Lost Ones Verse

I got...nothing but my thoughts sitting here alone
Thinkin' how I became a damn product of a broken home
It's like nothing here was left for me
My own family neglected me
But how am I to start my own without that seed to plant that tree
They say it's time to move on they just thoughts
How am I supposed to hide these scars, from all the wars that I fought
I lost shit left and right from me
Sometimes cried myself to sleep
Held that pain inside heart and broke myself down mentally
I can't stress it enough of what I been through
New wounds to a broken heart, life was never meant to be so simple
I'm tired of fucking crying or better yet even trying
There's no words of what she meant to me
But I guess that bitch was lying
But all this pain and heartache I'ma pull through and make it by myself
Just to be a better man for myself
No more fucking struggling, bottlin' up and just bubblin'
Keep it real wit myself no more falling back again
But I..

you could work on making your bars flow smoother,im learnerning to do that myself,like if you put it to a beat some bars would be off beat,i think it was an alright piece though other than that pretty much it had feeling.

I take slight pauses at some points to stay on beat, I just didn't emphasize them while writing it, but thanks man

ya it def had some deepness even though i feel like this oh my life was so bad I grew up with no father aso is really played. i mean if you really had a bad childhood you got a right to write about it but i don't enjoy stuff like that anymore. yet you executed quite nicely so stay up.

return the favor plz