I Bought Her Flowers Today

-I Bought Her Flowers Today-
Written By: ELEETE

[Chorus 2x]
Its like the flowers
I have a thorn in my side
Full of love an hate
I even bleed red when i cry
I cant reach my stems out to you
Its you ive learn to despise
Sittin alone in the dark
Im sittin wonderin why

Its Like flowers.........


I bought her flowers today..........
There wasnt really any special occasion
It wasnt our anniversary or any speacial arrangement
I just wanted her to see how i truly felt
Staring deeply into her eyes watching her heart melt
She was a sign of beauty, Nothing less than perfection
Makin sweet love, showing all types of affection
I knew after today, that we would be forever
Bound to each others love an always stay together

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[Chorus 2x]
Its like the flowers
I have a thorn in my side
Full of love an hate
I even bleed red when i cry
I cant reach my stems out to you
Its you ive learn to despise
Sittin alone in the dark
Im sittin wonderin why

Its Like flowers.........

I bought her flowers today........
There wasnt really any special occasion
It wasnt our anniversary or any special arrangement
Problems have been escalating into arguments lately
Cause i keep letting this jealousy bullshit overtake me
I think she hates me, Cause last night it got crazy
I beat the livin shit outta her in front of our baby
It sad but its true, I cant seem to control it with you
You drive me mad an then i cant pry my hands off you
See last night i was drunk, I know its not an excuse
Cause either way you look at, it still counts as abuse
Beaten an battered, she now lays ina hospital bed
I wish i wouldnt have done the things that i did
Hush girl rest up...Youll soon again be with me
I love you baby.....I hope you can forgive me


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[Chorus 2x]
Its like the flowers
I have a thorn in my side
Full of love an hate
I even bleed red when i cry
I cant reach my stems out to you
Its you ive learn to despise
Sittin alone in the dark
Im sittin wonderin why

Its Like flowers.........


I bought her flowers today..........
There wasnt really any special occasion
It wasnt our anniversary or any special arrangement
It it was the day of her funeral, she was finally dead
I wish i could take back all things i did an i said
Now im sittin here at the foot of my bed
Contemplating suicide pointing this gun at my head
"I never meant to hurt her!!! I never meant for this!!!"
I took a butcher knife an began to hack at my wrists
"Fuck.....Why did you have to leeeeeave!!!"
I stabbed myself in the stomach an started to bleed
God how did this happen...please tell me why!!!
My vision began to blurr as the tears covered my eyes
Now on the ground lying ina a puddle of blood
Barely breathing, flashbacks, reminiscing of us
Suddenly the child wakes, hes up screamin an crying
But i can no longer helpem "Baby cant you see that im dying?"
Choking on my own breath i glance at him an i say
"Baby im sorry, but daddy's gotta go away....."
"I pray you grow up to be happy an free...."
"Live a good life an have a great family..."
"Treat your wife as though she is your queen.."
"And dont ever try an grow up to be like Daddy..."
"I love you baby, now give daddy your hand"
I take an put the gun in my mouth.....BANG!!!!!

(*Child Crying*)


Its like the flowers
I have a thorn in my side
Full of love an hate
I even bleed red when i cry
I cant reach my stems out to you
Its you ive learn to despise
Sittin alone in the dark
Im sittin wonderin why

Its Like flowers.........

Wow...this was dope...your imagery was great...you had a great flow going on...great content..and I really enjoyed the last verse...and I must sat..you're probaly the most underrated emcee on this site...peace....

dope dope dope dope dope dope and....DOPE

^^uppin thanks pen &word^^

i thought you had a good progression thru the verses, the last was definately the best... havent really read much of your drops, but this was good... you really got the story across nicely... with good imagery thru it..... i liked the way you started the verse, normally i dont like that repetative thing.. but thought it worked..... all in all a good drop, well worth the read......

damn...wut can i say, theres only one word that can describe that..strait dopeness, the vocab was all there, the imagerey was picture perfect, the complexity n evrything was their..a bit different from otha songs drops ive seen cuz o the repeatin in each beginning verse but it was still dope, props to u
thanx fo droppin feedback on mine

peace

--[Flow]---
Flow was straight, had some dope rhymes in there...the structure itself was nice, good bar length..:

"See last night i was drunk, I know its not an excuse
Cause either way you look at, it still counts as abuse"

--[Vocab]--
Vocab, i felt, really started to shine through on the 3rd verse...although the first two stanza's were like, sun tryin' to shine through the clouds n' in the 3rd it broke from it's shell, you know..? Liked your terminology, & your rhymes had a certain complexity to them, not simply 3 letter rhymes...dope.

--[Concept]--
Concept was nice, some could say that it has been played, however you added a personal touch n' personal emotion to it, which i thought was brutal..you had alot of nice imagry in here, really made me come into contact with the story.

--[Overall]--
Not seen alot of your writing, but if it's anything like this, then i want to see alot more..a well deserved 4/5.. keep this quality up..you have alot of potential.

wow, this is really good, i mean like one of the best open mics i've read for a while. you had the flow down like a motherfucker, the style/strcture was brilliant. good topic and did it well.

9/10 < i'd give ya more but ya cant give 10 really, coz theres always going to be something betta :-)

fave bit =
Baby im sorry, but daddy's gotta go away....."
"I pray you grow up to be happy an free...."
"Live a good life an have a great family..."
"Treat your wife as though she is your queen.."
"And dont ever try an grow up to be like Daddy

(hot shit dawg, keep it up)

Yo, this was alrite, wudn't say it was dope, unless its a poem? I mean its good n all, but cud u really imagine ppl latchin onto this? But yo man u got some hidden skills, it was really like .. Movin? Lol. Keep it up man, who knows you may be a writer... or a poet.. Lol

hey dog thanks this song is tight so u in the military i'll be in the marine in two years sniping spec ops :thumbup:

Uppin once again! Thanks to all you so far!

Flow - pretty tight, I just noticed a line that seemed a little off every once in a while but overall good

Vocab - good, used your words well, didn't use three words to say what one could

Concept - was interesting, I didn't really vibe with it but that's just me - I think other people might. The repetition did pretty well but I think you should've mentioned the hospital earlier in verse two. 'Cause verse one and three both explained why you brought flowers but we don't get that in verse two untill the end of it.

Overall - nice verse, not my style but I can give it respect

Cool drop man...

This is my sort of piece...

So much better than writing about guns and thugs and so on... Anyone can do that... As we see from the majority of drops here in OM...

This had good consistant flow to it... Dropped in only 2 places that a saw... You had some nice vocab on this... Used your topic and elaborated on it nicely... Your complexity complimented the topic well...

This was a good drop... Havent seen anything from you before... So... Keep dropping...

And...

Hit up the OM's in my sig!

Thanks...

Pz...

Woah! This was ill. The story telling was pretty nice. This was my favorite read since i been at this site. That shit was ill. Normally i don't like choruses in texts but it went perfect. I dont normany like repetition either, but that is one of the things that made this so ill. Definatly worth the read. Keep up the good work.

Please drop feed here when you get a chance:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111511

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Originally Posted by southsideloco

damn...wut can i say, theres only one word that can describe that..strait dopeness,
peace

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Str8 dope is 2 words.lol

This was a nice drop.Keep it up

Thank you all and thank you to Archival for nominating it as Best Open Mic of the month....I appreciate all your words.......^^Uppin^^....peace

i read this previously but didn't get a chance to say what i felt because i was at school, now i can tell you that everyone else has already said what i would have..it was dope, and you deserved all the good feedback you recieved..i'll look out for you

(and on another note, me and you will have to keep battling to keep Penskills in Legends, i know you feel the same!)

Im the one who gave the longest breakdown of an OM in history... On... 'Journey'... Just to try and help get it into Legends... So ya know... :P...

good piece i liked how ya took a common thing and twisted it. I would really like to see how you deliver it in an audio

first drop i've seen of yours
pretty good
the flow was the standout for me in this..
it just read so smoothly...not many pieces on here that do that
the topic was a bit played...and the hacking wrists and shooting yourself
thats my only major complaint really..could have improved with originality
but the story itself was interesting and the verse held my interest thruout
easy reading piece
improved as it went on too..
props

very dope piece right here. i felt it for real. straight up nice. i think i started
seeing flowers. haha. yeah. excellent expression. its one of those stories that
they make movies out of. kinda cool. love the flow and the imagery. very
deep. im pretty sure it ain't true tho, seeing as how you're still alive. lol. no matter.
still dope. keep at it man.

hit this up in return plz.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111616

pz

its been a played topic....but u wrote it diff and thats
always a good thing.....the word choice/vocab could
have been better but overall this was a good peice...
flow was on key for the majority of the verse
but flow can always be improved, the structure
always be improved, check out diverses peice
"photographs...." and u see some sick struture there
the chorus was ehh/// could have been better
lyricaly wise but it was also an impact on the overall
story.
... drop smore.

^^Uppin thanks for the 2 votes on OM of the month for this piece!!^^

^^Uppin Once Again^^

^^Hello anyone out there?^^

I Think You One Of The Few That Can Make It Off Netceeing And I Hope To Read More I Got Mad Faith In You And This Reinstill To Me Hip Hop True Definition

I loved how the entire mood changed from the first to the last verse, it was nuts. It gave me goosebumps to tell you the truth. The emotion really shined out and i enjoyed it.

Wow!

who in the fuck ups a piece 6years old?

like what were you doing to have found this shit?

werd. and shit the standard was low way back.