SplitSouL versus PROOF

10 lines i guess
45 minute deadline after checkin
ill check in when u drop
no crew votes swaying or d/r

Hey, i can set up a battle, weird

checking in................................................ .

im not sure but i may have to post tomorrow, u got 2 get up at 5:30 tomorrow for baseball, but ill try and post tonight

dont feed off my shit, thats gay

This cat got a weak mind, this shit must be confusin'
call him slim, cause he keeps losin himself in my music
I don't need to prove it, your record shows that your whack
but claiming in bitch-slapped that you don't care about that

weak ass bitch, I bet you spend hours looking for a punch
or ya just wait for the one you get losing your money for lunch
its just a hunch, but we all can tell your pretty new to this shit
its evident because ya styles dryer then a senior citizens clitoris

Followin me through the threads, constant begging me for a battle
kid, you aint even good at dickryding, it seems your forgot to straddle...

merked....

shit, i just saw this, i gotta post tomorrow, ill check in then 2

you just saw this? you created this fool... why couldn't you have said that before the battle, would have made for a great punchline...

lmao....just saw this...lmao!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thats fuckin great

hey dumbass, i meant i just saw ur post, i just got back from baseball and ill post tonight after school, and no i wont feed off of your shit even though that wasnt a rule so i guess were even

heres my check in, ill post on 45 minutes or sooner

why did u change ur name, o well

i aint gon go easy on you cause we from the same location
until this bitch gets skill, he should be on battle probation
losin to a newb aint gon look good on ur record
my lyrics are to complicated for u, u got confused with checkers
hes got like 700 posts and he still doesnt know what to do
why dont you take a day of and find a substitute
i cant even imagine why i battled this bitch split
i'll ruin his reputution, make him wanna get his wrists slit
this guy in all the newb bitch slapped, lookin for a win
after this im gonna be the only nigga uppin

merked....

alrighty, lets get some votes! uppin numero uno.... will return favors

Split
This cat got a weak mind, this shit must be confusin'
call him slim, cause he keeps losin himself in my music
metiphore = 4
I don't need to prove it, your record shows that your whack
but claiming in bitch-slapped that you don't care about that
personal,personal = 4
weak ass bitch, I bet you spend hours looking for a punch
or ya just wait for the one you get losing your money for lunch
metiphore = 3
its just a hunch, but we all can tell your pretty new to this shit
its evident because ya styles dryer then a senior citizens clitoris
-flo,metiphore = 3
Followin me through the threads, constant begging me for a battle
kid, you aint even good at dickryding, it seems your forgot to straddle...
personal,personal,wordplay = 4

Not good.Very below average, I think I voted on you before and I thought you were better than this. For startes you had no punches at all, all u had all verse was metiphores and personals. Try an say like your gonna do summin to him or that u did. Very below average here.
Overall = 18
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PROOF
i aint gon go easy on you cause we from the same location
until this bitch gets skill, he should be on battle probation
personal = 3
losin to a newb aint gon look good on ur record
my lyrics are to complicated for u, u got confused with checkers
-self punch,-irrelevent,-flo = 0
hes got like 700 posts and he still doesnt know what to do
why dont you take a day of and find a substitute
personal,punch,metiphore = 6
i cant even imagine why i battled this bitch split
i'll ruin his reputution, make him wanna get his wrists slit
-filler,-wrong,metiphore = 0
this guy in all the newb bitch slapped, lookin for a win
after this im gonna be the only nigga uppin
personal,-played,metiphore = 1

Didn't think you could lose after I read Split's verse, but yours was worste. You had one good line tho, so there is some sort of talent hiding in there.
You need to work on being original, On maybe half the battles I have veiwed I've seen the "your a vet battling a newby" line. You insult your self and use a played line at the same time. Work on Witt and Creativity.
Overall = 10
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Vote = Split

i am a newb, if saying the truth is a self punch, even though its not bad, its fucked up.
ur a newb to this site too, or at least ur name, but whatever

uppin (1)

upp numer tres, drop a vote, and i will be sure to return the favor.

proof, aight verse, could of been stronger, you focused
to much on your metas though, and not enough on your
punches, but you still had some decent lines in their, like,
your opener was aight, but keep elevating.

split, your verse was decent, just like proof you focused to
much on 1 thing, except it was personals not metas, really
i only saw like 1 or 2 punches in their, and they were weak,
you definatley have to work on youor structure dawg, honestly
i dont get it, cause you should be way more advanced than proof,
in my opinion, but keep elevating, peace.

my vote: proof

this guy needs to get dq'd, please do that favor, if you agree with me.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113726

aight, you people need to poll vote lol, but w/e, and i dunno what your talkin about my structure, but w/e

PROOF is DQed for having too many battles open at once.