In Respect

For Harry....much more than an uncle

I hav'nt cried since I found out you had died
That was the last time tears fell from my eyes
Took me by suprise, never thought you'd leave
I miss you, like a lung you helped me breath
And I believe you watch over me from heaven
You were there for me since my birth in 1987
My veins are severed but I'm still here, alive
I dont see you no more but memories survive
Your health nose-dived so now you dont suffer
You were my heart beat, there wont be no other
Now all I got is my brothers, they are the world
I love 'em so much.....much more than any girl
In life's twists+turns, I'm under cloudy skies
But it's OK, coz we'll meet again on the day I die
So in my rhymes I expose my heart and my soul
I know your proud as I chase my personal goals
The blackholes in society are tryn'a to suck me in
But you protect me, from deep under my skin
All my sins come out from underneath my flesh
It must be all my fears which are bein addressed
Coz since your death, my life aint been the same
Now I got nothin to lose...but everythin to gain


Rest in Peace......I miss you

Dope.....very enotional..was this from recent tragedy??? Is..I'm truly sorry..

Think this is very touching, makes me think about all the relatives i've lost...am moved...

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Originally Posted by Penskills

Dope.....very enotional..was this from recent tragedy??? Is..I'm truly sorry..

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No....he died in 2002. But I've got family problems so it's bringin it all back to me. Thanks tho

Uppin

there is no way you are 16 with such great lines.I like your bridges, I like your the way you end your lines and I like your imagery...you ain't 16, stop lying boy. You like 25 and you act like you ain't got skills but you do. I hate reading but I'll read anything from you

Lm a really nice emotional piece. I recently lost my gamps and my uncle and i'm gettin where your comming from! great flow and structure. peace man!! (R.I.P)

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Originally Posted by carlosbarrett

there is no way you are 16 with such great lines.I like your bridges, I like your the way you end your lines and I like your imagery...you ain't 16, stop lying boy. You like 25 and you act like you ain't got skills but you do. I hate reading but I'll read anything from you

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I'm definatly 16.....thanks anyway.

Thanks for all the feedback so far

Uppin

Uppin....

this was pretty dope,

i liked the flow and ity had tons of emotion

props
this was extremly deep which makes you think


i was feeling this,

is this the same LM from lw that i battled before??

^^No I dont think so...

Thanks for the comment

like they all said..sorry for ur loss son
nice peice, it was indeed from the heart and heart dwellin'..very emmotional, cuz i know haow it feels to loose fam bro..
nice verse and keep ur head up kid

peace

Thanks.....uppin

Uppin

i like this...

i like this alot..

Open mics that have emotion burning through the lines are, in my opinion, the pick of the bunch. Anyone can get on a mic and diss someone, but some people find it really difficult to show there true feelings through words. Its a passion, writing, and a rhyme without emotion is like victoria beckhams stomach; flat. This was really good..

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Originally Posted by FanTa ZeE

its a passion, writing, and a rhyme without emotion is like victoria beckhams stomach; flat.

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LOL.....thanks for the comment

Lm this touched me man. You went so dead and it looks like you imprented your emotions into text. Your vocab wasnt to complex whihc i feel brough the meaning and the point of the piece out a lot more ... hmm what else can i say Sturcture was good flow was consistant , never droped.. props man .. keep doing your thing!

Thanks...

Uppin

After reading this... i was truly in aww. This flow and structure and scheme was very good. like the uptop guy said. its easy to diss someone or rap about urself and whatnot, but write something thats emotional and with true meaning.. thats what the real skill is all about, bringing ur emotions into the text for when it comes down to spit it... ur ready and ur flow is ready. i liked this epice alot...

ps favour for a favour, drop some feedback on my song called "The struggle"
it would be greatly appreciated.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116695

Sylem