metaphors and wordplay to add.. also try more inners and outers to smoothen your flow.
u need to cross out the cam cause i'd be rocking your world
the only thing i'd be fuckin is your girl/
eh this is a good concept (the set) but the follow through is weak man
to bad u got beat by a newb who be sayin dirt to your face
losing to a first timer boy your a disgrace/
punchs i suppose but every weak and lacking metaphors
camrok be tryin to be like eminem but u can never succeed
cause i beat u so bad that u'd have to go to the negro need/
wtf? no.. this isnt a good punchs and offensive.. and point less
he'd be tryin to battle but he doesn't no how to rhyme
to bad he tryed and he failed cause he can never shine/
basic.. lacks a hard punch, you could have come alot better. added better metaphor and harder punch
i be knockin your lights out with my left
cause your not worthy enough for my right cause u aint the best/
weak, could have really made this alot better
i dont no how he does it acceptin and losin
i spin and hit your life so much death is the next place u'd be crusin/
better, but self boasting and lacking hard punch
callin a battle while i could accept r u mentaly ill
no i just bust open his head he'd be needin a bottle of pills/
um could have connected alot better and focused on dissing him alot better
make sure u lose by all means necessary
but if u come my home i'd scream damn your scary/
LMAO at least you mademe laugh.. THis was very weak and doesnt focus a hard diss at all
i'd really take him on if he was worth the challenge
to bad none of your rhymes r wanted/
bad hook rhyme here, could have been alot better with the flow. self boasting type ish
i beat u so hard theres no need for voting
there is no hope for u so no need of hoping/
wording was alright working with the flow although you could have had a better talent shown
over all you really needed to work on your flowing and then add in some iner rhymes and outter rhymes. work on your punches strength and adding better metaphors.
Vote- Camrok
took it with a better style and better punchs