If you are looking to broaden your battling abilities, post in here describing exactly what you need help with and we will do our best to assist you in achieving your best.
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If you are looking to broaden your battling abilities, post in here describing exactly what you need help with and we will do our best to assist you in achieving your best.
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can someone tell me what to improve on...i will appreciate it..
anyone wana help a rookie
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Sorry about the delay, didn't happen to see this until now.
One thing I see about your verses are the flow gets sketchy often. If you used multies, I feel your flow would tighten up and get better. Some of your personals seem a bit played as they only focus on names, try researching some of their other stuff (as you did in the King battle) but make your punches more solid.
You definitely have potential, just keep working on it.
I have a problem. I keep making statements, how can I prevent that? And how would you describe a metaphore?
I also dont really know how to come up with concepts? Could it be anything or does the person I battle against needs to be involved with it.
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How do i make my 1-2 punch creative and with sting
Courtesy of Dictionary.com
Metaphor - a figure of speech in which a term or phrase is applied to something to which it is not literally applicable in order to suggest a resemblance
Example: “A mighty fortress is our God.”
Concepts can come from anything... Wording it to pertain to your opponent is the keyQuote:
Originally Posted by Bos
Find a solid concept, make it pertain to your opponent. The best thing to do is write a verse against your opponent, identify your best bar/punch and use that.Quote:
Originally Posted by Mackzimuz Rayge
Aight, thanks dude
Not a problem.
Can I contact you anytime here? Im part of a crew which helps me great, but it is also useful to hear others advice.
Yes
Aight cool
Wow
Wow?
yooo, I've had a few battles just been gettin used to dis, n realised u need to do ya research on da nigga ya battlin etc. but still cnt get why my last sets bin rated so weak... for example i battled a dude in the AAFES n used this
Ur not street ur a family guy, send another up,
Monster, please, u put a pic of ya mother up,
betta cover up, like dis was battle ground trainin,
Ass 4 money only thing dis nigga exchangin,
Won't go racist, fuck a whitey fuck a blackie,
Im british, so if u wanna hit aim for an iraqi,
Sick of playin games, now barz got me-bored,
Only time dis bitch see f5's on a key-board,
try fly, U won't fly high with any rhymes,
Ur just a pussy who watched top gun too many times
but basically got told it wuz shit lol I like dis site dude, any chance of some help? Peace
Battle link 4 reference
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I need help with coming up with better concepts and executing punches. I'm fine with setups, flow and multies pretty much....
But it's like I'll come up with some really good ideas and the wording is either, well, too wordy or I just don't quite finish it right. I actually have a lot of concepts and a good vocabulary I just need help with wording and flipping things around.
Maybe someone could give me some concepts as an example and see what I come up with, then critique me. I'd appreciate it. Thanks guys
try coming with your punchline first and then get to the setup.
you have to make concepts a combination of metaphors, wordplays/nameplays, personal (makin fun of their avy, title, sig, profile, any previous quotes he may have made, and if you stay here long enough youll get to know people and have more personals on them).
think of a concept like "over your head" (I find phrases/sayings and idioms are a good thing to add in a punchline)
so over your could mean hes short, but also stupid, or hes low on the totem pole of skill.. shitty example but think of a decent concept then draw a box and on the outside of that box write all the ideas you can associate with it. once youve juiced it you should be able turn it into something.
Ok cool thanks man I appreciate it
anybody looking for honest feed tag me on their post and I'll do the best I can to tell you why your shit is fucked up.. no bullshit.
Help me please. Need to elevate again
^hope some of that helps a bit. Do some research on who ever the top guys are such as Salamander, Alphabet, King, Architype, Barcotic, Feeble Minded, Tim, $pitacular, Born 2 Kill, Beyond, King, God of War, Cry, John Hensley, and you are bound to find some really good stuff for research and how to formulate proper hit.
anybody willing to help me elevate. im always told my setups, concepts and multies are good but I need help with the wording a bit, and mostly just hard hitting punches. I setup good, then my punch comes too lax. I have great ideas and concepts, so idk if my shit is too wordy or its just the way im saying it. Maybe I need to be more direct, or indirect? anybody willing to help id appreciate it.
send me your best verse via PM.. I'll review it some time tomorrow morning and post it here.
lol but in all seriousness tho, I'm not really a texthead but most of the comments on my 1-2 last week was bad wording. I always rewrite my concepts so the setup ties into the actual punch, so how do I word shit better than that??
PS that architect track is nice
anybody else with good examples of punches? or elevation tips
Yeah give me some tips, pros
for this I will put your bar side by side with an experienced battler, in this case Ill nik a used the madden nameplay in LLL just the week before so it works perfectly to help you see what the differences are in the wording and how he targeted this concept.Quote:
Originally Posted by soul purpose
first thing you notice, he started his setup punch with good multies that set the flow to his bar. It wasn't anything that stood out as crazy but it helped the transition into his second line by making it run smoothly, he probably didn't even take more then a few seconds to think of it so it feels more natural when you read it out laud. his second line used a cliche' line in, "pushing your buttons".. its a common phrase that he went for the flip on, there are a lot of ways that he could flip a phrase (the first way you find usually isn't the best because it may mean that its played, rewrite it multiple times till it feels as clever as possible). He finishes the thought with Ive been killing madn since sega genesis. In this case wording makes a difference, he didn't use "madden" as he knows that using his real name would make this read more personal. His approach was to use a cliché line with misdirection and a good simple flow that will appeal to most voters.Quote:
Originally Posted by Ill Nik A
notes to take from this,
1.) take the off route, assume everything you are writing may have been done before and think of fresh ways to do them.
2.) think like a battler, not a writer.. is this punch that you are writing really tarring this kid down? why not? is the wording too soft, does it feel like it could misinterpreted as me complimenting him, could it be harsher by adding some name calling?
3.) How do you transition a line into the next line best, when is it ok NOT to have the setup line support the execution line?
4.) If I read a line out laud, does the wording feel stretched out or not long enough, are the syllable counts close or can I get away with slightly going away from the count for this punch.
Forgot to mention he was battling madnkrazy
join the 1-2 and be active in the cypher, I see guys in there who are actually getting better each week.. every time some one replies to you, you get the sense that you have to top that guy, cyphers are the best way to elevate and compare yourself to the competition.
You've been on a hiatus - but you didn't return that nice!
So when I'm rhyming with flare - I'll put 'Wine In The Air' like First Class Flights!
just an example