Topic: Heavon On Earth
Check In Due: Saturday Jan. 14
Verses Due: Tuesday Jan. 17
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Topic: Heavon On Earth
Check In Due: Saturday Jan. 14
Verses Due: Tuesday Jan. 17
Good Luck
checkin in....
ready to lose rule?......................................
..Mountains of people die each and every year from diseases
But to where they end up after death we have no reasons
Do they come back as a different person or creature
The same person in a different year but same featers..
Paranoia of emotions run rapidily down cold veins at night
After a loved one dies and I believe they're still in my sight
Go to bed & cry alone close my eyes to see a odd vision
..Wake Up..
Believe life still exists under the casket is my prediction
Tears of denied bliss let me capture images of the past
Or future of the man I once talked to showing me contrast
Holding his hands out in my dreams but I can't touch
Struggling with your demies but your still resembling a crutch
Dressed in all white are you an angel now in the heavons
Here tobe my guardian & to answer my tears questions
Provide me with courage to elavate my angelic passion
To smile at me through dreams of positive compassion
For nobody believes I still feel your soul or hold our bond
People tell me your in the clouds in the heavons beyond
Is that true will you speak to me with your voice of power
Help me bloom into the sun as does the prettiest flower
No answer or beckon just a lost spirite un-united to god
Whom I believe underestimated the weather of emotional fog
..Days past I started to realise people died and didn't exist
Over the hate of god an the craving of slitting my wriste
The visions stopped answers didn't get remotly explained
Frowned at my thesis for it was an act of my selfish pain..
Until I started seeing my uncle again in day light activities
Didn't react to me I figured it was just my minds creativity
No more jumping to conclusion people reacted in sin
Told me I was in guilt these actions were bound to begin
Interested in why this was happening I'll apt to the show
Take it as it is until the string breaks & the memeries go
Tears hiddin I left them behind no more aginy taken my pride
Pray to god for help to take away the demons deep inside
Tricks being played in my head by the emotion achieved
Grasping for air but these scenes are taking the air I breath
..I Should Stop Running..
Maybe this is happening for a reason to ensure the love
Maybe heavons on earth not in the white clouds above
Started going to the hospital to talk to kids in my position
Took notes to see they were in my boat just nobody listened
A lot of people denied the fact the dead are around us
Nobody wants to sound different so the truth isn't a trust
It is a painted lie a picture covered in a mask for the dead
I'll grasp my visions for souls relive after the wooden bed
..Death is birth boundries are just sometimes denied
Interacting with the lost souls shouldn't be deprived
For when my uncle died I could see him in dreams
Feel him beside me keep hold dead love by any means..
...Somethings are unexplainable but this is loves work
When somebody dies and you still think you see them,
don't deny that fact you did, grasp the ability to do so.
We share past present & future souls on our home...
For heavon is a a place on Earth
long waste of time^^ill do like 28.....
dust settles...empty eyes peirce the guiltless..
cloak that protect me from what i feel rips...
yes i still get.....edgy at times for certain...
yet the question is pinned....whats behind that curtain?....
am i without purpose.....memories flood of laughs in grass...
development of mind...develops in my math class...
clock strikes half-past...five....words eject from ejaculation....
and i backpack over the hills of my imagination....
as i master patience.....my consciense execretes through my pores...
happy thoughts caress the thoughts of cures with absence of wars...
grasping for more....I put time through neglect....
struggling to accept..a world where angels protect your neck...
yes i guess.....maybe my understanding is little....
yes life is stroked with death..like a hand on a fiddle...
damaging riddles..puzzle me daily as i ride....
with life at my side....i use fate as my guide...
question and hide?......struck with a rod...
and as i traveled to the store...I swear i saw God...
slipped over shod......i encompass my fate...
figured it out...So i got a ride to heaven's gate..
i rever hate.....saw the stairway to hell...
headfirst home....stood on the edge and i fell..
yes i guess its well....maybe its what i deserve...
but the visions of my lost ones...was truly superb...
labeled a nerd......maybe it was true....
but belief escaped me so i questioned the proof....
love will rescue...me from my low self-worth...
....i followed the path of souls...to find Heaven On Earth...
right...uppen
lets up this....come on guys
Ok this was a long read ....but i feel that rule won....first off he wrote a novel..lol secondly he took a much more emotionally deep point of view on the subject and put alot out there as far as imagery goes....it left me with a tingle...which is a good sign..and i felt that it was the better of the two...
Daz...your topical reminded me too much of everyday...thoughts....you used slang and i don't think that in this case slang fit the topic as well...you can use slang don't get me wrong but there is a time and a place....also your story was rather remidial...i think you should have put more time into your drop...winner
Rule.....both hit this up plz thanx...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114166
^eheh deacon hit that up too if you have the chance.....bye
uppen
yo this was a nice topic to write about here.....nice verses both of you,
took about a hour to read them lol...properly but overall,
but my man rlue took this,
his shit was 2 long but that was the only fault,
he had a nice strucuture simple unlike daz,
he touched on the topic more on a emotional side,
of things wich i prefere....also saw alot mre creativeity,
nice battle tho you 2..
v-rule,
make sure you hit this man http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115824 thx.......
Winner= RUle
Daz- You Had A Nice VeRSE, I WAS FEELIN IT. BUT LIKE UNDER SAID, YOU USED SLANG, ISNT THAT A NONO IN TOPICAL? ANYWAYS, You Had Nice Vocab, And Nice Structure, And Nice Wordplay. Your Verse Was A 7/10. Keep It Up
Rule- Hot Shit Right HEre, IT Was Lengthy, But I Was Feelin It The Whole Way. I Liked Your Perspective, And The Emotion You Put In It, Really Hit Me. Nice Verse. You Had Nice Structure, Nice Vocab, Nice Wordplay. You Beat Daz, Juss Cuz YOu Were Emotional And I Felt Your Perspective More. Your Verse Was 9/10. You Also Keep It Up
Vote= Rule..
Hit THis UP Honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115637
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Upping
Upping...stop sleeping.....leave links and we will both hit them up honestly
lol i am winning and am on exactly same vote number as you, we won this crew battle easily,
yeah nice job...this is lame how much its getting slept on....discourages us all to even bothering posting up our pieces...
done
uppen...this is really fuckin old...lets get some votes