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10-12 lines
no crew/hate/DR votes
blind spit 20 minutes after we both check in
good luck.
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Was givin ya 40 minutes...so ur rap could put up a fight!
cuz for my verse to disembowel targets...U insight!
How u guh survive...u my pick for rhyme disintegration
Lines leavin ya so cold...u bout to pack for migration!
Like Gare coleman...to diss you...I just can't resist!
cuz I can destroy ya words more...Than an athiest!
Flows hit ya like the jackpot...so fuk Lotto super 7
Just passed my 7th verse...already sent ya to heaven!
After dis...bet u b sayin "Fuk that Carlos Delgado!!!"
Cuz ma verse "Jay'ed" ya n left ya blue for tomorrow!
Where i'm from...cats use the line "You got Jay'ed!!!" when battlin...i guess its kinda dumb but it stands for u got joked!
Good luck man.
if you dont get my lines dont vote
Man your lines are weak organize your wild-scripts
Writing about toilet paper dog I know your styles-shit
You froze up with your mild-spits I’ll have some peers-merk-ya
Who’s taking the votes? You can forget about pay like volunteer workers
It’s been hot-year every bar I drop-scares
While hot lines in your verse are like your avatar there not-there
And you seeing me pay you better keep visioning
And I had to keep the lines low cause you always ‘tire’ your readers like Michelin
And you don’t have punches your lines are only talk
So watch me put this skate boarder underground like tony hawk
Pretty close but insight tried to feed and missed, dude he didnt mention toilet paper at all in his verse, he had two good punches,
hahaha dissing gary coleman no one can resist thats good shit,
you had some alright stuff just keep trying and youll get better.......punch him harder but what do I KNOW RIGHT? My Vote PaYCE for a better verse and more harder hits, close tho, just he attacked more-------------
see dog you should pay more attention i hate when people do that
"Pretty close but insight tried to feed and missed, dude he didnt mention toilet paper at all in his verse, he had two good punches"
look in his sig he has a verse named toilet paper thats were my line came from damn newbies
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insight lost right away with his, if you dont get it, dont vote bullshit, what does he think we are all idiots, plus his shit wasnt even that deep, i thought mayb he was goin to pull off some deep nas type shit, but he came with that dumb tire line and really that just capped off his whole verse that was boring something awful
stfu you wack newbie i said it for a reason and someone still didnt get my line and voted so obvioulsy people are idiots
Was givin ya 40 minutes...so ur rap could put up a fight!
cuz for my verse to disembowel targets...U insight!
Ehh.. its decent not good 4/10
How u guh survive...u my pick for rhyme disintegration
Lines leavin ya so cold...u bout to pack for migration!
Weak and Newbish.... but i'll give you something.. 5/10
Like Gare coleman...to diss you...I just can't resist!
cuz I can destroy ya words more...Than an athiest!
What the Fuck?! 1/10
Flows hit ya like the jackpot...so fuk Lotto super 7
Just passed my 7th verse...already sent ya to heaven!
Weak and wack..... 3/10
After dis...bet u b sayin "Fuk that Carlos Delgado!!!"
Cuz ma verse "Jay'ed" ya n left ya blue for tomorrow!
probably your best punch, but its weak 5/10
Overall: 18/50
Man your lines are weak organize your wild-scripts
Writing about toilet paper dog I know your styles-shit
Poorly worded... but its weak 5/10
You froze up with your mild-spits I’ll have some peers-merk-ya
Who’s taking the votes? You can forget about pay like volunteer workers
WhAt?!?! 0.10/10
It’s been hot-year every bar I drop-scares
While hot lines in your verse are like your avatar there not-there
Your best punch 6/10
And you seeing me pay you better keep visioning
And I had to keep the lines low cause you always ‘tire’ your readers like Michelin
Wack and played 3/10
And you don’t have punches your lines are only talk
So watch me put this skate boarder underground like tony hawk
*no comment* .90/10
Overall: 15/50
Close but both were weak as hel.... P gets it .......^
aite battle breakdown... ill rate each 2 lines out of 10, based on creativity of each line, use of personals, effictiveness of the punch, ue of wordplay, and 10 additional points for good consistant flow or good use of multi's...
Payce
Was givin ya 40 minutes...so ur rap could put up a fight!
cuz for my verse to disembowel targets...U insight!
i can see what ya trying to do with the personals you have, but didnt really put the idea across to make it effective... simple end of line rhyming doesnt impress me... 2/10
How u guh survive...u my pick for rhyme disintegration
Lines leavin ya so cold...u bout to pack for migration!
a bit better than ya last, punches a bit more direct, but no real creative idea's, not so effetive, but i dont count "tion" rhymes as multi's... 3/10
Like Gare coleman...to diss you...I just can't resist!
cuz I can destroy ya words more...Than an athiest!
this just doesnt make sense, what does gary coleman have to do with this? an athiest destroys words? what? this was horrible, i cant give you a single point for these lines... 0/10
Flows hit ya like the jackpot...so fuk Lotto super 7
Just passed my 7th verse...already sent ya to heaven!
this was really poor too, lacked a punch, any creativity, didnt make sense, it seems your more concerned of making it ryhme with one word, than the actual content of the lyrics... 1/10
After dis...bet u b sayin "Fuk that Carlos Delgado!!!"
Cuz ma verse "Jay'ed" ya n left ya blue for tomorrow!
again this doesnt have any relevance to a punch or personal, indirect, it didnt even have end of line rhyming, so this doesnt score well... 1/10
really weak verse, had no wordplay, no creative idea's, no multi's, personals didnt really work, punches were lacking, im finding it hard to say positive things, elevate... a lot...
so for the verse overall it gets... 7/50
additional points for flow/use of multi's = ya flow was okay thru this piece, consistant, but lacked multi's, so only gets +4
PaYce: 11/60
U.Insight
Man your lines are weak organize your wild-scripts
Writing about toilet paper dog I know your styles-shit
average line, i see what ya tryna do with the shit and toilet paper, but indirect and irrelivant really, but you get a bonus for creativity and using multi's... 4/10
You froze up with your mild-spits I’ll have some peers-merk-ya
Who’s taking the votes? You can forget about pay like volunteer workers
i liked this line, finished the line with a witty punch, i see how you followed ya multi's thru from the last too... nice... 6/10
It’s been hot-year every bar I drop-scares
While hot lines in your verse are like your avatar there not-there
lol this was a nice personal, good to actually see you being creative with ya lines, kinda weak opener but good finish... 6/10
And you seeing me pay you better keep visioning
And I had to keep the lines low cause you always ‘tire’ your readers like Michelin
this was a really creative line, kinda played, but you had good use of wordplay in this, your bringing a good complex style to ya verse and will score well in the overall battle... 6/10
And you don’t have punches your lines are only talk
So watch me put this skate boarder underground like tony hawk
nice way to end the battle, nice direct punch, good use of wordplay, and youve kept ya rhyme scheme consistant too... 6/10
your verse was a lot more complex, had good punches in pretty much every line, liked ya use of personals, some relly creative lines and good use of wordplay, all polished off with some good multi's, you still lack that bit of edge in ya verses like your openers are weak, maybe some more personals would help you out, but you should be okay, try battling people on a higher level next time...
overall for your whole verse you got... 28/50
additional points for flow/use of multi's = flow was okay, some lines were a bit stretched, but ya multi's made up for it, so ill gve you +7
U.Insight: 35/60
so as you can see,quite a one sided battle... U.Insight gets my vote...
"Like Gare coleman...to diss you...I just can't resist!
cuz I can destroy ya words more...Than an athiest!"
What does an athiest do to God's words...they destroy them!! Gary Coleman is a midget...who can resist not dissin him
No wordplay???
After dis...bet u b sayin "Fuk that Carlos Delgado!!!"
Cuz ma verse "Jay'ed" ya n left ya blue for tomorrow!
Carlos Delgado plays for the Toronto Blue Jays...think about it
"Flows hit ya like the jackpot...so fuk Lotto super 7
Just passed my 7th verse...already sent ya to heaven!"
Der is a T.V show called 7th heaven, what is lotto super 7...the jackpot...what is the phrase used when win the jackpot "I hit the jackpot!"
Think voters think...I beg u 2 plz
Maybe I should just explain every punch every battle....
Uppin
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Originally posted by PaYce
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payce takes this beacuse in all honesty they were both kinda letdowns........... but payce had some better stuff in my eyes...flowed better...i just think out of the two payce was tighter.
forgive me if you guys think im hating.........its just my honest opionon
peace