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16 lines
no crew votes
no hate votes
no dick riding
verse is due tomorrow aight man, I forgot to put it down
*pickin up da mic*
i'll pick you up and puncture a hole through you like a voodoo doll
blood jus falls downstream and gushs out as if it were Niagra Falls
I spit bars dat Golden Corral and Shoney's haven't even probably carried
shoveling dirt on your computer it's your final resting place to get buried
your pad and pen nigga go ahead jus set it on da ground
even though i'm on my computer I'm still gonna shut it down
my lyrics have you running around in circles like a dog chasing it's tail
home boi in yo mind keep thinking i'm a test to ace and you gonna fail
your girl told me riding your dick was like a bike with training wheels
erectile dysfunction must really make it "hard" for sensation to feel
Cashville is Trashville mainly straight trash from your trashed lyrics
your armored fortification I've cut through and lyrically pierced it
all your vital organs and signs are left all in da open
swallowing my lyrics are horespills keeping you choking
AK have unloaded da 47 leaving you mentally affected
you'll reign forever and ever on "Rap Battles Rejected"
aight.......here's mine
First off let me tell you that shit was so wack
Your flows a damn joke that dont even make me laugh
I know your ass is broke, so your coming after Cash
Ill leave you smoked like a fat pound of hash
Bite the curb you nerd, Ill murder you fast In fact
your already on my nerves, your verse is like a rash
the worst that Ive ever heard, you dont deserve a chance
So I flip 2 birds, one for you and your 2 only fans
Man I cant stand not even a gram of your ass
Ak-mixa, what the fuck kinda tag is that
your into dicksucking and flapping your trap
You aint getting nothing, no votes, not ever one clap
Your a fag and wack, go home and do the math
it's like attack of the clones each track you rap
your a down south drone, lost without a map
better stick to flippin burgers and serving fries jack
- Villin
cashvillin nothin personal but yours was tight man... uppin
uppin for votes don't sleep on dis
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Ak took this battle, ppretty onesided I thought. AK had some nice punches and metas, even tho some were a lil played. His personals weren't the best tho, but Otherwise he had a creative verse
Cash your verse didn't seem to flow at times. Some lines had a lot less sylobals then others which messed it up. You had a few ok punches, but much of your stuff was played to hell. Keep elevating tho.
Please drop an honest vote here guys. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110084
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Feeble Minded
uppin.....................
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ak got this.. really clever stuff but close overall battle..
really good battle ak had more punches that hit really
soo therefore hew wins lol.. both had good structure to
Vote- Ak
Whack vote gone.
-Axe
Ak's punches and Personals were good. I also think that Ak had nice metas.Villins verse didnt really flow, he had some good punches but could of had more. So Ak gets my vote.
peace.
Whack vote also gone.
-Axe
cash nice verse but it was a bit simple
ak ur verse was a bit more complex so ill give it to....................................
vote-ak
check my battle out please
vs outcome (tourney battle)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109556
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Originally Posted by ak-mixa
Lets get some more votes this way guys.......kinda onesided right now - villin
Both Verses Were A Little Weak...But....
Ak Got This One With Better Metas And An Overall Better Verse....
Good Try Tho Cashvillan.....You Almost Had It....
OVERALL VOTE-> AK-MIXA
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come on people be serious.....this man is wack........VILLIN takes this
uppin............................................. .................................................. .
ak had nice metas some hard hittin punchlines and overall jus ill verses
cash your shit had some nice punches and your verses was sloppy
vote-ak
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i'll pick you up and puncture a hole through you like a voodoo doll
blood jus falls downstream and gushs out as if it were Niagra Falls
goods metas not much on the punchs though....
I spit bars dat Golden Corral and Shoney's haven't even probably carried
shoveling dirt on your computer it's your final resting place to get buried
^nice line....intrestin first line ok punch in the second line
your pad and pen nigga go ahead jus set it on da ground
even though i'm on my computer I'm still gonna shut it down
^like it good wordplay...get more personal though.....
my lyrics have you running around in circles like a dog chasing it's tail
home boi in yo mind keep thinking i'm a test to ace and you gonna fail
^alright still ain't used his name.....oh well good meta...
your girl told me riding your dick was like a bike with training wheels
erectile dysfunction must really make it "hard" for sensation to feel
^hard for sensaion to feel?...intresting wordplay.....
Cashville is Trashville mainly straight trash from your trashed lyrics
your armored fortification I've cut through and lyrically pierced it
^ok line....armor peirced pretty basic.....
all your vital organs and signs are left all in da open
swallowing my lyrics are horespills keeping you choking
^okey dokey.......another meta.....
AK have unloaded da 47 leaving you mentally affected
you'll reign forever and ever on "Rap Battles Rejected"
^good punch....good close...overall an Ok verse...
First off let me tell you that shit was so wack
Your flows a damn joke that dont even make me laugh
^alright punch there...not bad
I know your ass is broke, so your coming after Cash
Ill leave you smoked like a fat pound of hash
^its a weak meta......
Bite the curb you nerd, Ill murder you fast In fact
your already on my nerves, your verse is like a rash
^ok metas are there......
the worst that Ive ever heard, you dont deserve a chance
So I flip 2 birds, one for you and your 2 only fans
^thiis is just......nothing...filler.....
Man I cant stand not even a gram of your ass
Ak-mixa, what the fuck kinda tag is that
^a weak personal.....
your into dicksucking and flapping your trap
You aint getting nothing, no votes, not ever one clap
^simplistic.........rhyme bigger words...
Your a fag and wack, go home and do the math
it's like attack of the clones each track you rap
^meh heard it b4 not bad though
your a down south drone, lost without a map
better stick to flippin burgers and serving fries jack
^well theres a personal...if he's from the south good punch...sorry though your verse was not as good as ak-mixas...close battle guys
UPPIN FOR VOTES BITCHES............too many cats sleepin on villin........im just playing games with you punk asses right now...............
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Originally Posted by skandalz18
how bout some votes the villins way.........damn
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Originally Posted by skandalz18
Uppin for more votes..........come on guys, more villinz way
ak had a few nice punches...his rhymes weren't too great but he had some witty lines...the golden caral and shoneys line was dope....vocab was decent....multis didn't really exist...but had some good punches...
cashvillin just had a really weak verse..no punches...multis weren't there..rhymes were weak...no vocab really....in my opinion he got ripped...
vote- Ak Mixa
alright, guess I'm ending this battle...
cash, wasn't bad.. could've been alot better. and u needed it to be better to take this battle from ak. Honestly, ak just had you in mostly all the catagories I can think of. His personals hit you the most, punches, very creative and original verse. I liked it alot. cash like I said, not bad.. just keep at it.
vote- ak
ak thanks for the feedback -- guess u could say I was fuckin around in that battle. was trying to rhyme everything for the hell of it. Probably should not have done it in a battle vs daz, haha.
Ight both came weak but ak got this in my eyes
punches- Both had iight punches Cash, yers were played and werent that hard once so ever,Ak Came harder and put more creativity into his punches,
Wordplay- Cash yers was very played, not creative at all, it was just pretty basic,Ak, Ight use of meta's not really the best wordplay but it was better than Cash's...
flow- Both had ight flows , wenrent really tight but they went with the structure..
Personals- Both had some good personal and somebad ones, Cash YErs were again very basic and played...You need to be more creative. some of your personals were jus worded bad, ak some of yer personals were just run ons..
Structure- Both structures were descent........Nothing really special here
Ight battle...no beef.. keep elevating
V/Ak-mixa
breakdown:
punches ak
flow ak
structure none of them were great...but cash's was better
personals ak
metas ak
multis ak
creativity ak
complexity neither
enjoyability both
overall ak
ak, even though you won, next time, try not to stretch some of ur linez so much...makes it much harder to read and a LOT less enjoyable.
cash, u got potential. work some on ur punches and flow and u be straight.
gee, i sure hope these mods don't disqualify THIS vote and say i'm d/r.