aight son...........
10 lines
house rules
verses due tonight at 12 est
blind spits
lets do this dawg...........
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aight son...........
10 lines
house rules
verses due tonight at 12 est
blind spits
lets do this dawg...........
CHECKIN IN...........
im about to get off so ill drop later............
good luck dawg.........
im finna get off too....i should be back by 12..............ill drop before then.............o yea...........CHECKIN IN!!!!!!!!!!!!
just so we clear....there is no feedin aight?....................
Are you ready "yo what up" you finna be exposed/
you want me to take it easy on you....i dont suppose/
i dont need you to tell me what i can do and cant/
i see right through you...you faker than a breast implant/
to finish this rap ill guess i have to improvise/
my verses hit you so hard it will knock fear into yo eyes/
afta this you gon be sweatin and breathin all hard/
ive killed you...death is what was on ya card/
i kno you pretty well...even tho we just met/
i can tell itz been hard fo you to keep ya sexuality a secret/
spit when ya ready dawg...................ill check back in lata.............................................. ...............
aight son.........i never feed hombre...........check it out..........yo, yo...........
yo ima start flippin-this-script, no need for an intro, cause everyone knows ima be rippin-dis-bitch/
im whippin-his-spit, this gay as bitch got nothin, wit his "crap" lines its obvious y hes "trippin-on-shit"/
this dudes got no hope so he steals-raps, i was callin someone else out, yd u step in, cause ya deals-crap/
u feel-that? im just ill, shawty?, nah u a fake ass gangsta, this bitch keeps his "caps lock" on so he can say hes seen "real-caps"/
my flows-tight, whereas this bitch has moved his shit to "death valley" just to prove that hes a "low-life"/
ur just below-my-might, cause ur shit just dont give "pleasure", so the only way he wins is to "blow-the-site"/
what were u thinkin when u decided to but-in, i could fill this post wit pics of knives and u still couldnt "cut-a-win"/
ill put ya guts-in-tin, my punches ull disable ya body, ill burn ya, no one wants to hear ya, so fuck-ur-skin/
just walk-this-way, uve been here before, and its time to lose again, cause my rhymes still rock-ya-say/
dude ur talk-is-gay, i mean shit, how the fuck u supposed to be good when u rap like the "hawks-play"!/
EXPLANATIONS -
1st bar - self explanatory
2nd bar - i was callin someone else out then he said hed battle, and shawty means like gangsta
3rd bar - death valley is at the lowest elevation in the country
4th bar - self explanatory
5th bar - hes from atlanta, the atlanta hawks suck ass at basketball
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UPPIN DIS BITCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
umm....what da hell you talkin bout in yo 2nd bar.....4th line...................whateva.................... ...
damn you kno what else......you broke yo own rule.............dat iz WAY ova 10 lines man..................
^^^not really.........if u count the slashes, they represent when the lines break..........you should count 10 dumbass.........dont try sway votes by sayin my shit makes since or im breakin rules..........fuck u dawg...........dont be gay like dat..........
UPPIN # 1!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LETS GET SOME VOTES UP IN HERRE!!!!!!!!!!
yeah realy you tryin to get peeps to sway for you man cuz you know you got yo ass merked...
iight
Yowhatup- tore it up ni punches and personals... just overall was ill... he gotta fuckin ill opener..
ATL- i think you need to elevate like A TON... that wasnt good at all ur punches were weak as hell and so were ur personals... get better...
VOTE-YOWHATUP
agreed with the newb...
v/yowhatup
hit this up: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107968
^^thanx for the opinions holmes............................
UPPIN # 2 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i aitn tryin to sway shit so get ya facts straight....i made a mistake and what.....i dont care bout dis dat much.........
i dun even gotta stress by how much yo what up got dis.....
itz sad really.....
punches: it obvios
flow: ^^
strucuture:atl......yo what up....u gotta werk on makin it em a lil' shorter
vote: yo what up(kinda obvious)
plze hit dis battle up......plzeeeeeee
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107625
^^^thanx for the vote..........
UPPIN # 3 !!!!!!!!!!!
LETS GET SOME VOTES MOTHAFUCKAS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Uppin # 4 !!!!!!!!!!!!!
Dont Sleep On Dis Mothafuckas!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Vote Like Mofos Biatchs!!!!!!!!!!!
Punches: Yo
Wordplay: Yo
Multis: Yo
Personals: Neither
Opener: Yo
Closer: Yo
Vote - Yo What Up
One-sided battle. ATL you need to extend your lines longer, you used about 5 words per line. Also, think up some creative punches , and flip some multis. Your verse was just too basic. Yo What Up had some hot multis that finished this battle alone.
yo ima start flippin-this-script, no need for an intro, cause everyone knows ima be rippin-dis-bitch/
im whippin-his-spit, this gay as bitch got nothin, wit his "crap" lines its obvious y hes "trippin-on-shit
Good wordplay.
aight aight,
well' it's ovious who got ripped
flow was held by what up by far
punches also
basicaly what up took this in all catagories
please don't make me brake it own to much
the problem was that what ups vere looked like it was more cuz his lines where stretched
you didn't half to...
Atl came with a decent flow. Not much wordplay and punches. Not many multis either. ATL's verse just wasnt an eypopper. Needs some elivation...
Yo had some decent multis, but some were forced. Had some hard punches, some not hard. Decent creativity. It was a cool verse.
Note:the dashes and quotation marks makes it seem like you think your readers are to stupid to motice multis, and wordplay. It's newbish. Your verse would be better withought it...
Overall, Yo got every catagory exept flow and structure, so he gets my vote
v/Yo
pleas vote on the link in my sig...
-W1
^^^aight thanx for the votes homies.........
UPPIN # 5 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LETS MAKE IT COUNT FOOS!!!!!!!!!!!
..Weak ass battle..Atl..you had some decent lines..(no I'm lying,your shit was garbage),your flow and wordplay was elementry..Yo..your shit was alot better than his shit(not that much better though)you had better punches and flow..both of ya had some really fucked up structure..fix it~~..Vote-Yo What Up
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