nuclear concept: my writters block is iller than you

replied to impressive reads from
echo
meters
masta c

Yo I’m one of the most dangerous weapons ever created-
Who else fire slugs from the mug?
alone with leaving microphones? insinerated.
so many haters on my shit braggen-
they iller then me but laggen.
I should rename my dick the bandwagon.
Spit 9 like a magnum-
with the calibur and full clip plus plated platinum.
Its like gasoline flows through my veigns.
to my saliva glands then expand to my brain..
Where its suatined until I bust leaving me dehydrated and drained.
Have you wondered the equivilent of the words that ive said?
How many flows I spit equate to filling up dry river beds?
I could alter the earths ¾’s aquatic percentage spitting this ill-
Basically those who cant swim die if they cant adapt gills.
That’s the same way I do fakes and the real-
Cause they realistic life is just an act like alley macbeal.
When you back track my reign start around 1979 b.c.-
And the legacy between till 2003 A.D.-
That was the rebirth of me-when I resurrected myself to be the illest-
Not just an image- but in the flesh so you can feel the realness.
Punchlines take literal meaning…contact-
as lyrical battles become physical combat-
that result to asophagous collapse.
Saying you consitantly ill …..you’re a mother fucken lie-
3 hot rhymes out of 14 makes for a fractional m.c. divided by pie.
Im sick and tired of the whack feedback from the slack raps.
Yall should form an association-
‘the Haters ‘ for short tellen me I lack structure when you lack foundation.
I’ll have you coming up bleeding-like a woman vaginal region-
During minstrol secretion-for at least a minimum of 3 weeks a season.
My rhyme is the reason-
these wanna b’s ending up with 3rd degree lesions.
Look ……………if I ever said liked you on purpose-
Is cause of my compassion for poverty you fakes is worthless.
And I aint bragen-but imagine-
with so many people jumping on my dick….
Think to yourself…..why NONCENTZ this twist when he rappen?
Cause I like to buck at dumb fucks…….
my verbal shots leave hands and guns clappen.
alot of you will read the and bitch about the structure-
but it flows for me so next text will form the words..
FUCK YEA!!!!!!!!!!

uppin

I'm very impressed with your rhymes. Do you use a rhyming dictionary or is it just off the top of your head?

I should rename my dick the bandwagon.
Spit 9 like a magnum-
with the calibur and full clip plus plated platinum.
Its like gasoline flows through my veigns.
to my saliva glands then expand to my brain..
Where its suatined until I bust leaving me dehydrated and drained

This was some hot wordplay...i like the dick bandwagon line that shit was ill as fuck...nice wordperfect uppin this piece for my bro

strengths: you rhymed the whole way through and keep the same flow too which is really good and thats what I like to look for in these types of things.

Weaknesses: Seems a little drawn out in most areas, but besides that I never really found anything wrong with this one.

Conclusion: Good flow, Good rhymes, pretty good all around with the exception that it was a little drawn out in some area but keep up the good work because I can see you becoming a prettyphat freestyling rapper.

thank you to everyone nacho i re read this and i agree with you i did draw out more than i should of and lysistrata no dictionary i only give myself 20m minutes to let thoughts come out on to a verse so i rush often the words just come to me especielly when i got canibus in the background to listen to

Not a bad piece here man.. Seemed like the flow was written to an audio otherwise id think the structure was off.. Multi's were nice.. Lyrically this stood out to me.. Nice job man keep at this shit..Peace

HOLLA

as usual the content was good...but the flow drifted in places...some places it seemed to almost stop....maybe cos the way some lines are ended, without a rhyme being followed onto the next line....but as usual other than the drop in flow..damn good verse...pZ twin.

thanks this was written to audio all my stuff is

UPPIN

i was feelin it...........while it was a lil drawn out, the flow seemed to be pretty good once i caught on to it............the vocab was nice.........the wordplay shined.........there was some ill mulits in there..........overall this was an ill drop..........keep postin homie........

yo word, check ya crew tryout forum dawg.........

really enjoyed this.......loved the wordplay.....flow was great....structure was good......meaning and topic were consistant as hell.......i liked it alot....very impresed w/ rhyme scheme and your effort....
9/10

hit my shit up.......i'm droppin one soon....

Ill shit daddy as always. Don't anybody drop open mics like you do. Good to see your still active. Hey how come you don't holla at me? :) Happy new years I can't wait for you to get back to the states. Peace and love...

Pretty good, keep it up

this was really good, the flow was on point some nice lines very creative and thought out had a lot of good detail keep it up m,an good work

if ye got time peep my new open mics

WORD THANKS

Once Again. . I'm Feelin Shit From You WP. . I Kno I Said Somethin Bout A Collab A While Ago. . I Really Wanna Drop Somethin Witchu. . I Like Ya Style. . Content Was Dope. . Rhymes Were Very Nice. . Multi's Good As Usual. . Flow Drifted, As Did Ya Thoughts It Seemed. . But For The Majority, You Was On Point. . Keep Um Droppin. . N Send Me A PM Bout A Collab Cuz.

- Return The Favor. . This Piece Is Probly Up Ya Alley http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...hreadid=103327 Good Look -

This was fuckin sick with deatail the flow was NICE and it was really creative... i was feeling this... wordplay was very good as well

9/10

return the favor...drink liquor from a chalice

UPPIN

good and lengthy. but one bit did not make sense at all. it was just a filler, and didnt fit into your concept...

I should rename my dick the bandwagon.
Spit 9 like a magnum

...and man was your spelling bad. wtf? are you, like, three years old or somethin?
menstrual was obviously your worst, shows you aint got a woman gee, thats fo sho.

6¾/10

anyways, no hate, just wasnt as impressed as the rest of these reppers. peace one...

strait illness playa

i was feelin this peice too... its ok for crew to give feedback too right??? well if it ain't... FUCK'EM.. FUCK'EM IN THE ASS... cuz this ish deserve it fa sho... nicness dunny... keep killin it

Caesar On3... (on yeah my bad not gettin back to you on that PM on that Collabo)