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Typical newb talkin mad shit to a vet. Pussied out ona pinkslips battle.
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10 lines
Typical newb talkin mad shit to a vet. Pussied out ona pinkslips battle.
Go whenever your ready herb
check in
checkin' in...... prepare to be rapified!
This mad hatter foo thinks he is gonna beat me down
Sad thing is, he's gonna go home with a frown
I'm leery of lyric after he pussed out on a pink slip
I guess he was afraid he'd be forever limp dicked
He says he's the vet,
maybe, but I think he's all wet
this pre cum chumb better study up,
or his ego is gonna deflate just like his jockie cup
I'm gonna injure his pride
Lyric, you're gonna wish you'd died!
Freeza burn cause the shit you spits whack like your lines
If you spit like this Do I even need to fuckin try?
I asked for a pinkslip battle, but your ass pussied out
This was your answer Hehe whos the lil bitch now?
Fuckin bitch, Dun ever think you can fuck with me at all
My personals are low blows, but you dun have any balls
Cause I know ya a girl, form ya last battle, it was whack
My first line was enough to merk your whole fuckin act
The fuck you think you are, Jus anutha wannabe white bitch
Dun think that we're friends, cause like diareah your whack shit
This mad hatter foo thinks he is gonna beat me down
Sad thing is, he's gonna go home with a frown
^^weak opener...should be strong to start it off
I'm leery of lyric after he pussed out on a pink slip
I guess he was afraid he'd be forever limp dicked
^^abit played, put not bad personal
He says he's the vet,
maybe, but I think he's all wet
^^played, cos i used something similar before..lol..bad structure
this pre cum chumb better study up,
or his ego is gonna deflate just like his jockie cup
^^quite weak
I'm gonna injure his pride
Lyric, you're gonna wish you'd died!
^^weak, and too short... bad closer
Freeza burn cause the shit you spits whack like your lines
If you spit like this Do I even need to fuckin try?
^^ok personal
I asked for a pinkslip battle, but your ass pussied out
This was your answer Hehe whos the lil bitch now?
^^who dropped out??... but it was another ok personal, bit weak for a punch
Fuckin bitch, Dun ever think you can fuck with me at all
My personals are low blows, but you dun have any balls
^^funny punch... not bad
Cause I know ya a girl, form ya last battle, it was whack
My first line was enough to merk your whole fuckin act
^^a bit played, but not a bad punch
The fuck you think you are, Jus anutha wannabe white bitch
Dun think that we're friends, cause like diareah your whack shit
^^again quite funny... average closer
all in all lyric's verse was harder hittin and the flow and structure made it an easier,,, althought mainly its the punches i vote on...so...vote=lyric
Lyric won this battle hands down.....
Flow, punches, structure...everything
was much better by the man called Lyric
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This mad hatter foo thinks he is gonna beat me down
Sad thing is, he's gonna go home with a frown
I'm leery of lyric after he pussed out on a pink slip
I guess he was afraid he'd be forever limp dicked
He says he's the vet,
maybe, but I think he's all wet
this pre cum chumb better study up,
or his ego is gonna deflate just like his jockie cup
I'm gonna injure his pride
Lyric, you're gonna wish you'd died!
Freezapop
Flow- He flowed decent but the structure was messed up The last two
lines really fell off.
Punches/Personals- The few punches he had were played and weak. Used
a couple of personals, but they were also weak.
vocab-nothing special, basic.
creativity- Freeza didnt get very creative. Needs to dig deeper. Ideas were
played out
Freeza burn cause the shit you spits whack like your lines
If you spit like this Do I even need to fuckin try?
I asked for a pinkslip battle, but your ass pussied out
This was your answer Hehe whos the lil bitch now?
Fuckin bitch, Dun ever think you can fuck with me at all
My personals are low blows, but you dun have any balls
Cause I know ya a girl, form ya last battle, it was whack
My first line was enough to merk your whole fuckin act
The fuck you think you are, Jus anutha wannabe white bitch
Dun think that we're friends, cause like diareah your whack shit
Lyric
Flow- good flow and structure, carried well
Punches/Personals- good personals and decent punches. Liked the low-blows
line, and the Freeza's last battle line.
Vocab- nothing that special, but it worked because of the flow
creativity- not a bad job here. Punches were direct and the personals were
good.
I'd have to say that this battle was decided by
punches/ personals. Lyric's were more creative
and hit alot harder. Freeza' came too weak with
his punches/personals. He should also work on
his structure and creativity. I cant officially vote
(not enough posts) but my vote would go to: Lyric
Vote on these fukn' battles!
apathy vs. Gravity
apathy vs, jamie
Thanks for the feedback....uppin #1
Uppin #2! please drop a vote in this battle!!!
yo lyric take dis...simple reason he waz beta by far...keep it up both of u's
v/lyric
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uppin 1
uppin 2.. please drop an honest vote here
I need not say much lyric got em
his punched and lyrics were obvoiusly better in this battle
*yo check my battle
timeless vs zikio version 2
freeza pop - structure was good.......flow was ok........vocab was pretty basic........no good multis.......no metas.......some of the punches were decent.......no good personals.......
lyric - structure was good......flow was on target......vocab was nice.......pretty good multis.......ok metas........most of ya punches hit hard........good personals......
breakdown -
structure-tie
flow-lyric
vocab-lyric
multis-lyric
metas-lyric
punches-lyric
personals-lyric
creativity-lyric
conclusion - this was a pretty one sided battle......lyric beats him in every category except structure so he gets my vote......
VOTE - LYRIC
up 3. Please explain votes..Drop a link and it will be hit
lyris takes dis hands down.....he had some nice punches but some were a bit played...work on dat...didnt have many peronals...flow was prety elmentry but was beta than freeza pop who had no flow at all....structure was basic...work on it ok...
Freeza pop....had some punches but didnt realy hit....no flow...v/lyric
uppin4
Last uppin, please drop an honest vote here
This Was An Easy Battle For Lyric
Freeze Pop = Flow Was Ok But Even A 5 Year Old Could Of Dun That, Punches Were Crap And Vocab Was Lackin.
Lyric = Flow Was Good And Structure Was Also, Punches Hit Hard For The Most Part, And Vocab Was Good.
No Need For Break Down Lyric Takes It In Every Catogery.
Vote = Lyric
Can Ya Return The Favour And Vote On The Battle Under My Sig Called Timeless Vs T-west.thanks
nice battle yall lyric takes it tho
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lyric had harder hitting punches,good structure had a nice flow i quite liked....personals were ill and a gd use of multis.......
freeza pop u struggled a bit in my opinion as ur verse was kinda basic and i thought u cud of worded it betta....u had punches but they didnt hit hard like lyric and ya personals they were shit and for fuck sake fix up ya damn structure.....lyrics takes this easy as he had the better verse and ya shit man ya need 2 elevate
Freeza pop you gotta work on making your lines way longer you would have one really shot line then one average sized line.... just dosnet work it completly messes up your flow so Lyric took Flow. Lyrics Puches landed way harder, Freeza most of your punches didint even land and the ones that did where weak. Wordplay hands down goes to Lyric so much more creative and original.
Multies Freeza you didint rilly have any so this one also goes to lyric.
Overall this one hands down goes to Lyric