Under Dogs Rebelion

were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution//
races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution//
solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders//
like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers//
im teachin two to learn four,how to resolve in such a violence//
cuz for one im sick of poor handlin cause,keepin us silent//
what kind of reign makes slayin people some kinda sport to keep em happy//
theyre making slaughter out of babies,theyve barely grown out theyre nappies//
we see theyre armys wearin armoure, asif theyre scared of sudden pain//
courage is lost like zimbabwes farmers, or a trick by david blaine//
theres little action in theyre brains,so sudden thought is our advantage//
were causing hords of severe damage, by using simply designed old tactics//
thoughts of victorious days are frantick,chains dissapear from mental prisons//
one race mixed up makes one great kingdom,instead of sides,like off a prism//
they were the greater of both sidesbut little thought ended their reign//
our easy laws are here to obide that means lifes ride is much lesser lame//
the game of torture has now gone, living today is a time of goodness//
an easy reign is now so long, thanx to a little tribe of hoodlums..!!

damn, that was dope bruv.
you got madd talent. your pretty sick

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were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution//
races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution//

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your complexity its earily similar to ricochet klashnekoff, great opening and it flowed propa sta.

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solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders//
like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers//

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damn, dis pretty dope, your multis is stronger through out the whole peice, i could tell you took your time with this.

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im teachin two to learn four,how to resolve in such a violence//
cuz for one im sick of poor handlin cause,keepin us silent//
what kind of reign makes slayin people some kinda sport to keep em happy//
theyre making slaughter out of babies,theyve barely grown out theyre nappies//

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nice message to people listening, no frontin bullshit here, this is rap and the flow and multis is raw

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we see theyre armys wearin armoure, asif theyre scared of sudden pain//
courage is lost like zimbabwes farmers, or a trick by david blaine//

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i think you came a little weak here, cudda been improved abit, seemed like you added it for the length

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theres little action in theyre brains,so sudden thought is our advantage//
were causing hords of severe damage, by using simply designed old tactics//
thoughts of victorious days are frantick,chains dissapear from mental prisons//
one race mixed up makes one great kingdom,instead of sides,like off a prism//

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nice attack on the ignorant bastards, who's mind are complete butters, and have no intention elevating, nice line der

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they were the greater of both sidesbut little thought ended their reign//
our easy laws are here to obide that means lifes ride is much lesser lame//
the game of torture has now gone, living today is a time of goodness//
an easy reign is now so long, thanx to a little tribe of hoodlums..!!

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again, this is a great overall read, your flow came sick, and reminded me of ricochet klasnnekoff's message telling. wah blow you mos def got skill. overall a great read and all. keep uk alive bruv

Thanx man.....

4 real...

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shit was tight go easy on my piece dawg im only a shortie. 14 yrs old seeing this shit. i could rap like u it's just i took this one easily. i could topically crush u ne day. and i aint talkin bout no battle. just comin up wit a topic, and rappin bout it. lil' challenge, lil snack for the dawg come up to the big plate

LMFAO....

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Lmao at that yank tosser. .

Flow was strong in this, nice use of internals, would be dope if you turned it into an audio piece, vocab was pretty good in this, not over-done or anything, stayed onpoint, opener was pretty nicely worded,

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the game of torture has now gone, living today is a time of goodness//
an easy reign is now so long, thanx to a little tribe of hoodlums..!!

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^ Liked that quite a lot, pretty funny but true, lol. All in all not a bad piece.

Cam Likes. :)

thanx man...


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Ayo patna.. shit was dope and on-point. Flow was crisp and made the read easy. Nice multis and vocab, had the vocab there, but didn't over do it like some dudes tend to .


were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution//
races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution//
solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders//
like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers//

^^ Dope. Loved the pagons line, caught my attention fosure.

I'ma have an O.M. up lata, Dear Mom and Dad, peep that when it get's up and keep droppin the dopeness bro.

-Formula.

thanx man...
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