checkin in....remember 10-15 bars...first to 5 votes win.....due ASAP or by 11:59 p.m. tommorow night....aiight
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checkin in....remember 10-15 bars...first to 5 votes win.....due ASAP or by 11:59 p.m. tommorow night....aiight
it's time to refute this fool for checkin in on this site,
Mag's gonna shoot in his face change his eye colour to white
give no respite, take flight n spark the craziest battle line
now you've stumbled on da darkest place of diss mind
it's diss time, it's diss rhyme made with da illest design
ya miss timed ya flows and it's lookin like ya should resign
it just goes to show this spar isn't even a little close
that's just da way it goes when im sippin juice n throwin bows
balls like discos, huge and catchin your lady's glance
do some threesome spooge after I work ya lil sis out her pants
yep thats all i need for this one...
the longer you take the less credible the verse...
your time is running out... please drop and get it over with...
I dont know what to tell you son....besides I have A LIFE outside of this battle board.....I give you until 11:59 pm of today and this is what you come up with???....this is 15 bars right here for you...you obviously dont know what a bar is so I'm going to have to show you.....READ AND LEARN...
INSERT my fist in your STERNUM, TWERK it and CURVE your VERTIBRAE/
My VERSES GERMINATE, MERGING to form INTERNAL NERVE DECAY//
Feel your flesh BURN as microscopic WORMS PERMIATE/
The EPIDERMAL LAYERS, SQUIRMING into your PURPLE VAINS//
OBSERVE the VERBAL WRAITH REGURGITATE nuclear WASTE/
Hunting you like GERMAN MERCANARY SEARCHING for Anne FRANK//
I Materialize in PERSON, and get BEZERK in the WORST WAY/
REGURGITATING WORDS in the form of nuclear WASTE//
ORION, a cyborg with neural-net CIRCUITS in my BRAIN/
Slicing you with THIRTY different VERSIONS of CIRCULAR BLADES//
A LEARNING COMPUTER, Absorbing SURGES of THERMAL RAYS/
A tactician, and Magnificent is the next PERSON I TERMINATE//
I’m not psycho, but I IMPESONATE NORMAN BATES/
As STRANGE voices URGE me to kill you in a MURDEROUS RAGE//
Fold your body into a PERFECT TRIANGULR SHAPE/
I SLAY from INVERTED ANGLES, and BURN you at a VERTICAL STAKE//
Put you in PERMANENT STATE of AWARENESS/
Like The United STATES of AMERICA AWAITING TERRORISTS//
I’m DANGEROUS as CHEROKEE Indians with CLAY ARROW TIPS/
BARE-knuckled HERETIC, with a pair of fists that AIRLIFT you like an AEROSHIP//
MAGNIFICENT, look at my SIGNATURE, I'm not even HUMAN/
I’m a MAGICIAN with LYRICS, and YOU WINNING is an ILLUSION//
A PHYSICIST with DIGITS, to subtract you out the EQUATION/
I attack with Mathematic ADDITION, and CALCULATION of time TABLES//
Really, I hate battling, but I need MORE RECOGNITION/
So I ENTER weak BOARDS, and GET INTO WARS with THESE BITCHES//
SWINGING SWORDS TOWARD you just to lick the BLEEDING TENDONS/
After your LIMBS fall to the FLOOR, POURING MORE of YOUR LIQUIDS//
With a HORRIBLE display of GORE when I FORMULATE like a CHEMIST/
JARS of DIFFERENT MIXUTRES TRANSFORM you into a CORPSE WITHIN MINUTES//
1. most peeps don't drop more than 10--15 lines.. and i doubt you could spit your 30 lines over 15 bars of music...
2. How can you seriously regurgitate nuclear waste as a rhyme twice???
otherwise im impressed by your random frontin
{Peace}
Quote:
Originally Posted by Magnificent
this is my style...this is how i rap....it takes much practice my son.....you can doubt all you want but it doesnt change the fact that i can actually spit like this
and what i meant about the regurgitating line is like something "comming back up" like vomit..."regurgitating words"....using them again....
whatever... upping for some votes...
I will peep a battle for whoever drops a vote
thanks
{Peace}
Orion ripped him easily....
it doesnt look like he polled that one......^^^^^^^^^^^^^upping for some votes
^^^^^^^^^^^.....upping for votes.....^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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ORION, nice verse, what i really noticed you used alot
of BIG words, which is good though, but some of them
i didnt know what they meant, you had some aight punches
in their, but you still need to work on them, you had decent
structure, but next time try not to use to many big words,
your flow was aight, if you can read good, lol, but overall you
MAG, you had a decent verse, it sounds as if you were biting it
off someone, cause all you did was talk bout yourself, i didnt
see one god damn punch thrown in your verse, and if you did
they was weak as fuck, your structure was good though, i'll
give you that, aight flow, easy to understand, next time try
some metas, and multis, you should try topical, your flow
seems like a topical, but keep elevating.
my vote: ORION
return the favor, hit this up!!!
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113808
did pretty good, keep elevating.
........................^^^^^^^^upping for votes....
you know what. I usualy dont do this but sence u talked so much shit orion, ima jus go out and say, u suck dude.
fav line from mag:
this made me laugh. nice punchQuote:
Originally Posted by mag...
overall, no personals but u didnt need any. Punches were good and rhyme scheme was great.
fav line from orion:
your only good meta. didnt rhyme that good though. nice.Quote:
Originally Posted by orion
overall, dude, wtf r u talkin about. Your sayin takes time to learn to write like that or some shit...that font was gay, bold was gay, lines wer uneven...was hard to read. Please keep it reasonable for the reader. Also, you used too many big words that didnt make any sence. You can keep it basic sometimes. All that stupid shit makes your verse look prewritten and stupid.
breakdown:
structure: mag
flow: mag
wordplay: mag
rhyme scheme: mag
punches: mag
metas: mag
personals: didnt c any
mag, u merked him. He cleary needs to read som battles. Either way though, good battle. No hate. Honest opinion.
P.S. Orion, dont talk so much shit unless u know your good...no hate though, jus bugs me that u would do all that.
please return fav if u can.
my votes is going to orion
mag..: your verse was good but you lacked punches though for how long it tok its pretyt decent with some ok multis. the lil sis line is pretty played but still managed to hit pretyt hard. still all together a solid but short verse. 6.5/10
Orion: i agree with mag in the fact that you wrote too much for the bar count, drop a link to an audo of you spitting and ill believe you. but you came with really nice vocab and multis. Your flow was kinda wack and plz do not type in that font with certian parts caped up thats so bad. but your punches hit hard and overall you won.
7.3/10
Since i voted plz vote on my battles becuz there so old and slept on i jsut want some closer plz.
wow i thought this battle was destined to die in the recesses of FL... thnks for acknowledging this prewrite against me though Yaaa-boi...
im not dickridin...but if you people would look, orion shit looks prewritten big time...Even if it isnt, all those words didnt meen anything. No punch, no win. How it goes. Experienced people please vote on this. I dont wanna see a clear win loose for stupid reasons.
Oh ya, please clear up my battles people. Anybody please. No hate votes though.
up^^^^^^^^^^^^for the love of god vote on this shit...
fav line from mag:Mag's gonna shoot in his face change his eye colour to white
give no respite, take flight n spark the craziest battle line
now you've stumbled on da darkest place of diss mind
it's diss time, it's diss rhyme made with da illest design
line from orion:
A LEARNING COMPUTER, Absorbing SURGES of THERMAL RAYS/
A tactician, and Magnificent is the next PERSON I TERMINATE//
I’m not psycho, but I IMPESONATE NORMAN BATES/
As STRANGE voices URGE me to kill you in a MURDEROUS RAGE//
breakdown:
flow:mag
structure:mag
mutlies:tie
punchliens:tie
overall vote goes to mag
IM GOING TO DROP A LINK CAN U PLEAS VOTE IN IT MAG.... (HONEST VOTE) PLEASE RETURN FAVOR
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. Don't think you're getting away with just copying and pasting any favorite lines. - Axiom
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118714
mag... please vote on this honestly thank u
damn...people say they dont know what the words mean huh....so i dont get a vote because these n*66as didnt pay attention in english class.....
fav line from mag:Mag's gonna shoot in his face change his eye colour to white
give no respite, take flight n spark the craziest battle line
now you've stumbled on da darkest place of diss mind
it's diss time, it's diss rhyme made with da illest design
line from orion:
A LEARNING COMPUTER, Absorbing SURGES of THERMAL RAYS/
A tactician, and Magnificent is the next PERSON I TERMINATE//
I’m not psycho, but I IMPESONATE NORMAN BATES/
As STRANGE voices URGE me to kill you in a MURDEROUS RAGE//
breakdown:
flow:mag
structure:mag
mutlies:tie
punchliens:tie
overall vote goes to mag
return the favor and hit my sig
i cant vote but close battle but i thoufht orion did betta cuz the punches hit harder for me and were more complex and mag did good too but not as good as orion in my opinion...hit my sig up plz thx.........1