10 Lines
Due Asap, Deadline Midnight Tomorrow
No Hate
Dr
Crew
Feeding
Biting
All That Shit
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10 Lines
Due Asap, Deadline Midnight Tomorrow
No Hate
Dr
Crew
Feeding
Biting
All That Shit
:)............................. im in
when are u gonna spit??????????? so i can do the same
Im Keying, When Im Done, I'll Post.................
Eats Tacos W/ Lots Of Salsa
fucka testament cuz i break gods rules with hellish verses/
he's from dopeness but but his crew derives straight from the circus/(wow)*
Stomach Bubbly So Takes Off Pants
im heating up you not on my level not even able to cause Arson/(his sig)
claims he is Da Elite but ur career's over before it even started/(chea!)
your like a blown out speaker, the listeners cant stand your words/
not only are u the shit, but you look like the whole fuckin turd/(oh my!)
not dope is your location but my station is set on killin emcees/
u got no balls to battle me like u got mad raisin disease/
Super Death Bar Taking A Dump On Your Face
cant get the best of this, im relentless ill without medicine/
No 'w' in your name so make this ya last 'will' and 'testament'/(hotness death killer)!
i forgot to edit...the second line is cuz his crew is called insane joker lyricists
Accepting My Callout? Stupid, Saw My Verse And Quacked...
Im Throwin Hard Punches,U Getin Demolished By The Impact!
Wanting Me To Spit 1st? Shit Son, You Really Want A Beating??
Im Delievering Hard Hits Personally, Like Two Boxers Competing...
Expecting To Get Votes With That Garbage? Lawyer Get Serious...
Kid Named Lawyer, But Yet, He Still Aint Able To Be Imperious...
Like Muhammad Ali, Im Knocking You, Uh-Oh, Now Hes Delirious...
Wishing You Werent Alive, Cuz My Verse And I Are Deleterious...
Im Pushing This Kid, Thinking You Dope Cuz Your Record Is 1-0?
Nope, Cuz He's 1-1 Soon, I Merked This Kid, Like.............Whoa!..
ok heres how i saw this
lawyer = good flow and nice structure, punches were also good and ya had some personals. vocab was ok.
ill = flow was even better and also was the structure. punches a lil weaker than lawyer but your personas were better. vocab was also ok.
breakdown
flow = ill
struc = ill
punches = lawyer
perso=ill
vocab = tie
vote = ill < but only just good battle both.
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOUR ON THE BATTLE UNDER MY SIG THANKS.
ok votes.............but that is no key.......lol...took u 30 minutes..mine was 10...nice
OK THIS IS HOW ITS GOIN DOWN LAWYER
PUNCHES:6/1O ...NOT BAD
STRUCTURE:6/10...NEEDS ALITTLE WORK BUT PRETTY GOOD
FLOW:5/10......WASN'T FELLING THE FLOW MUCH
PERSONALS:8/10....WOW DONT CHANGE NOTHING YOU HAD SOME PRETTY GOOD STUFF FROM WHAT I SAW
TOTAL SCORE:25/40
WORK ON THE FLOW AND STRUCTURE A LITTLE..OTHER WISE NOT BAD
ILL TESTAMENT
PUNCHES:7.5/10...U HAD SOME NICE PUNCHES
STRUCTURE:7/10.... NOT BAD
FLOW:7.5/10....U HAD A NICE FLOW
PERSONALS:6/10....NOT BAD,BUT LAWYER HAD SOME BETTER PERSONALS
TOTAL SCORE:28/40
THIS WAS A NICE BATTLES I WAS FEELIN BOTH MC'S BUT WITH A LTTLE BETTER VERSE ALL AROUND EXEPT WITH PERSONALS GOES TO ILL TESTAMENT
VOTE:ILL TESTAMENT
NO BEEF BUT SINCE I TOOK THE TIME TO VOTE ON THIS BATTLE CAN YALL VOTE ON THIS...THANX
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112614
Dont Sway.. I'll Hit Those Battles UP After This One Is over, UpppppppppppinQuote:
Originally Posted by Lawyer
v/ - Ill Testament
why vote ill? Stronger punches...he basically takes this in every category except for the closer...that's where Lawyer beats you.
Testament for punchlines and personals. Why? Much better and more witty...comon on Laywer...son, never use da word "turd". It's so childish and doesn't sound hard at all. Flow also goes to testament...very good syllable count der.
No need to break down any further.
Return the favour and drop honest votes on my battles plz.
uppin............................................. .........
Ill- Nice Verse , Good Structure, Nice Flow With Good Punches, Work On Personals... They Were Weaker Compared To Lawyers Ones
Lawyer- Aight Verse Elevate Structure Wus Not Good,Had Ok punches And ok Flow . Aight Personals Eventhough Both Were Kinda Played...Make Ur Lines Shorter..cuz They Kinda Stretched.
Flow- Ill
Punches- Ill
Structure- Ill
Vocab- Both
Personal- Lawyer
Overall- Ill
Enjoyed- None The Verses were BAsic...Nothin ExtraOrd Na'mean
Goodluck.
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. read strobes voting rule. - Feeble Minded
Uppin............................................. ...............
lol dis was sum ill ass battle but i'd say lawyer takes dis one cuz he had comedy in his battle and his punches were harder thrown....but ill only lost by a lil in my eyes he had sum good lines like his closer but dat was only one line compared to lawyers whole verse..sorry cant poll
peep links in my sig
Accepting My Callout? Stupid, Saw My Verse And Quacked...
Im Throwin Hard Punches,U Getin Demolished By The Impact!
pretty good
Wanting Me To Spit 1st? Shit Son, You Really Want A Beating??
Im Delievering Hard Hits Personally, Like Two Boxers Competing...
so so punch...
Expecting To Get Votes With That Garbage? Lawyer Get Serious...
Kid Named Lawyer, But Yet, He Still Aint Able To Be Imperious...
second line....i have no clue
Like Muhammad Ali, Im Knocking You, Uh-Oh, Now Hes Delirious...
Wishing You Werent Alive, Cuz My Verse And I Are Deleterious...
the first parts aight
Im Pushing This Kid, Thinking You Dope Cuz Your Record Is 1-0?
Nope, Cuz He's 1-1 Soon, I Merked This Kid, Like.............Whoa!..
lmao so so punch
fucka testament cuz i break gods rules with hellish verses/
he's from dopeness but but his crew derives straight from the circus/(wow)*
aint feelin it
Stomach Bubbly So Takes Off Pants
dont do that..makes verse wack
im heating up you not on my level not even able to cause Arson/(his sig)
claims he is Da Elite but ur career's over before it even started/(chea!)
so so nothing special
your like a blown out speaker, the listeners cant stand your words/
not only are u the shit, but you look like the whole fuckin turd/(oh my!)
blah nothing...not hard
not dope is your location but my station is set on killin emcees/
u got no balls to battle me like u got mad raisin disease/
.....................no
Super Death Bar Taking A Dump On Your Face
cant get the best of this, im relentless ill without medicine/
No 'w' in your name so make this ya last 'will' and 'testament'/
second part is tight
overall i think ill took it...peep links in my sig
Uppin ONe MOre Vote Please Jus Vote Lazy Kids........
fucka testament cuz i break gods rules with hellish verses/
he's from dopeness but but his crew derives straight from the circus/(wow)*
^^not a bad opener...
Stomach Bubbly So Takes Off Pants
im heating up you not on my level not even able to cause Arson/(his sig)
claims he is Da Elite but ur career's over before it even started/(chea!)
^^nice personal on the crew..but nothin great
your like a blown out speaker, the listeners cant stand your words/
not only are u the shit, but you look like the whole fuckin turd/(oh my!)
^not feelin it...^^..um..YA
not dope is your location but my station is set on killin emcees/
u got no balls to battle me like u got mad raisin disease/
^^punch was there..but..not great^^
Super Death Bar Taking A Dump On Your Face
cant get the best of this, im relentless ill without medicine/
No 'w' in your name so make this ya last 'will' and 'testament'/(hotness death killer)!
^^nice finisher...if u would write everything lil more like this..ud get more votes!
Accepting My Callout? Stupid, Saw My Verse And Quacked...
Im Throwin Hard Punches,U Getin Demolished By The Impact!
~nice flow..ok punch~
Wanting Me To Spit 1st? Shit Son, You Really Want A Beating??
Im Delievering Hard Hits Personally, Like Two Boxers Competing...
^^FILLER^^not a great punch
Expecting To Get Votes With That Garbage? Lawyer Get Serious...
Kid Named Lawyer, But Yet, He Still Aint Able To Be Imperious...
^^pretty ok personal...attempted
Like Muhammad Ali, Im Knocking You, Uh-Oh, Now Hes Delirious...
Wishing You Werent Alive, Cuz My Verse And I Are Deleterious...
nice vocab...ok punch
Im Pushing This Kid, Thinking You Dope Cuz Your Record Is 1-0?
Nope, Cuz He's 1-1 Soon, I Merked This Kid, Like.............Whoa!..
Agh...not a strong finisher..not impressed
FLOW...ILL
punches..ILL
VOCAB...ILL
wordplay..tie
structure..tie
multies...n2many..but agh...Lawyer
originality...tie
overall...ILL TEST
^^ILL..just had the better...more well written piece....Lawyer had an average..spit good but nothin up 2 ILLs verse
GOOD BATTLE U 2..
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ILL