Its all setup , I'll have my lines in twenty, probably less.
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Its all setup , I'll have my lines in twenty, probably less.
Wit' Gravity for a name you'd think dis' cat was "down", but check this...
This clown spits so much hot air he has to wear anvil for a necklace!
I'm a sexist textist, so I don't like to flow against bitches...
I'm convinced that i've seen better structure on styrofoam bridges!
Are you religious? Well if not you will be after you read this...
The shit you jot is so played, that you coudn't be saved by Jesus!
Please just, leave this forum because you can't afford to stay...
Why don't you save your self the trouble and throw your key board away!
Say, you should practice some breath control,youve' got loose lips...
Couldnt keep apathy out ya' mouth if da script came eqipped wit toothpicks!
You should stick to your job of dickriding or take a permanent vacation...
Yes its affirmative, you and your moms share the same occupation!
yo dude sory this took so long but yo check this out
ya seeking for 'attention' looking for a 'metion' i should av let ya have abit more 'preparation' or even give ya abit of the doctors 'medication' ya see im doin all this for a good 'cause' to get a crews 'reputation' n now i'll 'pause'.......... n rap again wiyhout 'hesitation' me n my crew are as complex as a 'hurricane' causing destruction 'strain' n 'pain' for anything that comes in our way ya see ur ma enemy n i fuck up any 'enemy' thats stands right in front of 'me' ur lyrics are too 'vague' im so convinced im sure ya have got 'lyrical plague' u say ur a 'sexist' 'texist' bt ur nufin but a mother fuckin 'rapist' yo u should a stepped up ur pace 'abit' coz ur just simply too 'shit' this isnt a game or a race u should a realised that by 'now' its jus like overgrazing ya letting animals walk all over ya like ur mum shes a 'cow' anyhow i'll take a bow' n leave ya in peace right 'now'
No problem, but maybe I should have mentioned that feeding is for herbs
( u say ur a 'sexist' 'texist' ) Just some advice for the next time you get merkd...
Uppin... Lets please get some votes in. Don't sleep on this. Even if you cant vote because you don't have enough posts, i would appreciate feedback/criticism. Thanks & Peace.
If i could vote i would put it on Apathy, he had good lyrics
well they was good for a pillock
Just a quick question for Jamie, what the fuck is pillock?
Don't get mad because I merkd you!
Punches: Apathy, all decent punches
Wordplay: Noth much from either, I don't think I saw any
Multis: Tie, both used an even amount of multis
Personals: Apathy, good personals, the down line, Gravity had none
Opener: Apathy
Closer: Apathy
Vote - Apathy
Sorry, 2nd part of the vote
'lyrical plague' u say ur a 'sexist' 'texist' bt ur nufin but a mother fuckin 'rapist' yo u should a stepped up ur pace 'abit' coz ur just simply too 'shit'
Gravity's best bar
Wit' Gravity for a name you'd think dis' cat was "down", but check this...
This clown spits so much hot air he has to wear anvil for a necklace!
Best bar from Apathy, pretty hot.
Apathy (Dope ass name)
uppin' #2 Lets get those votes in, shit. Don't sleep on this. Even if you can't officially vote because you dont have enough posts, i would still appriciate some criticism/feedback. Thanks
Uppin' #3 Lets get those votes in. Even if you dont have enough posts, leave some feedback,
uppin' for the last time, you mutherfuckers need to vote. I will glady return the feedback by voting on your shit. Peace
Just giving honest opinion:
Apathy's open:
It wasn't a personal, but it was a decent open,well structured,Quote:
Wit' Gravity for a name you'd think dis' cat was "down", but check this...
This clown spits so much hot air he has to wear anvil for a necklace!
basic multies,flowed nice
Gravity's open:
I think that's where it ended??Quote:
ya seeking for 'attention' looking for a 'metion' i should av let ya have abit more 'preparation' or even give ya abit of the doctors 'medication' ya see im doin all this for a good 'cause' to get a crews 'reputation' n now i'll 'pause'.......... n rap again wiyhout 'hesitation'
First structure, I can't really give a full opinion if I can't make (your) meaning of it
It was good wording decent vocab , just needs to be DEFINED START STOP
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xxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxxxxx
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No personal or punches
Elevate:
Apathy's Line 3, 4, 5, 6
Good structure, (they could be extended, but they are still defined!)Quote:
I'm a sexist textist, so I don't like to flow against bitches...
I'm convinced that i've seen better structure on styrofoam bridges!
Are you religious? Well if not you will be after you read this...
The shit you jot is so played, that you coudn't be saved by Jesus!
good wordplay and flow, (so many syllables made it sound better)
No punches or personal
(If Gravity he better get it in these next lines)
Damn dog I couldn't even read or put together a
HARMONIZED DEFINED LINE
STRUCTURE refer to the XXXX'S
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So even if I were to strain myself to make meaning of the rest of your verse,
that shit wouldn't slid in a 'real' battle and it prob won't slide here
I got to give it to Apathy
Just elevate Gravity
read some tutorials
Keep trying and bring it up
and that goes for you too Apathy
You got my vote, but if it were up against better punches etc
I dunno
Keep it moving!
JamesJr.
apathy nice verse good use of vocab and clever wordplay
gravity tried to use a bit of vocab but it didnt flow well it was just a bit basic
peep this and leave links
vs Timeless
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1166316
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Token
vote-apathy
peep this and leave links
vs Timeless
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=1166316
Opener - Apathy
Vocab - Gravity
Punches - Apathy
Flow - Gravity
Structure - Apathy
Closer - Apathy
Apathy takes this because he bad harder hittin punches. Also you could tell when his lines ended, with gravity I wasnt sure where it was begininn or where it was endin.
Vote - Apathy
Return tha favour please wit an honest vote.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112309
Pz.
Apathy had gravity all da way ya ready to battle rap me now?
Apathy merked with a real format...
Disses that were directed at his opponent.
He didn't feed.
He utilized some decent wordplay.
Gravity wrote a paragraph, mostly propping himself, threatening various peeps...
Then started directing disses about 3/4 of the way through his verse.
Too late.
That and he blatantly fed.
Weaker verse means he lost.
Peace
Winner: Apathy
Apathy =
Wit' Gravity for a name you'd think dis' cat was "down", but check this...
This clown spits so much hot air he has to wear anvil for a necklace!
ok opener, ok wordplay
I'm a sexist textist, so I don't like to flow against bitches...
I'm convinced that i've seen better structure on styrofoam bridges!
nice punch
Are you religious? Well if not you will be after you read this...
The shit you jot is so played, that you coudn't be saved by Jesus!
umm played
Please just, leave this forum because you can't afford to stay...
Why don't you save your self the trouble and throw your key board away!
its ok, wordplay didnt really work tho
Say, you should practice some breath control,youve' got loose lips...
Couldnt keep apathy out ya' mouth if da script came eqipped wit toothpicks!
blah
You should stick to your job of dickriding or take a permanent vacation...
Yes its affirmative, you and your moms share the same occupation!
ok finisher, i suppose
Gravity =
ya seeking for 'attention' looking for a 'metion' i should av let ya have abit more 'preparation' or even give ya abit of the doctors 'medication' ya see im
doin all this for a good 'cause' to get a crews 'reputation' n now i'll 'pause'.......... n rap again wiyhout 'hesitation' me n my crew are as
complex as a 'hurricane' causing destruction 'strain' n 'pain' for anything that comes in our way ya see ur ma enemy n i fuck up any 'enemy' thats stands
right in front of 'me' ur lyrics are too 'vague' im so convinced im sure ya have got 'lyrical plague' u say ur a 'sexist' 'texist' bt ur nufin but a mother
fuckin 'rapist' yo u should a stepped up ur pace 'abit' coz ur just simply too 'shit' this isnt a game or a race u should a realised that by 'now' its jus
like overgrazing ya letting animals walk all over ya like ur mum shes a 'cow' anyhow i'll take a bow' n leave ya in peace right 'now'
Couldnt break down that, just wernt feelin the style, you also had no punches.
ok this 1 goes to apathy, 1. because he had better punches, 2 better flow throughout the piece 3. btter structure and 4. more word play. no need for a break down apathy takes every catogery. Gravity ya need to work on ya flow and punches.
Vote = Apathy
Apathy/ Your flow was nice, gud rhymes, decent voc..........punchlines: your punches came thru hard with nice lines in there,nice work................I want to see more personals from you, I know you can do it, I saw it already........couple of multis in there.......structure was aight
Gravity/ your wordplay was weak, flow wasn't goin too gud..........your punches were played and they didn't came so hard as Apathy............where r your personals man, need to work on that.........structure was so-so.........elevate a little......
Overall vote: Apathy
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