Topical-Diverse Vs SyaNidal

Topical...
no max amount of lines but dont get out
of hand....
say checkin today and drop by sunday around 6:00...
I should drop before that but just incase...

Topic-'I Once Was'
good luck...
_-SyaNidal-_ aka... _-BugZ-BunNy-_...OUT

checkin in right now........will key up a little later on.....

o yeah 150+ posts needed to vote...
i dont want herbs that freepost voting...
sorry yo... CHECKIN' IN....
_-SyaNidal-_...aka..._-BugZ-BunNy-_...OUT

i gotta drop sometime on monday or wednesday i couldnt drop today (saturda)
cauz i had allstar game for my bball team and ill be a superbowl party
tomorrow sorry yo....
_-SyaNidal-_...OUT

all good...no worries i got a college report to finish...just hit me up..

Future-
droppin emcees... its the life I wish I had,
growin up everybody said my skillz were sad,
but now I hope n wish that I'll be ill,
i got lyrics to make cats blood spill,
nobody knows, how it goes, for me,
stop rappin never, not ever, its my life story,
so spittin to murk is what i do best,
battlin' me will put ya lyrics to the test,
skillz you dont have that u wish were yours,
rippin' ya wit lyrics like you ODin' on floors,
of drug stores, so everyone steps down,
im the king of rap throw me my crayon,
not blue one im talkin' in my hand clown,
cauz the mic is a rappers only crown,
its my weapon of choice to murder emcees,
have you on ya knees, beggin no please,
let me go i wont come back for more,
ill act like im not here just like before,
and like i said i wish this was my life,
have you droppin' like my lryics wus a knife...

Hook-
I wish I may... wish I mite,
have just one wish, I wish tonite,
lyrics to kill nobody has heard,
me winnin a battle must be absurd,
if i get this wish, i wont lie...
these fukin emcees will lyrically die!

Present-
yeah right kid im better than my future im in my prime,
spittin' ill lines, and droppin' these fukin hot rhymes,
lookin like shit to me your odds are slim to none,
attempting to battle me havin no chance you ever won,
your done, son, nobody comes at me im poisonus like toxic,
search for a line of mine, they bit so much every site will stock it,
im so damn good i dont no why the fuck i wish for less,
startin to stress, but im the best, better than the rest,
i dont need anymore im the illest rapper in the game,
straight to fame, everybody knows my fukin name,
stay the same, ill never change my ways at all,
my lines n rhymes hit emcees hard make em' fall,
im just that ill I dont no why any of you even try,
cauz you'll get murdered, n then ya wanna cry,
after oyu die, try again and come back as another guy,
battlin' me now in the present day would not be smart,
dont even start, gettin' murked but i aint even come hard,
come wit nice bars, but still cant touch me in this place,
your a disgrace, this is a battle of emcees where i set the pace,
make a mistake, dont give a fuck this battles already over,
you couldnt get lucky wit a line on me with 4 leaves and a clover....

Hook-
I wish I may... I wish I mite...
have this wish... I wish tonite,
to stay the same... and never change,
make these emcees... Rearanged,
and since I do.... i wont lie...
these emcees, yea... they already died,

Past-
so what if I wus never like by many,
i had friends and they were plenty,
no point in havin' bitches I got bros,
in the future ill be pimpin' thse hos,
doin' what i want havin fun all day,
didnt give a fuck bout shit or what you say,
i wanted to be the best all my life,
an attempt at the game is like gamblin' dice,
chances at it can be slim or an easy win,
blow the candle out the room turns dim,
had no skill at rap what wus i thinkin' ,
only time i could rhyme is if i wus drinkin' ,
give me a chance n i thought i could do it,
bit off to much and yea... attempted to chew it,
rap wusnt for me back in that time...
but I learned to rhyme, droppin' lines...
gimme the sign, and id murk a bitch...
crack ya skull then mend the stitch..,

Hook-
I wish I may... I wish I mite...
have just one wish... I wish tonite,
to be good at rap... oh god please,
cure me of... this no skilled disaese,
and if you do... I wont lie...
rappin is somethin... I will try...

Right Now-
in the present moving towards future,
styles for all which one suits yours,
away from the past somethin everyone does...
cauz the shit that happened then... is just somethin,
'I Once Was'

I once was innocent, unexposed to the harsh reality of life
Unaware of my surroundings, still free from pain and strife
Careless, carefree, a child at the very golden age of innocence
Unable to see things beyond rationality, made the difference
Until the real world slowly infiltrated my every thought pattern
Realized being sheltered was overrated, the world's what i sought after
Interaction with others, the hustle and bustle of everyday drones
But i reprogrammed my conditioning so as not to become a clone
I asked all the questions, prepared for death for curiosity killed the cat
under the impression there's more to see then what i'm looking at
The more knowledge i captured the more i had to quench my thirst
Pursuit for answers was the best idea and paradoxed as the worst
For when i was unaware, my mind was free of poison and pollution
But to maintain as naive was much more of a problem then solution
There's only so much a child's eyes can perceive or begin to comprehend
Absolutely no point in deceiving myself, life's not something to pretend
Now I can finally see everything, no holding back or being blinded
I once was somewhat secluded but now am no longer narrow-minded

short spit but i think it expressed what i needed to say

uppin this shit as well so let's get some votes please

uppin.............................................

uppin'! cmon people....
lets get some votes_--
_-SyaNidal-_

ok this was a good topical i do topical myself i'll break it down like this.......You both had very little imagery which is the key to winning a topical if you can get a person to picture in your mind what your saying they gonna feel you a whole lot more....Vocab definitly lacking on sydinals verse you said alot but it was all very simplistic when you get right down to it....It really wasn't anything that hasn't been said before...it wasn't thoughtful i made me think very little....Lots of people struggle and wanna be good MC's why should i care about you?...i think you went too much for quanitiy and not for quiality..........Diverse....You have fine multis...a lil bit deeper thought than your oppenent i see where your coming from most of the time but work on putting emotion into everyline you write ....If you do that your peotic topicals will skyrocket as far as elevation goes.....also writing abstract like you do is difficult you should really try to write topics that people can relate too....If you wanna make it hard on yourself.....though be my guest....hehe i look forward to a rematch......pz....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112087

word, thanks for the honest vote, uppin.........................

This whole thread was wack to many boring versed with no real punchlines. I felt like I was reading an essay. I dont know who to vote for because they're weren't any personals. Is this supposed to be a battle?

fucking idiot it says TOPICAL dont come in threads that u dont no whats going on fuckin freepost/\....
uppin2

haha, laughin at the kid who was confused on if it was a battle.....anyway, uppin.

uppin again....
my check 1, 2...
_-SyaNidal-_...OUT

cmon people give us some votes
stop sleeeepin....
_-SyaNidal-_...OUT
{Microphones...} My weapon of Choice...

wtf!? stop sleepin on shit...
start voting... leave a link...
_-SyaNidal-_...OUT

damn, please, people start voting on battles and shit otherwise this site is gonna go to shit....

damn uppin this shit....voting is gettin ridiculous

Uppin for these dudes.

dis was a good topical battle.....
Diverse came with good vocab...and wordplay was nice....structure was basic tho....overall...7/10
SyaNidal came with good vocab...and wordplay was nice.....structure was also very good...overall...8/10
keep it up both of u....
v/SyaNidal

Uppin for these kids.

My Assessment

Synadal: Man this was pretty average dunt think more lines = wins its wat you write not how much, your flow was aight but your spit was wat we all think not wat you specifically think make it deeper more personal pour your heart and soul into this its the only way to proove yourself , your structure aight, vocab basic , imagery none just threw words around make them run rivers of images in ppl's minds make them like extracts out of novels keep at topicals and youll excell right now your average.

Diverse: Another good read very poetic and pretty darn right excellent i felt the deepness of your pice put as DimurgiC has said in my translation dumb it down a bit not too much but not so philosophical unless its to fit the topic at hand still very good liked your multi's and vocab and youve proven that sometimes less is more.

Overall: This was one sided but talent shon through from both writers but excell at your weak points and you will advance and elevate.

My VOTE: Diverse