10 lines
no bitin/feedin
no crew
no dr
good luck
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10 lines
no bitin/feedin
no crew
no dr
good luck
2 glocks up 2 MC's down
Illconceptz run cause Daffer22 is here now
Don't be scared cuz I'm just the new nigga in town
I'm here to kick your ass out the frame,straight perfection never lame
You bitch ass motherfuckers are just all the same, never r gonna get any fame
I leave you in pain, you act like a bitch going insane
Illconceptz is about to start cryin, don't say i'm lying
Or else you gonna be flying, why did you sign in?
You thought to defeat the one and only daffer22
Think again bitch and figure all this thru....
Ill have daffer send his name to walt disnep to be daffey's cousin,1
Rip this little kid like his fucking mother hadda crappy husband,2
Haha thats right 'son', and now Im going to fuckin be "takin you to school",3
With playdo you couldnt 'make' a friend if they had mistaken you fa cool,4
Im merkin this kid cause hes got wackness lurkin in his foolish head,5
Hows he gonna have back up when his whole fuckin crew-is-DED, (dead)6
Like a 'grand slam' have this kid runnin 'home' with his three bizarre members,7
Cause Im attackin ya with a 'mixture of flows' like professional bar tenders,8
You just got 'burned' so badly it leaves you witta mental scar,9
I just borrowed you for a 'score' like I hadda rental car,10
10 -----> score referring to bangin a chick. get it?
vote ppl gud luck illconceptz
a good battle but illconceptz gets my vote, purely because his flowed better and had sum personals.
keep at it both of you.
vote ill conceptz
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illconceptz keep on battlin' cuz u had betta personals and structure was good
Come on you didn't gave any information, this is an invalid vote
flow=IC
punches=IC
structure=tie
personals=IC
wordplay=IC
my vote IC
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Token
just read the vote rules,ok
uping votes(1)thx
daffer
you elevated a little bit since i last saw one of your battles!!
but really your verse didn't contain any real punches, or wordplay, or vocab, or anything really, just keep rappin, battlin an elevatin, you can only get better.
illconceptz
your verse was nothing speaicl but you won this one, you had punches which were directed towards him, attemts at wordpla, an a good enouigh battle verse to win.
vote- illconcpetz.
harder punches against a verse which had barely one!!
aight cool thx for the advice.......
damn man i got to drop an honest vote here
daffer... you got potential.. but what you need to do is work on your wittiness and punchlines.. your verse had alot of weak wordplay.. i didnt really see any creative punchlines in your verse..i give your verse a 3.5/10
illconceptz- you had alot of nice punchlines and mulites in your verse.. you came really creative.. i mean this battle was one sided.. i felt like you used better wordplay and had better disses than daffer in this battle
vote - ill conceptz
uppping votes(2)
THIS WAS A ARIGHT BATTLE BUT DAFFER NEED TO ELEVATE A LIL BIT.
ILL TOOK IT IN PUNCHES, PERSONALS, FLO AND ALL THAT
VOTE: ILL
HIT THIS UP:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111056
Cause Im attackin ya with a 'mixture of flows' like professional bar tenders
one good line from ill>>>both of u had played out rymes and made your bars too long on every rhyme. but since that one line from ill was the only thing i like outta the two battle he gets my vote
upping votesss(3) PS: Need to explain votes man....
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upping (5)Come on ppl VOTE
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yah IllConceptz killed it in this rhyme everything went together perfect
Thats not how you vote man. Need a reason why you voted me and why you didnt vote for the other guy... If you could poll it wouldnt count because thats a crappy vote.
Sorry This Aint A Break Down Of The Battle But Its Just To Stright Forward.
Daffer = Seriosly Need To Evevate, Week Verse, Not Really Any Good Punches.
Illconceptz = Nice. You Had Flow Down Ok But It Woz A Bit Patchy In Some Parts. Punches Were Nicely Done And Vocab Woz Tight.
Vote = Illconceptz
More votes plz.............................................
votes, plz............................................
both of these verses... were really played i thought... you guys hav a long way to go... and i think you can do it...
daf - just work on the internal/multi scheme making sure the syllables don't get out of hand and that the words don't lose meaning... then just freshen da punches with some more personal diss
ill - same ish basically, it's hard for me to find much different about what you did and what he did... maybe that's something you should think about when you sit and write...how am i gonna make this standout?
overall i think daff gets a nod just cuz i felt his flow was little more natural albeit played
aight, need more votes, leave links, return the favour
daffer - structure was ok........flow fell off a lil.......vocab was aight........not to many multis........some of the wordplay was ok.........i liked one or two punches, the rest werent that good........ok personals......
illconceptz - structrue was good......flow fell off.......vocab was basic.......multis were rare.......poor attempt at wordplay........some of the punches were ok.........that attempt at personals sucked ass, hangin out wit daffey??.....what the hell......
breakdown -
structure - ill
flow - tie
vocab - ill
multis - tie
wordplay - daffer
punches - daffer
personals - tie
conclusion - daffer takes this in wordplay and punches, so he gets my vote......
VOTE - DAFFER
aight thx man......................................
Vote ill concepts..D open your lines up...try and use more words to explain things...the short lines are an easy flow...but not much creativeness and it makes it hard to create a decent punch.
Ill you had a good verse harder punches and didn't try and rep yourself in your first bar... best line of the battle was also from ill
Ill have daffer send his name to walt disnep to be daffey's cousin,1
Rip this little kid like his fucking mother hadda crappy husband
played....but i thought best line....
vote ill