Alright...
10 lines min.
usual stuff.
i'll spit first after you checked in.
holla.
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Alright...
10 lines min.
usual stuff.
i'll spit first after you checked in.
holla.
checkin' in........................................
In...
i'll start you off by shootin a slug up yo' ass,
i'll shoot it fast,
in the time tht i'm blowin my rhymes up in ur face,
'd.liver.e'... i think u've been 'posted' in the wrong place,
dumbshit, i'm shootin slugs at a snail,
you slow and all you puttin in these threads is a sticky shit trail,
what you playin at dude? battlin' a "badassbitch" like me,
is this where u wanna say ur last words, bein murdered lyrically?
'coz ur life is over now, it's wasted nd ur soul is confused,
livin' un-known and now even ur rhymes are bein refused,
dude, you ain't wanted anywhere, so what you gonna holla back punk?
i'll leave you to rot in this thread, 'coz ur nothin' but tha ill smell comin' out tha ass of a skunk,
nd here i am waitin for you to punch back wit' ~gurl, ur just pussy, ur weak~,
well i ain't takin none of tht from a faggot-ass, thinkin' he gettin gud votes like ur votes are comin' like a leak,
when really tha only thing leakin in ur world, is tha blood comin' outta ur throat when i've posted this shit,
soo i'll leave you to drip whilst you spit back,
but don't take too long, all i'm askin for is one line to prove u wack... it's a fact.
aight yo u better get outta here before u end up hurted
u SHOWED up 4 battle, now I'll SHOW u 'lyrical murder'/
I'm like tony soprano round here, u dun want no beef
u talk 'bout gunz but u only hear em scatter over beatz/
U just like a kid reachin' out for the sweetz
which are -*just as your win*- way out of reach.../
u nuttin' but a fake claimin' u the *bad ass bitch*
for fucks sake, u're hated, fuckin' fat ass snitch/
u got the 'bad azz' bitch? well I got a 'bad ass' dick
I'll fuck that azz quick yo letz c if it fitz/
letz face it, u an ACTOR instead of a RAPPER
I put more stampz on GANGSTAZ than a postoffice MASSACRE/
I slay other rapperz... people callin me a butcher 'damn'
I'm kickin' your 'bad ass' just like bush did 'saddam'/
one 2 three showin' this bitch battlin' trickz
hocus pocus stay focused before u lose this shit/
gotta d.liver quick, gotta d.liver gooooood
gotta d.liver shit on this quitter "from the hood"/
u aint nuttin' girl... thiz shitz over, thiz shit here's mine
u probably better back to suckin' dick instead of rhymin'.../
Vote n leave linkz and I'll hit y'all back with some honest votez
Thts tight... Thts a battle... Get This voted.... Uppin'........ One.
uppin... drop some votez 'n a link with your battle.....................
Uppin............................................. ...... do a favour nd vote this.....
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lyrical murder got this his shit was more comple and his punches
was nice...his flow was str8 to...D .liver u flow was way off and
your punches didnt connect really.... Vote:LM
They both had decent verses. Lyrical Murder's structure was horrible but he had better punches that hit harder. But D had the better flow but his vocab was lacking. He started to use the same words to rhyme close to the end. LM could really work on his openers and closers though.D's flow is what won it for him.
VOTE_D.Liver.E
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109422
1. i ain't no he!!.... fair stuff though. Uppin..............
Da killa kid, u said I used da same wordz. What line r u talkin' 'bout ?
uppin............................................. ....
Uppin...... Do tha favour nd vote........ it's like that.
uppin'........... plz drop some fuckin' votez..............
uppin this shit... plz drop a vote 'n link with your battlez or whatever.. just vote already and get this shit over with!
last up... drop some fucking votez....................
d.liver nice verse, good flow and punches
lm ur verse was good 2,
it was a close battle but im gonna have to go with d.live
vote--d.liver
vs outcome (tourney battle)
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109556
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Token
thxz 4 votin but plz hit it up on the poll... thxz...... more votez plz...
uppin........leave links with your battlez..........
plz drop some votez so we can close thiz shit................
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Shit I wrote a novel and the shit got erased. Anyway
Lyrical- Your lines were a bit too stretched and that messed the floe up. You came too basic, and with too much filler. Try and be more creative with your punches, personals, and metas. Also try not to be repetative in ya words, ya used 'slugs' twice and it still sounded bad even if was only twice. Keep elevatin girl, ya get there soon. Check out Whackness Emergency Center for good battle tips and also check some battles in LLL.
D.liver.E- Good verse...kinda basic but ya did throw some good punches. Get rid of the / shit after your bars. Some good metas too, try and be more creative with ya punches, personals, and metas..some were close to bein over played. Also Stay away from the sex/gay shit as that is played to all hell.
Vote-D.liver.E
For the love of god please drop an honest vote here, bitch has been open forever!!!! thanks :) http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110513
FUCK THIS IS THE THIRD TIME IM WRITIN THIS SHIT. IF IT DELETES AGAIN SORRY GUYS, BUT NO VOTE!!!!!!!!!!
Ahh ok.
Lyrical- Your lines were a bit too stretched and that effected your flow. Also try and use less filler. You said 'slugs' twice which made ya verse sound very repetative even if it was only twice. Check out Whcakness Emergency Center for good battle tips. Also check out battles in LLL for structure tips and to see dope MCs. Your punches were sort of weak and basic. Try and be creative with yourt punches/personals/metas. Keep at it girl, you'll fo fine.
D.liver.E- You had a good flow and structure, jus take the / out after your bars. They unnecessary. had some good punches and metas, but also you cuold be a liitle more creative. Check out WEC and some elite battles for tips. You have the right idea tho.
Please drop a vote/opinion here guys. Gettin mad slept on! I took the time (3 times) for yall http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110540
~ Uppin For Tha Last Time I hope, get some votes.............. Peace ~
uppin... drop some votez, leave linkz or whatever, I wanna close thiz, itz been open for like forever...
lyrical you got skills and nice punches. you tried the eminem thang out ya self on blast to take some of his weapons. much love.
the only thing though he didn't use none of them and didn't have ta. he got a nice flow and his punches were solid. personals weren;t that good but he gets the node casue of clartiy and flow.
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what the fuck is he talkin' about? Just another Eminem-dickrider I guess... Fuck off... Uppin' 4 some votez that make sense... and make clear who he/she is votin' on...
uppin......................thiz shitz been open for way 2 long
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Word check it ....this battle was not fair..these two are not on the same level...Lyrical you need to work on uppin your vocab like hardcore.....it serioulsy my guess from that verse would be that your like.....11 or 12......and thats being nice.....you also need to throw punches it is a battle and don't talk about what you gonna do and how good you are.....yoiu nned to make fun of him more....also try using wordplay and meta4's.....
D lIver. e took this hands down he had some Ok punches and he used nice metaphors wordplay and for the most part his verse was original and interesting.........hit this up y'all if you can vote peace.......
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112087
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one more fuckin' vote, cant b that hard........ leave your link 'n shit.......
uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!
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