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}life after deah{
gl to both...droping now
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12 lines max. Topic is:
}life after deah{
gl to both...droping now
shit..i gotta go for now...ill drop later....................
iight... im bk online now...
lets do this...
good luck to both...
dropping soon...
Forgone conclusions, misread lives, dropped out souls
Strived for nothin, wasted time, achieved no goals
Then comes the end of life, followed by the after-life
Ended by a knife, glorious to end a life of strife
Cindred spirit roam the country, searchin forever more
A lifetime of containment, now its yearning to explore
No more being held down, captured by shackles and chains
The soul lasts forever, yet the body has no remains
The body is left to rot, as the spirit rises out
Eager to get away, roam free, independant to run about
It is said that a spirit comes back to those that it loved
Yet how can a spirit come back to earth...
... if in life it was always unloved
aight yo here it is..... just did it now...
I was shot...put out my misery for good/
death was over my shoulders...i felt the cold...i knew i could/
now im walking as a spirit with no place to return but only gods time/
walk into the entrance of the gates of heaven...jesus sits there with pride/
Smiles at me says i have done well in my life for only him and the holy.ghost/
Though my death was pain and only hardships..only jesus said i was dope/
Who should have known...i found out jesus was talking black/
"what up gee!"/and gave me a hit on the back/
i said to him"i died arent i suppposed to get judged?"/
Jesus replied back"fuck nah dawg...This is heaven bitch..We roll in dubbs"/
I looked at jesus wit a ackward smile.....and then i started to front.../
Jesus said"man sit the fuck down and come help me roll this blunt!"/
hope yall like....
uppin this shit yo....gl to both..........................
uppin this shit yo................................2nd up..................
YO THAT SHIT WAS HOT....PO PROPHET TOOK THIS...HE MADE ME LAUGH...AND GAVE SOME CHARISMA TO GOD..AND LIFE AFTER DEATH....INSTEAD OF MAKIN IT SEEM LIKE ITS THE WORST THING TO DIE.....BUT GOOD SHIT FOR BOTH.........
VOTE-PROPHET
NOW I LAID MY OPINION....DUE THE SAME FOR ME MY BATLE LINKS ARE BELOW
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...light=jAY-nOVA
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...light=jAY-nOVA
i cant vote as im a crew member but this shit was close and i liked both verses but i tink Free took this 1............nice battle both yas but like i sed no poll vote
nice battle but as^^ said.....prophet took dis
punches: prophet
structure: free
voc: free
humour: proph
vote: prophet
no hate.....or a d/r.....dis iz a tru vote
one
hit dis battle up plz....it bout 2 close
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107625
omg... prophet... as im sure you'll agree...
Killer Emcee cant vote on topicals...
'punches: prophet'...
punches in a topical!?!? what the fuck?
vote being removed... id rather you win fair and square as im sure you'll agree...
uppin #1
yo....srry bout dat.....i look like a lozer but wa iz a topical battle??????
can u plze tell me so i dun feel dumb da next time???....lol
srryyy yall....now dat i noe wa a topical iz....id say dat freeman won...
hiz shyt gave me a good image in mah head.....n let me focus on da topic.....but prophetz waz ite...urz focused more on dialogue....not on imagery....good battle.....srry bout da vote b4...i had no idea wa a topical waz...i waz thinkin dat yall waz ritin bout each otha n how yall wuld die or sumshyt (itz confuzing)..srry bout dat doe
but mah real vote goez 2 freeman for creativity and good imagery.....
no hate.....one
Your vote is gone since you flipflopped from the two battlers.
-Axe
n im very sorry 2 free post but u mind hittin dis battle up wit an honest vote??
thnxx
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107625
^^ haha dumbass, well neway, i wont poll but i feel frees was deeper on sum real shit
and prophets was funny, creative, and also on topic
both were good, and every battle i vote on, the funniest wins (skill also counts but if its close), thats just me, i got a big sense of humour, and i aint voting cus hes my crew leader, but for the simple fact that sometimes people make topicals to complex, and not everyone understand them fully,
i wont poll this vote but my vote goes to prophet
word i onno both were ok....freeman had the more thoughtful verse but he lacked as far as dope as shit goes like...if you were tryin to be like confusious or some shit..it just wasn't quite there.....Prophets was intersestin...jesus the G ..its a thought..it was entertaining....your structure was fucked though and made it harder to read so i'm gonna go with freeman on this topical battle interesting viewpoints by both mC's no hate plz hit this up thanx...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107950
iight... well its 1-0 to me on poll... well, it is when the vote is changed to my side...
we need some real votes from people who know how to vote on a topical...
uppin #2
2-0 on poll now... once Killer Emcee's vote is fixed...
keep em comin in...
thanks for everyone that has gave feedback... its alll good...
uppin #3
Good Topical battle
Freeman--you had a great outline of this topic, you described perspectives well and had good vocab and wordplay made me really think...i wrote some what something similer but didn't hit it like that. Good verse i really enjoyed that.
P- Different aproach humerous but i felt it wasnt realilistic,jezus smoken a blunt? kinda odd lol, but unique seemed to have some emotion but nothing to major over all good verse.
But i liked freemans better as it attracted the reader to a more valuable read.
^dont sway votes freeman....that shit should be taken off..dont sway shit....and under always judges my shit the same way about structure..i dont know why but if you can read RIGHT UNDER u would know what the hell it is....he always votes against me on the same thing even when its smaller...im wonderng now...uppin 3rd time...People plz take your time to read this shit and dont d/r....
are you talking about me?
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no.............freeman is swaying votes...he did it two times...u dont sway in a battle of any type...for gods sake why the hell u goign to judge my shit like that anyhow rule...nobody has ever read a sense of humor on topical..everyone is always seiours..i wanted to change that...but it proves only some read verses
how is counting the votes swaying... its now 3-0 to me... thats not swaying...
jus admit that ive beat you... jus chill out man...
u aint beat me man..u cant get someones vote changed when they dont know wtf there doing....u swayed there mind..ur swaying votes also....THis is called swaying...U should know what swaying is....3-0 is messing wit peoples mind.....u should know that...so when peole read that...they be like..oh hes winning ill just vote him to get this shit closed...
ok... a apologise... im very sorry... ive seen other people {Vets} count the polls...
didnt think that was classed as swaying... a thought that was... 'his verse was wack, vote for mine'...
lets jus stop this and let the votes come in...
I fixed the polls... and this was your last UP... Prophet... you have on more UP.
-Axe
Free takes this... a feel that his verse had much better wordplay, and a better vocab.
It painted the picture in my head... had a interesting viewpoint aswell... 777, your verse was ok, but just didnt set it in my mind as well as Free's...
vote - Freeman...
nice battle you 2 .....................................cnt vote cus of crew.......but nice...........................................pz
iight breakdown 4 ya'll,.,., both verse's were dope iwas feelin dem both but freemans was more inventive and got say more enjoyable!
vote:!freeman..
Soz peeps 4got ma link:- http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106594
dere we go.be fair n break it down like me!
ayt freeman took this cause his stuff went better, his flow was good and structure easy 2 read and i was feelin freemans more!!
prophet's aint bad, it was funny but was harder 2 read and wasnt really feelin it
overall- freeman
freeman to me had better wordplay and his verse seemed alot more witty and
nice.. prophets verse lacked in alot of departments
so my vote goes to freeman