When my eyes are closed

My mind is distored, orthidox flow with-in
life is dimin, used to hardknocks,life is retorted
But when my eye-lids shut, I think nothing of it
quiet times, I love it, the moons trim, and light over me
Sittin staring off into space, never a minute of time I waste
old pictures, I stare at the face.. my love is a lace
Tight but not strung out enough, life is an aspect
Never retoric neglect, or flourish the dim success
rap,life,music,highs thats wat keeps me nourish'd
I carry the staff, climb the highest feets'
ride in fleets, keep members in there seats
But at home, I think off the dome - and make mouth beats
when my eyes are closed... lies fold, text is bold
Colors become beautiful majestys, useful anasty's
life becomes fantasys, things that I wish happened to me..
When my eyes are closed.... time never grow's old
things that cannot get taught, are told
Emptiness lurks inside of my body
a friend to bring happiness to me, never happiness
..... even when my eyes are closed....

quik key but has alot of meaning...

Told you on AIM, and I'll tell you here- this is dope...no matter how you look at it, it's awesome

Ill flow
Ill meaning
Ill topic

Definately a good read, legend status if nothing else...

Keep it up..I love reading :thumbup:

thanks..

damn can someone please give me some feedback...

Vis dawg i like 90% of your shit including this one my dawg keep doin what cha doin, the thang flowed together, and its the damn truth not even happiness with your eyes closed, i hear you my dawg

thanks

yo sek thanks for the legends nomination

omgggggggggggggggggggg UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

that was tight
keep up ur shit

uppin

pretty good man, i can feel ya
check out my recent flows, the gotmeaning to em as well
up em if you got any feedback

The Arrival

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...hreadid=105711

Lifeline

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...hreadid=105839

ight... upp for some reps

sighs.. up

some nice meaning in there, but the flow was off..... and the first couple of bars were unique.. if they flowed!.... but once it got past that... yeah pretty good.... nice scheme.. carried the rhyme well.....pZ....
return the favour...

it flowed tho... just depending how u read or prenounce words
thanks for a hit tho

This was an ill piece..
should have made legends I feel..
Felt your vocab usage..
I liked your idea you proposed..
props...

word.. damn u chrit!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Ill get in there soon
thanks for rep