Okay, 10-12 lines, no bullshit, and let's make it blind drop, sound good?
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Okay, 10-12 lines, no bullshit, and let's make it blind drop, sound good?
Okay, Let's drop by 12 eastern.
Check in...............................
Shit, sorry, I was trying to say 12 pacific time, that's like 3 eastern time..
I just put this together while I was tryin to figure out what was wrong, hope you drop soon..Sorry for all the mix up..
KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go..
Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO..
I don't know this kid, but I know he's new..
Easly explained, from day one it was threw..
Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow..
Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow..
Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast..
Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past..
Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad..
Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad..
You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle..
The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile..
It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point.
My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint.
You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews
while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news.
Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused;
I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too.
If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears;
They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years.
Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse
I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst.
Sorry it took me so long. Damn, nice verse. Good luck.
You too, yeah, I had problems with my comp. Anyway, nice verse, I guess mine was okay for a first battle.
I think KLO took this one, i just thought he flowed better and had nice punches, I really like the line about the shopping list
peace
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Uppit #2 Come on people vote, I'd vote on others if I had the posts....
Uppit #3 vote damn you..............................................
Uppit #4 all I'm askin is for people to vote, I'd vote on others battles if I had 100 posts but I don't, so vote on my battle, and when I do have 100 posts I'll start voting on yours...................
Uppit #5 People need to vote on this now, this is the last up I can do, so for the love of god vote on this newbies need to get votes also....................................
I have to give this on to VanIlla for verser structure and delivery. KLO some of the shit you said could have been tight if you worked on the delivery.
outrospective...
KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go..
Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO..
^opened it decent, with an ok personal
I don't know this kid, but I know he's new..
Easly explained, from day one it was threw..
^thought this could have hit harder, quite basic
Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow..
Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow..
^ok W/P, but didnt hit too hard
Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast..
Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past..
^OK W/P again,, but ya need to work on punching
Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad..
Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad..
^quite wit'y... decent wordplay, n hit ok.... but for a closer wasnt that strong.....
It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point.
My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint.
^nice flow... hit ok... but openers need to be better
You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews
while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news.
^dont like self props in battle... and it didnt hit
Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused;
I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too.
^funny... but weak for a dis
If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears;
They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years.
^again quite wit'y, but didnt rhyme very well
Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse
I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst.
^weak punch... decent flow tho
You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle..
The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile..
^weak for a closer... you need to work on punches
all in all thought this was pretty close, but im giving it to vanilla, one or 2 personals with heavier punches... KLO, yours were too soft... vote=van
Punches: Vanilla
Wordplay: Neither
Meta’s: Vanilla
Creativity: Neither
Personals: Neither
Flow: KLO
Multi’s: Neither
Vote: Vanilla
This was an ok battle. Vanilla started the battle off wit a pretty decent verse, your first lines were kinda wack but you started to come harder close to the end. You had some pretty nice punches but your wordplay could be alot better. KLO's verse was kinda simple. He didn't have any punches, plus his wordplay was bad. I had to go wit Vanilla overall though cause his verse packed more punch.
Favorite Lines:
Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad..
Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad..
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Vanilla you had a pretty nice verse and a chance of winning until i saw KLO"S closer. Ya lines were a little simplistic at best. KLO's weren't too much more creative but it was the way he dropped em. vanilla had the better structure and flow but that won't win you a battle. KLO you need to even out your lines a bit cause it throws you off. Vanilla could've won if ya closer was a bit better, and ya punches were a bit harder.
VOTE_KLO
van
KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go..
Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO..
first line was good..2nd basically same thing
I don't know this kid, but I know he's new..
Easly explained, from day one it was threw..
not really a punch
Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow..
Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow..
not really a direct punch in the 2nd line..
Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast..
Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past..
decent punch...not bad
Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad..
Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad..
lol..good punch
You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle..
The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile..
ok closer to finish it
KLO
It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point.
My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint.
just a so-so opening..1st line was lame and no punch..2nd was just a basic punch
You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews
while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news.
punch was decent..i liked the idea
Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused;
I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too.
not feelin it..koncept wasnt good and punch wasnt either
If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears;
They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years.
another not direct punch and basic too
Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse
I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst.
another basic concept and meh punch
vote - Van..i didnt feel KLO's verse.. vans punches were harder and more complex, KLO didnt come very hard and alot of his verse was basic and not a direct punch which wasnt hard hitting
I dont have enough posts to officially vote but here's my thoughts:
Flow- Both had good flow & structure, so Id say it was a tie in this category
Punches- This is where the battle was really decided. KLO had a decent
punch or two, but most just didn't hit hard, and lacked any real
creativity. VanIlla' also didn't have any punches that were that
special, but had a good opener. Seemed
a little flat in the middle... but again he came on strong w/ the
closer. VanIlla gets this category, for using more creativity and
hitting w/ harder punches.
Personals- VanIlla gets this too, with the nice opener and because KLO
didn't have any.
Vocab- Tie. Basic from both
Creativity- VanIlla. KLO had nothing that seemed that original except
for the shopping list line. Not that VanIlla' blew hit out the
water with his creativity, but his ideas didn't feel quite as played
as KLO's.
Overall- VanIlla takes this with harder hitting punches, a good personal
to start the verse and for using more creativity.