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ShortY spits first!
uppin and checkin
here we go im checking in to kick ur ass
will drop in biut 5 mins
Blackgrenade what the fuck man u just gotta change your name!
im sick a people like u acting black its just getting kinda lame
After you hear the rest of this u might want my picture in a frame
and wanna ask me questions bout how i got your mother so tame
What the hell dawg what u meen u want a fight?
you still get your mum to tuck u in and check u got your nite light
Come on u little bitch u still belive in saint nick
u always write him letters wishing 4 a strap on dick
give you-a-kick, killa-u-quick
just the thought of u is making me-a-sick
u think your rap is dope and think u can internally bruize me
just you wait till im 18 when i get my-self an U Z I
wat the fuk u say you hate people acting black
well hell i am black u got a problem wif dat
why dont u tell my black ass while you give it a kiss
but i bet your lips really smell like piss
why dont u stop by the hospital and say hello to my son
and your brother thats right i fuked your mother
she gave up fightin back real quick
but i think she wanted a big black dick
your name is your height and people get frights
cause your a bulimic midget wearing tights
i bet u spend alot of lonely nights
i ate your mummaz pussy with some rice
god damn bitch she was so nice
and only cost $200 for the night
you say your gonna get a UZI wen ya 18
well wen im 18 i'll get a BlackGrenade
and u blast you so bad you wont be saved by 1st aid!
Yea shot bro that not bad i mine aint bad either
UPPIN 4 VOTES!
yeah we got good shit but we need some votes please!!
I reakon we should do an open mic together?
wanna
Shorty: bad opening, nothing interesting, same old "fuck ur mum"/"ur a kid"/"get a dick" shit, bad ending, and its uzi, not U Z I :nono:
BlackGrenade: below average opening, more "i fuck'd ur mum" stuff, senseless stuff, bad ending, "ate your mum's pussy with rice"??? ladies and gentlemen, I present to you Bizarre II :nono:
Both of you need to get some more ideas, read some of the tutorials available. Honestly, in my oppinion, this battle doesnt even deserve to be voted on. Both of you were awful. Both of you can do better.
uppin the thread and we need votes please so if u can vote and u visit this thread please vote!
Dis was a week battle....
BlackGrenade ur verse was kinda week and ur punches neva realy hit....there was no flow or structure....no personals....please evaluate,...
Shorty ur verse was ok....needs work tho...ur punches were ok but some were week.....u had on flow and ur structure was pretty elementry..no personalss...ppl personals win battles ok SO use them......overall ShortY won purly coz his punches hit and he had some structure....keep it up both of u
v/shortY...
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-ILLunatic
uppin dis thread need some votes please! and no sheep votes you no just following other peoples votes! Peace
Lyrical MC obviously didnt read the battles at all... they both sucked but shorty sucked more.... most of the lines were just "blah blah i'll kill you", but at least BlackGrenade had one punch (the mother comment), one personal (playing shorties name) and self-glorified his own name one the last two lines... weren't very good but at least he actually had punches....
All shorty did was threaten him with guns and insult him for being black... and judging by his hyphens towards the end of the verse, i think he thought he was doing multies.... sorry, but they werent multies at all...
The only thing shorty did better was flow... some of BlackGrenades lines were stretched and didnt flow as well as they could have....
Overall, you should both fix up your styles, and start using some better punches and lyrics... try reading some books, especially the dictionary... broaden your mind and try writing about everything around you... hope my comments helped... peace
Vote = BlackGrenade
honestly i thought you both were equal..
But im'a give it to BLACKGRENADE..the lines bout you beein BLACK is Funny..
on game..
your ryme schmes were a lil different but i thought shorty hadda better one..
the vocab goes to shorty too, but the fact of Punches winning a battle..
grenade got it..it made me laugh..pretty bad.."your mom wants a Big Black dick"..
^^^^^^^LoLoLoLoLoLoLoLoLOlOlOol.....anyway..return an honest vote...PLEEEEEEEZ in my battles...
vote-Black
PLEASE DROPPA VOTE ON MY BATTLES. THEYRE GETTING MAD SLEPT ON.
me VS lyrical-03
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113705
me VS oliverclohsoff
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113661
UppIn 4 VoteS tHis iS geTTinG sLept On
Uppin!!!! I Can Only Do This 1 Time A Day So Please Vote We Need Some Votes On This.......
shorty:your opener was obvious and simple, the punch barely tapped him. your structure was ayite. you need to build your vocabulary, cause name,lame, frame, tame....just doesn't cut it, your should crack a dictionary. you tried to use a multiple but it was played and obvious, I saw it coming before I even got to it, you need to sit back and think for a second, and use some creativity. you didn't have any wordplay, but then again, nobody ever seems to, so fuck that, your closer was I'm sorry to say this..awful..gun punches are really amature.....
black grenade:you had a sad opener as well, your vocabulary is very small, build on that. your punches were few and far between, plus plain, this battle wasn't any fucn to read..your structure was good though, it flowed decent enough so I was stutter stepping in my head...you had no multiples or wordplay..your closer was accually the best thing out of your whole verse, it was structured well, the sylables matched up, and the punch hit pretty hard........
you both need to practice a lot harder, if you plan on winning any battles..
since I have to vote.........I gotta go with black grenade...
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now you know what to do...vote on these.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114089
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112366
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113218
Still upping this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
vote Shorty
give you-a-kick, killa-u-quick
just the thought of u is making me-a-sick
best line in the whole thread
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-ILLunatic
You didn't even vote bro
Upping 4 Votes People!!!
come on people VOTE!!!
UPPING!!!! NEED VOTES
UPPIN this 4 the last time we really need votes!
come on people u need those points
Yeah Both Of Yall Were Equally Wack As Fuck....
So Wack I Dont Know Whos Shit Smelt Worse
wack like your signature i reakon now that is wack as
upping this
UPPIN (3rd time) Need votes please !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ehh fuck this.. both ehh elevate.. shorty u noshowed on our battle what a loser.. well who cares i gotta get a mod to close that anyways
Undead.. blah ive seen you drop better in our battle but not much better your punches hmmm.. what punches.. didnt feel any.. niether did shorty.. but overall you did have the better verse..
Shorty.. Whack.. ohhh yeah ur whack.. wait u should elevate throw a PUNCH!!!!!! jeez
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uppin 4th time!! neeed votesss!! please people!
This is the last time i can up this so please if u visit this thread vote!!
alright this battle was below average....
undead- you had a really weak opener and a bad closer...you had some average shit so thats why im givin you the vote
shorty-your shit was weak as hell...i dont know what the fuck to tell you but go get some help from somebody and learn the fuck how to battle man...but i mean atleast you tryin but you really gotta elevate your shit
vote-undead/black
but yeah put up an honest vote for the shit in my sig and this one...i will return an honest vote on your battle....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...41#post1235441
this was a stupid battle but if i could vote id probably vote Blackgrenade/Undead!
lets review
metaphores:n/a
punchlines:Black
structure:Black
flavor:n/a
overall:Black
bestline:n/a
v/Black Grenade
u didnt even vote man u need 100 posts before ur vote can count and u have to vote up the top not just say it.
Weak battle, but...
shortY: You can come a lot stronger. Your verse was basically not creative and was really weak. You had punches, but they didn't grab me. ASame old, same old, but even lower than before. Keep elevatin'.
UNDEAD: You can come a lot stronger, too. Your's wasn't creative either, but it was slightly better than shortY's verse. I wasn't feelin' the punches or personals. Decent wordplay. Keep elevatin'.
Vote: UNDEAD
*Why did you put your alias in the voting poll, UNDEAD? Anyway, keep elevatin'.*
Vote on my battles ya'll. I'll return the favor.
god that was my old name then i changed to undead i use to be blackgrenade so please drop ya vot on the poll
I see. Good luck in ur battle.
Blackgrenade what the fuck man u just gotta change your name!
im sick a people like u acting black its just getting kinda lame
^^lame is.... how can i put it... lame
After you hear the rest of this u might want my picture in a frame
and wanna ask me questions bout how i got your mother so tame
^^keep mom jokes on the schoolyard... attack him personally
What the hell dawg what u meen u want a fight?
you still get your mum to tuck u in and check u got your nite light
^^not really a punch
Come on u little bitch u still belive in saint nick
u always write him letters wishing 4 a strap on dick
give you-a-kick, killa-u-quick
just the thought of u is making me-a-sick
^^just the thought of these for lines is making me sick
u think your rap is dope and think u can internally bruize me
just you wait till im 18 when i get my-self an U Z I
^^terrible closer... you practically dissed yourself
^^^weak flow... played lines... no punches let alone personals... minor points for some multis...
wat the fuk u say you hate people acting black
well hell i am black u got a problem wif dat
^^meh could have been much better
why dont u tell my black ass while you give it a kiss
but i bet your lips really smell like piss
^^wtf?! not a good punch at all... not sure if it even punches
why dont u stop by the hospital and say hello to my son
and your brother thats right i fuked your mother
^^umm... the rhyme was 'mom'
she gave up fightin back real quick
but i think she wanted a big black dick
^^filler...
your name is your height and people get frights
cause your a bulimic midget wearing tights
i bet u spend alot of lonely nights
i ate your mummaz pussy with some rice
^^fuck this terrible random bull...you need to setup and ... punch kid punch...
god damn bitch she was so nice
and only cost $200 for the night
you say your gonna get a UZI wen ya 18
well wen im 18 i'll get a BlackGrenade
and u blast you so bad you wont be saved by 1st aid!
^^your closer was as bad as his... worse considering you fed off his verse...
^^^pretty much the same notes as the first.. complexity, structure vocab... you get minor points for slightly better punches...
Both of these were weak verses... you should keep workin and read some other battles ...
vote = undead
plz return the favour with an honest vote on the link in sig